[Report This]Date: December 12 2015 7:35 AM Title: Chapter 17. Resistance
Great chapter! This is what I was waiting for, conflict! Not a one-sided slaugher. Things are getting interesting again, I'm giddy with excitement for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm glad that you liked it. Finally the army managed to put some thought into a coordinated response to Kelly. Things are accelerating towards the end... I hope that you will enjoy next chapter too!
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: December 12 2015 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 17. Resistance
Oh boy! Is the nuke going to make her bigger?! She took out so many of the military and that nuke just took out the rest. Loved what she was doing to the military haha. Sad that we are getting closer to end, but the last couple chapters have been amazing!!
Author's Response:
I'm glad that you enjoyes these last two chapters. The story is getting to its end, but the ending will be intense :)
As for what will happen to her... well, as usual I won't advance anything. What is your bet?
Cheers!
Date: December 12 2015 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 17. Resistance
I hope Kelly grows to a size so large she dwarfs Everest. Just to throw everyone off.
Author's Response:
So, you're assuming she'll grow... ;P (to a pretty damn big suggested size, but the way...). Of course, something like that would throw people off, no doubt...
I hope you enjoyed the chapter. As usual, thanks for the feedback!
Cheers!
Date: December 09 2015 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
Review 101!
Not as important as the 100th but important nonetheless!
I can't help wondering what K's going to do when she finds out that Lisa is still not back in Hollner. Or if/when she finds Casey at her diminutive size. Either that will make her amused or fearful...
Assuming NONE of the Nations agree to her terms, what will she do then??
I can picture it. This cocky realist speaking to her through a microphone:
"No matter how much power you have, you will never be able to convince the world to surrender. You are not a goddess but a freak made from a test tube. And whether they know that or not, is irrevelant. Because no matter how unlikely it seems, that that they can win, no matter how many people die... they will never stop fighting. It's human nature. Liberty is more important to us than life, because what is life without freedom of choice?"
Damn, that speech would be nice!
Author's Response:
101th is not bad either!
Well, you are assuming Kelly is going to find out about Lisa and Casey. Who knows what will happen? Well, I do. And you will... in four weeks.
As for your speech and your reflection: it's true enough. It's not in human nature to yield or give up in front of oppression. This is probably the reason why Kelly keeps getting attacked, even when some of the attempts are quite laughable. Sooner or later the people are going to find more effective ways to hurt her. Of course, this does not prevent her from considering herself so powerful that all resistance is futile, but there is a little bit of delusionality induced by her size in there, as we have discussed in some previous reviews.
Anyway, four weeks to go...
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: December 08 2015 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
100th review! Didn't notice I skipped this chapter. I wonder what will happen to Kelly if she gets shrunk? With all the people she killed and all the damage she caused? She didn't expect crazy worshippers? She's a living goddess! Lol.
Glad to see she is still able to enjoy the city haha. Will the people be able to shrink her too? Not too much left, whats gonna happen now?!
Author's Response:
Well, congratulations on the 100th review! I'm glad it was you (not that I pushed for it :P)
Well, the scenario of what would happen if Kelly is shrunk is definitely an interesting one, isn't it? I assume that you mean what would happen if she is not put down immediately after it, which would be a logical enough possibility as well. I guess this question will be answer (or won't, depending on how the story finishes) in four weeks.
Kelly never really expected any worshipers. She considers herself a goddess, but in a different way than that. She actually made it clear during the "press conference" in her palm, back in Washington.
And of course, she is still able to enjoy a city, once she is calm enough between attacks to do some sightseeing.
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: December 08 2015 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
Chapters like these are my guilty pleasure. I love stories that can mix up these chapters in with a decent story. Interesting to see Kevin is still alive. Did they finally find a solution to get the girls small? Are all the girls gonna go back to being small? (I would mind if one of them stayed big ;) )
I was hoping to be the 100th review, but 99th is cool too. As always, great job !
