Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10 2016 11:44 PM Title: Chapter 37

@Maximus. Thanks. I love the effort the writer makes with this story and gives subtle clues and smokescreens. This is not a simple smut story If you look at it. It is a good read and I'm praising the writer for it. Thanks to subtle clues, my conclusion was spot on. About Lucie and the betrayal. Only I had Raven as possible suspect too if it wasn't Madison. Don't trust her. Duggernaut was also smart with counter measures that I would debunk my own theory about it by what was said in chapter 32 and 33. But that text in chapter 34 that Mirielle wasn't suppose to hear, was to suspicious and by looking very close what was said in the previous chapters I saw it didn't made my theory invalid and the conclusion was so fun, It just had to be the writers intention.

 

This chapter 37 has obvious information that Madison feels a bit uneasy to have done that to Mirielle. The tone and the way she explains in a civil manner why to Mirielle why she did it makes it seem that she feels some guilt for what she did, even if it was also justified not to let Mirielle go through with it. Also the obvious conclusion of Mirielle that Madison and Adelina are closer and new eachother for a long time. That she have means the contact her directly says enough. I wonder how Madison and Mirielle interact with eachother. 2 persons who have a reasonable clarity and don't hate eachother at all but something has to happen. :)

I also got the feeling there are hidden clues in here and smookscreens that will puposly lead you to the wrong conclusions.
This sentence of Madison keeps bugging me, :“I can see you are coming to understand,” Madison said.
I went to re read some chapters If I could find something. It only raises more questions and more possible theories. Good job, Duggernaut.
I wonder if the screaming laughter in the house just when Mirielle left the first time without Michael was of importance. That whole scene, someting doesn't feel right.

 

But I'm just going to wait for the next chapter and try to keep it simple. We have 10 people in the story so far and they all if some important part to play.
Agreed with you. How will the now coming relationship go between Michael, Madison and Mirielle and possible other characters.

 

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response:

There will of course be more dialogue coming in the next couple of chapters that enriches the characters and provides some measure of context for the current predicament, well sort of. could be just another red herring to throw readers off the trail. As long as it's entyertaining and feasible within the framework of the story.... :)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 09 2016 12:15 AM Title: Chapter 37

Madison smiled, “Hubris,” she said. “You thought you could glean millennia old knowledge out of what you presumed were simple old world village folk and there would be no cost.”

“True,” Madison conceded, “But it begged the question, why did you want the ability? Why couldn’t you just enjoy the uniqueness of the situation and take delight in the opportunity to play with Michael? Help him understand the impact of his behavior?”

Mirielle frowned. Had she gotten greedy? Blinded by lofty ambition to bring Mortimer low? What about the cop? Would she have shrunk him if she had the chance? Yes.

Funny how the different thought patterns clash. In this Madison shows she is smarter. Some people have the wrong idea what real power is or what is truly important in life. Interesting how Mirielle will develop and the coming interaction between Madison and Mirielle.

@Tom Speedy.
Put yourself in Madison's place. You would have the same alarmbells go off when a person, in this case Mirielle, comes with this kind of offer/plan? I don't think Madison wants to have problems with Adelina.
She choses the non stressfull way and could ask for a shrunken person other than Michael if she is close to Adelina. Why bother with elaborate plans to power through a corperation with all the stress, planning, hiding and paranoia, so that your main goal, having fun with a shrunken person gets lost in that time consuming unhappiness.
That said, I still don't like Madison either. She is lecturing Mirielle, but she will fall victim to her own hubris very soon. I believe her words in this for 99%, but like you said, she is hiding some other intentions and I can guess what they are and why.
I don't see Adelina as purely good. Every person has layers and conflicting emotions, etc. That what makes it fun.
I'm glad Lucie was kept out of this. Very important.

I agree with you with that power too shrink and the fun you could have. Mirielle has the potential to be fun, but she isn't there yet. Some thought patterns and sometimes the roughness in the sex she had, disappointed me and that was done on purpose by the writer to provoke precisely that feeling. That she was likeable, but not totally likeable.

Michael by the way deserves this punishment, he is still a jerk. The fun part starts when characters that seem in agreement now; Madison, Adelina, Raven, Gennifer, Amber come in conflict with eachother on how to treat Michael and Mirielle or what to do and what not and the different ideas they have, etc. And the transition where Michael has really learned his lesson, but the torture won't stop and goes extreme and al the emotions involved with all the characters will be interesting. Like this story so far and this chapter.

It is Madison here. That last sentence is only forshadowing of the possibilities. Think about it, with this Mirielle and Michael are really in trouble.