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Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27 2016 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 48

It was my hope to provide perspective in this chapter. Michael is complaining about his misfortune which nows in contrast to Adelina's past does seem trivial.  More questions will arise and this whole story will shift as the game comes into focus.

Michael's misfortune is nothing compared to Adelina's, but it is a unique one. The longer Michael stays small, the more it will mentally hurt with every realization at what he has lost and can't do anymore. It will sink in slowly and take its toll. Lucie is for now the only one that keeps him from having a breakdown. But that is the exciting part, how will he cope with the knowledge that he isn't seen by many as a human being anymore and finding his place in this new alien world while this whole set of events is taking place around him.

 

 

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 25 2016 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 48

I never saw Adelina as evil. Adelina lived a long time and people at that old age must care little about the trivial feelings of young people. This chapter emphasized it, that after this horror, the other characters feelings do not really matter and what Michael has to endure she sees as child's play. She is just amused, more cynical about things. She planned this a long time ago and It is almost certain Michael's behaviour had little to do with it. She is not out to kill or maim Michael it seems. The problem is she seems to have specific goals in mind and if Michael or any person needs to be sacrificed for those goals, she will do it. All the other characters are at the mercy of Adelina's will and chessgame.

Indeed, imagine a bee sting. You did well with the characters. People closest to you that harm you in your srhunken state and are still believable human beings, that is always interesting in the story.



Author's Response:

It was my hope to provide perspective in this chapter. Michael is complaining about his misfortune which nows in contrast to Adelina's past does seem trivial.  More questions will arise and this whole story will shift as the game comes into focus.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 25 2016 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 48

Love the game of thrones reference. I should have seen it coming.

This chapter was pretty good. Solid for excellent backstory. For the first time in this story, I'm rooting for Adelina.

Usually I hate her, but now I respect her because of her past. I think she saw the same personality in Michael and wanted to punish him in similar fashion.

Keep this backstory going! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I wanted to portray Adelina as more than a manipulative bitch using her power just because. The next chapter's story follows on this thread.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 25 2016 5:20 PM Title: Chapter 48

Dark chapter, a hard painfull life very long time ago for Adelina. No trace of Nadia.

 



Author's Response:

Yes, very dark and the emotional pendulum now swings to show some of what shaped Adelina. The next chapter follows this thread...

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 25 2016 10:17 AM Title: Chapter 47

There is another descriptive chapter coming from Adelina's point of view

Can't wait for that Adelina point of view chapter. :)

 

I don't think it would go so good for Michael to try his luck again arachnids or serpents. Maybe he should stay with Lucie?

He should stay with Lucie. I mention those examples as maybe interesting just to add how dangerous his shrunken state is if he falls into the wrong hands or if he is left alone in the open world.



Author's Response:

I agree whole hearted ly with assessment of how particular dangerous the world can be and is especially for someone so tiny. Imagine a bee sting...

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2016 11:46 PM Title: Chapter 47

Let see if he gets full enjoyment this time. ;)

Only the 2 of them live there. Get a feeling they are far away from their clan.

Can't wait to see him battle spiders, snakes and other giants. How would a 3 inch man survive on his own in this world.

 



Author's Response:

I don't think it would go so good for Michael to try his luck again arachnids or serpents. Maybe he should stay with Lucie?

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2016 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 47

I remember when Michael was afraid of all this giantess stuff. Now he is enjoying it.

Michael is starting to remind me of Tom in Tom's story. He is making jokes of her body and grinning all the time. Seems very Tom like.

And to Lucie, I say give in to the temptation.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Lucie is much more gentle than the others and he feels safer with her all the while she is battling the pull of the curse...

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2016 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 46

@Tom Speedy. This was very revealing chapter indeed, but some of the things you mentioned were already obvious thanks to the clues in the previous chapters of the latest Hearst home part. We are still left hanging with a lot of questions and more plausible possibilities that are all interesting.

This chapter is so interesting. You can feel the tension between these 3 and ideas forming about replacing Mortimer. So much conflicting emotions Madison and Mirielle have. Mirielle being the mentally stronger one of the two. Both are smart but know Adelina is in total controll here. Adelina plays a sneaky game. Giving each character a different set of information, meant not for the other person or group of persons to know. Also some characters were togheter off screen and could have discussed some plans.