Author's Response:
I'm glad that you enjoyed this chapter. I had guessed you would. I don't know if you were expecting Casey to get small once again (it was one of the surprises I had in stock).
Next chapter is going to answer some of your questions (not all of them, of course :P). There are still 4 chapters left, and by the end of the story, then all your questions will be answered for sure.
As for the 99th review... you still have the chance to be the 100th is you want. I don't think you reviewed Chapter 15 ;P
As usual, thanks for the feedback and the encouragement.
Cheers!
Date: December 06 2015 8:08 AM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
¡Oh Dios mío! Como si esta historia no podía ser más loco ! Yo sabía que Casey conseguiría encogido por los viales reductor , pero ella todavía poseo la fuerza unatural y durabilidad ! Además ... ya que ella sólo comió un montón de gente , ¿no habrían estallar fuera de sus entrañas ? La lógica no trabaja aquí! Y creo que era necesario llegar tan en los detalles de sus acciones. Es mejor mostrar la matemáticas después de la ciudad y, posiblemente, pasar a otra sección de la historia.
So much for Google Translate. What I meant to say was:
Oh my God! As if this story could not be more crazy! I knew that Caseywould get shrunk by the reducers , but she still possesses the strength and
durability unatural ! Also ... since she only ate a lot of people , would they
have not bust out of her gut? The logic does not work here! And I think it
was unnecessary to get that into the details of their actions. You better show
the aftermath of the city and possibly move to another section of the story.
So what's your next chapter going to be about?
Author's Response:
I'm still trying to guess what your intention using Google Translate was... I'd say my English is much better than Google's Spanish, so if the purpose is to communicate I'd suggest sticking to English from now onwards...
As for your comments: glad to know you knew what was going to happen. I don't remember you mentioning, but I guess you know what will happen in the remaining 4 chapters of the story as well.
As for the people she ate: you can consider that they are either digested or part of her when she shrinks, whatever explanation suits you better. Otherwise, no shrinking method in the world would be effective unless the subject has not eaten in 24 hours or so (and they would need to come with instructions similar to the ones for medicines).
As for your suggestion on going straight to the aftermath: it was a possibility, but I think that the one I chose works best. In the end, part of the interest in this chapter was suprising all those readers that, unlike you, did not know what was going to happen. This required investing significant time in "Casey in the city" and even bringing in the deception of the Millenium Tower still having its spike...
Next chapter will be the beginning of the end ;)
Cheers!
Date: December 06 2015 6:31 AM Title: PROLOGUE
Hey, just translating what iHategiants666 said since i am a native spanish speaker(some of the text is kinda confusing though):
"Oh my God! Like if this story couldn't get any more crazy! I already knew Casey would be shrink by the shrink vials, but she still has a unatural strenght and durability! Also she ate a lot of people, should they explode their guts? There is not working logic here! And i think it was needed to reach the details in their actions. Is better to show the maths of the after city and, possibly, go to another part of the story."
Author's Response:
Oh, don't worry. I'm a native Spanish speaker as well. iHategiants666 is not, which is why it was quite a nonsense that he used Google Translate to send the message to me. While I more or less understood the context, parts of the message did not make sense, so I decided not to invest too long on replying (he knows I can understand Enlgish much better than Google can translate into Spanish, so I can only guess what her intentions doing that were...)
Anyway, I hope you are enjoying the story more than him :)
Where are you from, by the way?
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: December 05 2015 9:43 PM Title: PROLOGUE
Wow wow wow . .Casey is just a freaking nightmare on wheels, gotta admit I really thought she was going to get killed off for a second there. She maybe more than a match for the average human, but for now she's definitely out of the running against Kelly and Lisa for the time being.
Author's Response:
Well, this entire chapter was about playing with reader's expectations and assumptions and trying to bring the twists in the last moment :)
As you mention, Casey is out of the Kelly's and Lisa's league. Her current strength is barely enough to give her an edge over "regular" humans in her new quest for getting her size back.
I hope that you are enjoying the story so far.
