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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 19 2015 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 3

Three of the middle paragraphs still have room for structural improvement. But, the story is getting more riveting now that you've finally established a precedent for why shrunken teenagers are so rarely (if ever) missed by their parents. In Ryan's case; it's part of the same metaphysical X-factor that shrank him in the first place!

Btw: is Amelia blonde or brunette?

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