I agree with you that it seems for now we get the focus on Michael. I wonder how long they must wait, days, weeks? Is Adelina and Mirielle sleeping in the Hearst home and does Mortimer come home eventually? How much patience do each of them have?

About her knowledge of the whereabouts of Michael? First I think Adelina is letting the others think she is more powerfull than she actually is. With that, noboday even dares to think to double cross her. When Michael was eavesdropping, she didn't sensed him, only when he came very close to her, she reacted and change the conversation to English for Michael to hear, what she wanted him to hear. She must only sense him when he is in close proximity, like 2 to 3 meters(7 tot 10 feet). When she sensed him in Lucie's bag. It was easy to conclude that Lucie took Michael, that was her intention all along to let Lucie leave with Michael.

Adelina went out of her way to make Michael even more affraid of her sister with will contrast even harder with the kindness that Lucie is showing.



Author's Response:

There is another descriptive chapter coming from Adelina's point of view

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 17 2016 12:51 PM Title: Chapter 46

@HectorVanDyne. That was just Madison acting though in front of Michael and Lucie. The moment she knew Michael wasn't in the room she dared to show concern.
That mother transformation really hit her hard as I expected and obvious on purpose off course. The fact that Madison didn't came downstairs with her was of the pain and shame. Can you imagine how dirty Madison would have felt if she saw a emotional reaction of Michael to the image of his mother.
Adelina is without mercy and rubs salt in that wound in this chapter and basically threatens Madison that everything can happen to Michael and that she has nothing to say about it.

You can clearly see Madison having trouble, because she isn't as talketive anymore after Adelina mentioned that. But she doesn't dare to question Adelina.

 

Reviewer: HectorVanDyne Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2016 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 46

So she does care about her brother?  I am kinda surprised since earlier chapters implied she was planning on eventually killing him or was she simply not serious about that?

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2016 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 46

Now we see what else Adelina finds important. Mortimer Hearst and the company. Mirielle provided them with much useful information. Adelina must be familiar with Helena or she could never copy her in the way that she did.

Madison seems to have no trouble with Adelina's suggestions to remove Mortimer. Wonder if Madison and Adelina were aware that Madison would inherit the company and not Michael.

 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2016 5:27 PM Title: Chapter 46

This chapter was so clear. I understand what happened with Mirielle, if Adelina knows about Michael, the lesson for Madison. It all makes sense!

I wasn't expecting this boatload of conclusive evidence all in one chapter. I thought you may leave us hanging on certain things. However, the Merielle and Madison story seems over, and now we just have Lucie left.

Adelina tells the other two women to wait for Lucie. In other words, it's like an excuse for Lucie to have like 2+ chapters to have her way with Michael.

I find it creepy that Adelina knows about Michael's whereabouts and it's like someone just put a camera or tracker on him and is stalking him. I bet Adelina also senses Lucie when she is aroused. Now wouldn't that be something.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 15 2016 12:30 AM Title: Chapter 45

@Duggernaut.
You're doing a great job so far. The characters still feel like real human beings. And the story develops at a good pace. Caution about how much power you give a person. If she has the power to make people forget on a whim, than it can be used all the time and some people don't have to face the consequences for their actions.

 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13 2016 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 1

@Duggernaut,

Yes, you should include Lucie's mother. I suggest Lucie and Michael talk about her, then Lucie uses her witch powers to time travel back to her mother's prime when she was playing with her men.

Then Lucie can let Michael enter the past by replacing one of Lucie's mom's men with Michael. Hehe! Then we know what happens next.

I'm glad you described her as a sexually aggressive giantess. That sounds amazing. I hope she likes teasing her little guys too. "How should I play with you today? Would you like to stuck inside my perfect cleavage, or would you like to be dropped inside my panties?" "Please Miss, neither." "Oh really, are you sure you don't want to play with me today? How about these nice boobs? Come here, you!" She grabs him and drops him inside her cleavage and he slides down until you couldn't see him anymore. Then he slips through and slides downward. "Looks like someone changed their mind!" She giggles. "Uh uh, not so fast little one." She uses her free hand to life the opening of her panties and watches her little toy slide right in. "In you go!" She says and she lets the waistband snap back sealing her prize from escape. "Now who's next?" She smiles at the other men at her disposal.