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: December 05 2015 7:16 PM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
So even at normal size these women are dangerous killing machines! It really is starting to look like this is a DBZ scenario where the only way to kill the enemy is to vaporize them into nothing. I wonder if the relatively super strength and healing factor only applies to them when they human sized because I don't remember Lisa magically healing from her wounds when she got her ass beat by Casey.
Author's Response:
Well, Casey is still dangerous at normal size, even if not remotely as dangerous as she was when she was big. She is stronger and faster than a normal human would be, but not in a "kryptonian scale". She is not invulnerable, and there are many ways she coudl be neutralized besides vaporizing her...
Having said this... Casey is right now one of a kind. She has such a mix of chemicals inside her that it's hard to say where the effect of her reduction and current strength is coming from. Still, when comparing what happened to Casey with Lisa, one needs to take into account that Lisa took a beating by someone not only much bigger than her, but also "blessed" with the same type of super-strength. In reality, the fact that Lisa was alive by the end of the beating is already quite a proof of how much endurance she has. She is still quite bruised, anyway.
Anyway, as usual, thanks for the feedback!
Cheers!
Date: December 05 2015 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
¡Oh Dios mío! Como si esta historia no podía ser más loco ! Yo sabía que Casey conseguiría encogido por los viales reductor , pero ella todavía poseo la fuerza unatural y durabilidad ! Además ... ya que ella sólo comió un montón de gente , ¿no habrían estallar fuera de sus entrañas ? La lógica no trabaja aquí! Y creo que era necesario llegar tan en los detalles de sus acciones. Es mejor mostrar la matemáticas después de la ciudad y, posiblemente, pasar a otra sección de la historia.
Author's Response:
Man... Google Translate (or whatever you used) really did a very poor job in the Spanish translation (of course, I'm assuming that your original text made some sense...) ;P
I'd reply if I could guess what you wanted to say...
Cheers!
Date: December 05 2015 1:55 PM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
Interesting. So she is now shrunk, but it seems she may well be super powered, in a sense. The world can't catch a break it seems, though its far better then her being a giantess I suppose, XD
Author's Response:
Well, she's not THAT super powered. She is quite stronger and faster than the average person, but not in a kryptonian scale. So, definitely, the world is much better off with Casey as she is right now than it was with her as a giant.
Cheers!
Date: December 05 2015 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 16. Dawn
Woah...good twist! She shrunk and now we the readers want to know more, to know why Casey had not grown when she ingested the rest of the formula. Great job !
Author's Response:
I said I still had some surprises in stock ;) I'm glad that you liked how the chapter came out. Weren't you expecting something like this?
Without getting too much more into the detail, when Casey ingested so much of the formula there were so many thing driven by it that her body did basically react in an unpredictable way. Of course, Casey now has only one objective in life: to learn how to grow again!
Cheers!
[Report This]Date: December 01 2015 4:05 PM Title: PROLOGUE
Have been enjoying this since part 2 kicked off. Keep up the good work.
In my head though Casey is now 40 miles plus (state sized) and we're heading to an armageddom situation if she isn't shrank immediately.but good luck wherever you do go with it.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm glad that you are enjoying the story. Volume 3 and the trilogy are heading towards its ending, but it's good to see that you are enjoying the overall evolution of the story.
The mistery of what will happen with Casey will be revealed soon enough... this Saturday. Hopefully you will like the solution I chose. Let me know once you read it, please!
Cheers!
Date: November 30 2015 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
Decent chapter. At this point I just want to see the conclusion to this whole thing. To be honest I think this series was more along the lines of my tastes in acts I and II, but at this point I'm not enjoying the chapters as much. I guess it's just that I don't like violent GTS that much or is it Kelly's unbearable smugness or how overpowered she is? Or maybe that everyone else seems so incompetent? I'm not sure...
