Date: September 28 2016 7:03 AM Title: Chapter 1
As of now, I like where the story is going. I really love how the girls are twisted in their own ways. Not to mention the way fear is depicted thoughout the chapters really add to the story.
Author's Response: I've always felt like depicting emotion is by far my strongest suit as a writer, so that's usually what I stick to. Thanks for the review!
Date: September 27 2016 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 1
Cool beginning. Love the searching, love the hiding. World domination, rules.
Later,
Diesel
Date: February 25 2016 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 1
I want more...
Author's Response: You'll get more :)
Date: February 24 2016 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
I am sure I will consider reading any number of your other stories. Right, now I need to focus on completing my own. It's jsut been updated, but I want to make sure I'm more timely with the next chapter so I'm restricted in how much reading I can really do.
Author's Response: Understood. I do hope you get around to it.
Date: February 24 2016 1:05 AM Title: Chapter 1
The first paragraph is kind of eh...cramming all that into a disjointed segment. It could have been put for eloquently, Maybe have a prologue to set the scene?
And then "Fast-forward 65 years".
Does this mean the main character is really old? Or am I missing something. I want to like this story - it's an interesting idea -but it's a bit confusing. I do appreciate the first person though.
Author's Response: The main character hasn't been around for the events he described; they were told to him, and he's just relaying the information. As for the first paragraph, that's something I'll keep in mind- not sure I'll change it at this stage, but it's good information for the future. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: February 22 2016 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just wanted to say I'll probably leave an extented review in the morning. I quickly skimmed though chapters one and two and I do like the story so far. However there some details I wanted to comment on.
Author's Response: Alright, good deal. I eagerly await your review- I was beginning to worry that the new chapter wouldn't get one
Date: November 01 2015 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
This was everything.
Author's Response: Thanks....I think! Lol