Finished reading the other chapters. If I had read each one separately, I'd probably put one review for each, in this case then, a very BIG review for you! HO HO HO Take a deep breath...


Made me feel so happy to see you replied to my review. About hoping the emotions from here on out aren't to much for me; I expect quite the contrary - break me! Hah I'll stay until the end, and probably will be trembling and sobbing through the way.

Anyway. As also a non-english native, I know the struggle, and through the reading I found very few errors that caught my eye. Overall it was quite comfortable and great to read for me.

About the length. Personally, I adore the length you choose to use on each chapter, it feels like a real novel with chapters that have beginning > middle > end; I have nothing against short chapters, however long ones are much more impactful and stick much deeper into my mind and feelings. Especially writing that have more serious plot and dialogues together with kinks, like yours, can fit every part into the chapter with plenty of room for every one to be good. Usually start slowly, nice, you build up tension, a lot of tension or trade the tension for affection and love, with also grows the same; until the climax. This makes the chapters much more amazing and stick in the mind to think and ponder more later. I really like how you use the affection/love, corruption, lewd kinks and dark themes together with the plot, not sounding like simply 'fanservice' (there will be a beach episode/chapter with all the girls and Claire?) Hah~ Also, a nice detail, you use _ _ _ _ to separate scenes, which I found wonderful for the reading.

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Was quite a ride until now, I had time to breath and calm myself already~ :~

One of the things I feel that affects more, when one of the girls speaks or acts, is that we know they don't lie. They aren't like adults that hide their feelings or try to please other Egos so they won't feel bad, they are simply sincere and pure, in their own special way. And this, causes a very potent blow whenever they are sad, loving, angry or happy, because we truly know these are what they are feeling right now, no if or buts. Making the scenes way more frightening when one of them believes Claire is a 'mean lady', or heartwarming when they say they want her with them forever.

Some thoughts.

Deaths, dark themes, killing - Amazing, you really have a corrupted mind for this. Hah Many times when the 'monsters' are killed causes goosebumps and shivers, I try my best to not put myself in their places, thankfully is easier as I identify myself with Claire that is my safe beacon (usually, because she goes through quite a lot!!). I love this kind of horror/dark reading, it's scary, frightening, causes cold and shivering; but somehow we can't turn our eyes away from it, there is that fascination to keep looking at and continue to see the end. And after it ends, you know that it may had changed you in a bit. Claire may had not realized this yet, or did, who knows... but I have the impression she doesn't look that absurdly horrified like the first time she saw them killing a monster. 'Monsters', she is starting to see and feel what this word mean, if it's truly means those adults, how evil, mean and horrible they are and all their crimes; Claire is even starting to feel anger towards them, like the one with May and at the last ones with Kai. Wonder how long it will take for her to not feel sorry for them, to not think they are innocent. The twins know how naive and 'pure' Claire is in some way, how she believes in everyone and how she thinks everyone is good in some way, or just that she is so kind hearted that she wasn't fully tainted by the society and morals. Something like this... my thoughts tend to get confuse whenever I think too much like this Hah.

Kat - Until now, she is my fave. Especially because I always have these motherly feelings; when she unconsciously said 'Mommy' and ran away crying I thought my heart would stop. As I was discovering her sad past, how it deeply affected her whenever the subject of her parents were brought up, I was getting the hint deeply there in her heart she may desperately crave for a motherly figure in her life, to take care of her and love her. The twins even said she liked receiving 'orders'. As much as heartwarming and loving, she seems also extremely protective, it's even scary whenever she gets this serious to say nothing will hurt Claire; at same time so heartwarming. Also frightening the collection of toys she had there, wonder if that man she held so furiously was actually her father, or just another random 'monster'. I can only imagine one thing about tying losing ends though, scary! Hope she continues living in Claire's home, and both get even more together.

