Date: June 13 2016 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
These long reviews, my goodness!
Date: May 13 2016 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
@Duggernaut,
Yes, you should include Lucie's mother. I suggest Lucie and Michael talk about her, then Lucie uses her witch powers to time travel back to her mother's prime when she was playing with her men.
Then Lucie can let Michael enter the past by replacing one of Lucie's mom's men with Michael. Hehe! Then we know what happens next.
I'm glad you described her as a sexually aggressive giantess. That sounds amazing. I hope she likes teasing her little guys too. "How should I play with you today? Would you like to stuck inside my perfect cleavage, or would you like to be dropped inside my panties?" "Please Miss, neither." "Oh really, are you sure you don't want to play with me today? How about these nice boobs? Come here, you!" She grabs him and drops him inside her cleavage and he slides down until you couldn't see him anymore. Then he slips through and slides downward. "Looks like someone changed their mind!" She giggles. "Uh uh, not so fast little one." She uses her free hand to life the opening of her panties and watches her little toy slide right in. "In you go!" She says and she lets the waistband snap back sealing her prize from escape. "Now who's next?" She smiles at the other men at her disposal.
Now I'm dreaming of this imaginary character. Please tell me she makes an appearance!
[Report This]Date: April 06 2016 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
@Tom Speedy. What didn't sit right with me was those words from Lucie and the timing of them and why it was so important for the writer that Mirielle should not hear them, but enough for Michael to scare him and let him think about it, but not enough so he'd knew.
And this sentence of it when Mirielle was gone for a few seconds tipped me off.
He frowned, “I suppose Mirielle told you some of what they did, what she did,” he said, tone embarrassed. It had to be Mirielle, how else would she have known?
And Remeber how Madison knew the name of Lucie's dedanya? The fact that she mentions her by her name Adelina, means she is familiar with them and at least spoke to them OR one of those other girls is a gypsy and the moment Madison told them about what Mirielle wanted. In combination with what Lucie said, it became a VERY plausible possibility.
I will re-read the chapters from beginning to the point we see the last of Madison and those girls.
Checking for clues if plans were hatched after Mirielle left with Michael or if this was planned well in advanced and part of the plan was to lure Mirielle in to this. It seems after Mirielle left.
Again, so long the characters, story and development are believable, it will be worth it. As long as it is enjoyable and with a happy end.
I can't judge Madison yet. We don't know what happened in detail with Madison between age 10 and 17. But I also have a feeling that I'm not going to like Madison in the end. We now have 2 missing persons and all people involved will eventually get in a lot of trouble. A line is crossed now and the point of no return has begun.
Date: April 03 2016 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
@TomSpeedy. No problem, those thoughts you have are interesting. And what you say could also be the case if the writer chose that scenario.
But look at this piece of text from chapter 34. Mindreading would explain this. But I put my original guess back again after this piece of text. And that explanation/possibility is even much simpeler than the mindreading one.
“I’ll get it,” Mirielle volunteered, getting to her feet.
Lucie kept her dusky eyes on Michael, “So, how did you enjoy yourself in the hands of your sister and her friends?” she asked, an amused smile playing at the corner of her mouth.
He frowned, “I suppose Mirielle told you some of what they did, what she did,” he said, tone embarrassed. It had to be Mirielle, how else would she have known?
“And what have you learned during your little adventures?” she asked.
“What it’s like to be small and powerless,” he replied.
Mirielle reappeared, bag in hand.
Maybe it's nothing, but the way this got delivered by the writer gives me the feeling that strange acting Lucie knew this already before Mirielle and Michael gave their information to her. The possibility exist that Adelina, the name of Lucie's dedanya(grandma), got tipped off by someone about Mirielle's plan.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2016 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 1
@Duggernaut. I have deleted my conclusion/guess out of my previous review not the spoil the story for others. But I hope many readers see some of these clues and hints in the story. It gives a far more satisfying read that way.
Thanks for the reaction.
I gave my opinion about the situation to Tom Speedy, but the moment I read my own review I got suspicious. The conclusion about how the Gypsy clan would react to Lucie's ideas were spot on, but something didn't fully add up. Then I went to re-read the chapters again and all the conversations between Mirielle and Lucie.
Than I went the read previous chapters again, because of something I thought I read, but wasn't 100% sure anymore. Than I found that clue and my conclusion/guess became a very plausible possibility.
You write very clever.
Of course there could be a simpeler explanation, but that would be less exciting and less unlikely and would make Lucie or whoever she is more powerful without very few weaknesses and less like a human being that is skilled in the art of curses. That would be boring.
[Report This]Date: April 02 2016 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 1
Yes, this seems like a very interesting development. Michael still small and Mirielle small now.
I know Mirielle gave some hints to Lucie that some girls did something to him in chapter 32.
“Now, before we explore restoring him, he has been, let’s say, handled by some young ladies in some very intimate ways,” Mirielle stated.
In chapter 33 Michael says to Lucie.
“Absolutely, nothing more I swear,” he said, turning to look at Mirielle, “I even promised her I would be nice to my sister and her friends, no hard feelings. Please all I want is to be myself again,” he begged.
But still after that, In chapter 34 this piece of conversation between Michael and Lucie feels suspicious.