Now I'm dreaming of this imaginary character. Please tell me she makes an appearance!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 11 2016 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 45

First paragraph needs some work. "Sound causing Michael to start". Haha! It sounds funny but I know you mean startle.

Second part is that you say "evil empire..space movie". Really Duggernaut? Just say Star Wars. It's not some space movie. It's a masterpiece, and the soundtrack is pure gold.

Only reason I can see why u didn't plainly state the movie and song was becuase you like to give hints and stuff.

Lucie had the electric feeling last chapter, the phone call was just another delay. She feels the sensation again but I'm sure nothing sexy will be next chapter. You just love to tease us like that. :)

Damn! Lucie's mother sounds hot! She had a passion for using tinies for her pleasure?!!! A hot mom for a hot girl like Lucie?!! Man, I hope you have some flashback or side story because I would love to hear about Lucie's mother.

Yeah, Michael wants more than a kiss. Ha. He is just getting started!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Lol yeah we both know the reference. Hmm I hadn't thought about Lucie's mother making an appearance but now...

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 11 2016 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 45

Nice chapter. Lucie and Michael bonding. But still in suspense what is happening at the Hearst home. ;)

Something has to go wrong at some point in Adelina's plan. Madison's idea of restoring Mirielle that fast is somewhat suspicious. The extent of Adelina's power is somewhat unclear. Shrinking curse, shape shifting and sharp senses are established. Wonder if Lucie's mother will make an appearance.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. You're right the extent of Adelina's power or her motivations are unclear...for now. 

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 10 2016 12:04 AM Title: Chapter 44

I really dislike Madison by the way. I'm waiting for the moment that the power grows to her head or that she makes stupid mistakes endangering everyone around her. I actually like it that Adelina turns into her mom, giving her feelings of guilt in a very subtle way. If Madison saw Michael come out that back happy full of tears/joy that his mother came for him, that would really play on her conscience. The longer Adelina searches for Michael and act like the mother would also have great effect making her feel more bad every second.
What would Mirielle feel about al of this if she is in the same room with them searching for Michael. She has seen things and experienced things that would change your views on life. Would she give up out of fear or be more determined to have that power or at least some little people to play with. What has Adelina promised to Madison? If Madison knows she is going to receive/learn those abillities from Adelina, than her lecturing Mirielle about wanting that power is beyond hypocrite.
I'm just finding more reasons the really dislike Madison. ;)

Just can't wait for that scene with the three of them in one room. Hope it is in the next chapter.

 

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 07 2016 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 44

Wonder what Adelina is up too. There has to be more going on than just testing someone. It is like she needs something from this whole process to solve some big problem. She holds all the cards in this game. Changing into Michael's mother was more to provoke Madison, than to catch Michael. That had to hurt Madison a lot. Everytime she would open her mouth in that form had to hurt Madison.
Adelina is just having fun seeing this al unfold. Wonder what Madison and Mirielle discussed in that room.

Lucie has little chance but I like her sense of justice. It is not bad to give in some urges as long as she can let Michael have fun too and looks out for his well being. What those other girls did to him could have killed him and at least scar him for life. Mirielle was a little more tactful, but still at sometimes too rude forgetting about Michael's mental state.

Can't wait for the next chapter, want to see how those 3 will interact with eachother in the Hearst home and if Adelina still is in that form of Madison's mother keeping the charade up to search for Michael while knowing Lucie has him.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 07 2016 5:08 PM Title: Chapter 44

I like where this is going. I really hope Lucie gives in and does what her body desires.

I bet it temps Lucie, that there is a tiny, young man in her hand, at her mercy and she can do anything she wants and no one or nothing can stop her.

Yes, she too will enjoy the power of a giantess.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 03 2016 12:23 PM Title: Chapter 43

@Tom Speedy. I agree with you and hope Lucie is the safe character, the end prize after all those hardships that will come. She indeed could be in on it with Adelina. Hope not, because that wouldn't be fun. I think she is as honest as what we have seen in this story. The feeling you get is that Adelina is playing a game and wants to teach everybody(Madison, Michael and Lucie) a lesson. She sets things in motion and like to see how it plays out and is enjoying herself. She could have done any other thing to search for Michael, but chose to change into Helena. This was cleary done to provoke Madison. Adelina probably knows Michael is in that bag.

 

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