It's not as if there aren't ANY violent GTS stories that grab me, but I'm not sure what are the factors that make a violent story enjoyable for me. Maybe it's that this series started off relatively gentle and then progressed into a killfest later on, instead of just starting off that way? Like I said, I have NO idea makes a violent story enjoyable for me and what doesn't. At the end of the day though, this is YOUR story so you should do whatever you want with it. I'm still looking forward to what you have planned for the climax though, I will say that...
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback. Based on what you have been sharing with me in the reviews so far I thought that you would probably not enjoy that much how the series has evolved in the end. It's true that it has moved from a relatively gentle series to a much more violent one, as Kelly's character has had the same evolution (Lisa and Casey have remained relatively unchanged since Volume 2).
I hope that by the end you'll still have enjoyed the journey and the overall story and how it finishes. In any case, I thank you once again for your constant feedback and encouragement and for the respect you show for the story independently of your tastes.
Cheers!
Date: November 29 2015 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
Oi, don't disrespect the Walking Dead! I love that show! Even though I haven't watched it in a while! It is the saving grace of the comic series!
So, anyway, I assume the next chapter will reveal
A) What happened to Casey
B) Whether the reducer was successful on Lisa
C) The execution of the nuclear strike
D) A and B
E) A and C
F) All of the above
I am intrigued
Author's Response:
There wasn't any disrespect in my comment. I love zombies and I love The Walking Dead, even though I have not been wathing it for a while as well.
Let's say that everything you listed will be covered in the next couple of weeks. I'll not provide any more details by now ;)
Cheers!
Date: November 29 2015 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
Am going to be honest and say am starting to really dislike Kelly more and more, she is starting to be a boring person to read its the same thing each time with her and how she thinks and how she goes about things, her person went down hill when you made her bigger.
The story has been a back and forth between Casey and Kelly all these chapters with what maybe four with Lisa and now only one with Ron. You made this third story nothing but Casey and Kelly and who will have the higher kill count by the end of the story.
Now with this upcoming chapter next week with Casey, i really hope she dosen't get any bigger than she is, if she does get bigger am starting to think that you just want to wright a story that is nothing but killing. Cliff hangers get old they don't need to be used every time.
I also think you have a thing with the U.S as you made it seem like they can't do anything right, from the way they acttack the girls to the wepons they used and how they seem to just stand around doing nothing, also all the killing the two girls have been doing to the people in the citys.
Kelly thinks that the people are the stupid ones, she is not doing a dam thing to not kill people, walking down the street killing anyone in her way is just one of the things wrong, she didn't need to that or walking through the bridgs when she could have just step over them all the same and if she wanted to go sight seeing she could have found a road filled with less people.
I just hope in the end both Kelly and Casey get whats coming to them and that there is some kind of payback to them for all they have done, killing them is to good for them, i hope in the end they have something humiliating for them as payback.
With a story with this much killing and having it be one sided is not fun to read or enjoy, can't really enjoy it.
Author's Response:
Thanks for letting me know. I would have never guessed that you disliked Kelly :P
Honestly, no disrespect meant, but there is nothing too different in this review from the previous ones you posted. You clearly don't like Kelly. You clearly don't like Casey. And you clearly don't like the tone of the story and the direction it has been taking for a very long time now. In summary: it would seem that you don't like the type of story I'm writing. Nothing bad with that. I mean, some people don't like Zombies... most of them don't watch The Walking Dead every week though. And if they did, I would not expect them to enjoy it.
I'm not even going to bother to comment on your mention to "my thing with the US". The only reason the story is set in the US is because I'm writing it in English and the US is the craddle of pop culture. Having said that, I believe that bringing nationalism into a discussion about either literature or fetish (whatever you prefer) is, to be kind, nonsense.
Cheers!
Date: November 28 2015 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
PAPA
Okay… so, she’s seriously lost it, if she thinks she can convince all the nations of the planet to simply submit. USA definitely won’t, at least not without sending everything they’ve got at her. And you, Papa, seemed to have forgotten that a nationwide-evac would have been out by now, especially for world leaders. There’s no way they would be inside the UN building. That’s like a mayor being marked for death residing in City Hall. That building IS A TARGET.