“I’ll get it,” Mirielle volunteered, getting to her feet.
Lucie kept her dusky eyes on Michael, “So, how did you enjoy yourself in the hands of your sister and her friends?” she asked, an amused smile playing at the corner of her mouth.
He frowned, “I suppose Mirielle told you some of what they did, what she did,” he said, tone embarrassed. It had to be Mirielle, how else would she have known?
“And what have you learned during your little adventures?” she asked.
“What it’s like to be small and powerless,” he replied.
Mirielle reappeared, bag in hand.
Date: April 01 2016 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 1
@Ancient Relic. I know, but with that plot device you can write any out of character behaviour for a person and than say, "It's because of the curse".
But I'm still curious where this story is going.
Author's Response:
Like the ever popular dream sequence
Date: April 01 2016 11:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
@Barrowman,
Well, you got me there. These characters are much more complex than I thought.
Also, I think you are on to something with Lucie. I'm not sold that Lucie is actually the Daenya, but I do agree that she has changed and seems to much more confident and powerful than when we last saw her.
Anything can happen next chapter, but one thing we know is that Lucie is running the show. Let's hope it doesn't disappoint. :)
Author's Response:
Maybe :)
Date: March 31 2016 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
@TomSpeedy. Please no brainless one dimensional characters and huge plot holes. ;) Expecting that a member of that clan would fully oblige Mirielle with that request and not have alarmbells go off in their heads by such a request would be very unrealistic, they would have to be incredibly stupid. Those Gypsies wouldn't want their power and secrets to come in the hands of outsiders with a totally different mindset. And the fact that they see her on the side of Michael or comes from the same world, would mean they totally don't trust the whole situation.
And this can't be Lucy. In the beginning we can clearly see that Lucy's character is friendly, protective, polite and has no resentment to even Michael, but only feels disappointed that she could not save him from that fate. And if Michael in that state of bad attitude and form doesn't antagonize Lucy, than this humble defeated form begging wouldn't do that at all. The words and tone she used sound more like something the grandmother would be motivated to use in this kind of situation. The writer definitely hints that something isn't right about Lucy.
Author's Response:
The representation does seem VERY different compared to the Lucie we met in the early chapters.
Date: March 31 2016 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
I find Lucy totally out of character in the last 2 chapters. Her behaviour is not of the Lucy in the beginning. That Lucy tried her best to prevent the curse from happening, even to a guy like Michael. A totally different personality. The way she speaks is so different, more like her dedanya.
That's what I would have said about chapter 33, but with these hints, this has to be dedanya.
But I like that its story driven chapters are back again. As long as the story is interesting and the characters and their development are believable, than its good. Like those subtle hints and awkward situations for everyone.
I'm captivated again.
Author's Response:
Some readers are sometimes too clever...
[Report This]Date: March 14 2016 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm a foot fan but love this story. Do you plan to have Michael experience his sister's ass or vagina? And do you plan to have him die due to his sister?
Author's Response:
There was some entrapment earlier with Michael's sister. I'm not sure yet where this story will take us and don't want to spoil anything. Thanks for the review :)
Date: March 06 2016 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 1
@beardless bard my apologies for addressing your review as Brad. I responded off my phone and misread it.
[Report This]Date: March 06 2016 9:28 AM Title: Chapter 1
Sorry: Reposting this review due to some typos.
I've been following your stories for some time now, and I finally decided to make an account and leave a review.
I have to say, without a shadow of a doubt, that your writing is amongst the very best on this entire website. I can spend days digging through the muck and only find a handful of truly polished stories that have some thought and direction, and even less that follow the standard conventions of English. You quite clearly have experience with creative writing. You are very descriptive and do a superb job at "showing" instead of "telling". Upon that, my desires in this fetish seem to line up with your writing quite neatly.
I can't wait to see where this series (and the others) go. I'm hoping for some more anal insertion at some point soon, especially since I believe it has yet to happen to Michael, and Janine in the other story now seems wary of the practice. You've inspired me to go ahead and start writing my own series when I can manage to find the time.
Continue writing on! It is refreshing to see someone who regularly updates their series.
Author's Response:
Wow Brad thanks for the incredible review. Though I tend to write for myself it is always gratifying and validating when someone expresses appreciation for the words I put down. I look forward to reading any stories you would choose to share. Thanks again. Hopefully the next chapter will address your desire to see some backdoor action.
Date: February 16 2016 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is good so far. So long as the characters are believable and the story is good.
Author's Response:
Thanks Barrowman, I usually try to maintain a feasible sense of reality with some minor allownaces. I hope i can continue to keep you engaged in this tale
Date: January 18 2016 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice build up to Mirielle. Can't wait what her plans will be. Those girls underestimate her.
Author's Response:
Yep, she'll be there soon enough
[Report This]Date: December 13 2015 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
Michael is in for the wildest ride of his life. Let see if he can ultimately get back to normal or finds his place in this new giant world.
What does Mirelle has in store for him? ;)
[Report This]Date: December 03 2015 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
If you could pump out 20 chapters a day I would read them all!! Keep up the great work, you've got me hooked. Keep them chapters flying out of the press :D