Date: May 27 2016 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 48
It was my hope to provide perspective in this chapter. Michael is complaining about his misfortune which nows in contrast to Adelina's past does seem trivial. More questions will arise and this whole story will shift as the game comes into focus.
Michael's misfortune is nothing compared to Adelina's, but it is a unique one. The longer Michael stays small, the more it will mentally hurt with every realization at what he has lost and can't do anymore. It will sink in slowly and take its toll. Lucie is for now the only one that keeps him from having a breakdown. But that is the exciting part, how will he cope with the knowledge that he isn't seen by many as a human being anymore and finding his place in this new alien world while this whole set of events is taking place around him.
Date: May 25 2016 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 48
I never saw Adelina as evil. Adelina lived a long time and people at that old age must care little about the trivial feelings of young people. This chapter emphasized it, that after this horror, the other characters feelings do not really matter and what Michael has to endure she sees as child's play. She is just amused, more cynical about things. She planned this a long time ago and It is almost certain Michael's behaviour had little to do with it. She is not out to kill or maim Michael it seems. The problem is she seems to have specific goals in mind and if Michael or any person needs to be sacrificed for those goals, she will do it. All the other characters are at the mercy of Adelina's will and chessgame.
Indeed, imagine a bee sting. You did well with the characters. People closest to you that harm you in your srhunken state and are still believable human beings, that is always interesting in the story.
Author's Response:
It was my hope to provide perspective in this chapter. Michael is complaining about his misfortune which nows in contrast to Adelina's past does seem trivial. More questions will arise and this whole story will shift as the game comes into focus.
[Report This]Date: May 25 2016 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 48
Love the game of thrones reference. I should have seen it coming.
This chapter was pretty good. Solid for excellent backstory. For the first time in this story, I'm rooting for Adelina.
Usually I hate her, but now I respect her because of her past. I think she saw the same personality in Michael and wanted to punish him in similar fashion.
Keep this backstory going! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I wanted to portray Adelina as more than a manipulative bitch using her power just because. The next chapter's story follows on this thread.
[Report This]Date: May 25 2016 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 48
Dark chapter, a hard painfull life very long time ago for Adelina. No trace of Nadia.
Author's Response:
Yes, very dark and the emotional pendulum now swings to show some of what shaped Adelina. The next chapter follows this thread...