When the delusional bitch (that’s my nickname for K. Hanson) made her declaration in Hollner, everyone (especially every American city) would have been on high alert. To say that there were still officials in Washington is one thing. To say that the UN building in New York City is still full of delegates is something else altogether. It’s simply ludicrous.
FYI, I HAD gotten over Sykes and Archer, but it seems like you’re repeating their mistakes from Volume 2. I thought you said you were going to use the feedback from reviews to improve your story, but this chapter was much more of the same old, same old. The delusional bitch is once again asserting her dominance over the miniscule life forms around her. Only difference is, she’s doing it on a global scale.
I also think you could have put more focus on the President. He has not been ‘seen’ since Chapter 5, and is then only mentioned by McCallister and Brown. Now I find out that he has (FINALLY) decided to use nuclear weaponry, and I don’t even get to see his expression: ‘Carlson rubbed his face, hard. He could not believe he was actually agreeing to this. Deploying nuclear missiles on his own country… he’d be seen as a Presidential pariah. But then again, if there were going to be any Presidents to look back on his decision, then Kelly Hanson could not be allowed to roam free. Perhaps in time… a long time… he would be seen as the man who saved the world from a tyrant. There would be casualties, but in the end, there would be more so, if he did nothing. “All right then,” he said to Admiral Ward, resignedly. “You have authorization to the launch codes. Let’s nuke the bitch.”’
That’s what I was hoping to read. It would be more… dramatic, in my opinion.
Cheers.
Author's Response:
Papa? I did not know that we were on a nickname basis ;). Should I call you "Hatie" from now on? ;P
Ok, back to the review... we've discussed several times that one thing is what Kelly thinks and another is reality. Yes, she thinks she can submit all the nations in the world, including the USA. And yes, it's unlikely that it happens. I think we've had this conversation before ;)
I never said who was inside the UN building when Kelly ripped it open. Were they delegates and ambassadors? Were they "second-class" personnel? The thing is that Kelly does not know and she just guesses. I agree that ambassadors would be the first ones to be evacuated, but evacuating some thousands of people from the building is not so easy and Kelly got to New York awfully fast. Anyway, I guess it will be more productive to have this same discussion in a couple of chapters from now.
I had already guessed that you did not like Kelly Hanson too much. Her nickname kind of confirms my theory :P
As for how I use the feedback in the reviews: yes, I try to improve the story based on the feedback I get. That does not mean that I need to implement every single piece of feedback I get. I may consider sometimes, like this one, that my original idea was better than the feedback.
Finally, as for putting focus on the President: it was my creative choice. I used a chapter to show the President's temper when dealing with Kelly's threat, but my two characters in Air Force One are CAtherine McAllister and Director Brown, so I'm using them to explain what's going on. I think it works well. Your option could have worked, but I think that the way I was orienting the story my choice works better. It's a matter of opinions...
Cheers!
Date: November 28 2015 8:01 AM Title: PROLOGUE
Awesome ,Kelly just moved to another level! Cannot wait to see how big Casey has gotten next week!
Author's Response:
Well, the story is getting into it's third act, so the women need to move to a new level to get ready for the conclusion (it's going to be a long third act, though, so there's still quite a bit of story left).
I hope that you will enjoy what's coming next week :)
Cheers!
Date: November 27 2015 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 14. Progress
Don't tell me... Kelly's going over to the Big Apple to pay a visit to the United Nations Building. I doubt it will be occupied... unless PIS occurs.
(No offense, but what happened to Archer and Sykes was stupid and so would this be.)
Now... what about Casey? Is she dead? Or...?
Author's Response:
Well, you'll see it soon enough. I'll be posting the next chapter in a few hours. I guess that we have different definitions of what is stupid. I didn't think that you were still feeling sour for what happened to Archer and Sykes ;)
And about Casey... you'll see next week.
Cheers!