May - I found adorable and happy, and at same time so sad and depressing, not to mention scary that she can be so damn dangerous by simply forgetting where Claire was... It was reading full with constant mixed feelings, high and low, happy/laugh/love, fear/sadness. How she is unaware of everything in the bigger picture, too young to understand - and at same time aware of bad things and lies happening all around her. Though I believe it indeed would be much worse for her if the twins didn't had give her this power. This caused even more tension, because you knew that every word Claire said needed to be sincere, her feelings and thoughts pure otherwise May would see through everything. It was interesting to see the part with the sick pervert, especially thinking before how Claire felt sad/guilty/dirt and Alexis told her to not ever compare herself with them; how Claire could had the chance to/or not to realize the difference in her sincere feelings and those selfish ones full with lies which unfortunately May couldn't see because it was his 'truth' (if she asked he liked, he would honestly say he liked). Even the 'commanding voice' later, which I think is absurdly powerful, even frightening to think about how much control she can have on others (what if she says 'you want to kill yourself'). But this fear is at same level with the sense of safety and love when you see how kind hearted and pure she is, she just want hugs and friends that don't think she is a monster and won't leave~ I'm sure Claire will never leave her.

Kai and Lily were the ones I thought more dangerous.
Kai - This one caught me by surprise. I was kinda sure this wouldn't be so sad and more of a 'battle' to show Claire was sincere and prove worthy. But at the end I ended up crying with the final hug! Thing that didn't happened before. I'm too emotive, I feel silly. Hah Anyway Surprised me even further, because, personally I never truly read anything or sought stories/kinks/RP involving smells. And all this humiliation, torture and dark use of it was really interesting and scary, especially how Kai could manipulate other bodies in this way. I don't even want to imagine what that man down there felt... It was interesting to see she had a family, though so depressing and made feel so angry. Indeed, there are plenty of ways to have a sad childhood, unfortunately... And thankfully there are people like Claire that sincerely cares about Kai. I'm really glad she believes in her now. Glad because now she can be happy.

Lily - This one causes me shivers... I really have no idea what to expect. Neither her powers, which just the fact of nobody desiring to share, and how few say she is real mean and 'evil' makes even more scary and curious. All I can think is I have to wait for one hell of a ride... At the intro with her using her foot I have this feeling will be focused on this kind of kink, maybe, or others, or many others. You are using so many! Amazing. Anyway. Lily seems just so, deeply and honestly angry, extremely angry with all the adults (bugs). I keep wondering what may had happened to her, to hurt her trust and feelings in this way. And if it is this scar is that deep far, almost enough to not be healed, I tremble and shiver more with the thought of how difficult may be for Claire to prove she is different. But also deeply wants Claire to find what happened, and try to help Lily, Hope she manages to! Don't to this with meee! :O If it happens, I can't help but to have this image of all of the girls holding and hugging Claire lovingly~ I'm going to faint...

Alexis and Sophia - I have no more doubt about their feelings for Claire, I can see and feel how they are so attached to her now; It's so adorable and loving, the way they hold her, how they pet and caress her, how they handle her as if she were precious. Compared with the start, where they weren't that attached. It's cute to see how they were nervous waiting for Kat to arrive with Claire, they were so restless, even said they were in the night. And all the affection they give to Claire is really heartwarming and adorable. It seems so much, much easier for them to see through Claire feelings and heart, though for Claire she still has to do it in a humanly way but it's so adorable they actually are trying to 'corrupt' her and 'helping' her to understand more and more her feelings. 'Even if they have to do it every single day~' 'She will belong to them~'. About their powers, it's just so... powerful, but at same time they are so in control of both mind and body that I can't feel scared for Claire -- unless -- at the beginning when she needed to be sincere about her feelings, becuase the twins don't seem very merciful for those they can see aren't good hearted for the 'monsters', after I saw how kind and good hearted Claire was, I stopped fearing the twins because I somehow knew that they wouldn't do anything to Claire, other than adore her more and more. The problem now lies in Claire starting to believe in this, that 'gift' they gave her even implies this. Also It's so difficult to understand their intentions many times, especially in the big picture of the plot, you are very good in just giving the hints to get more curious, and not hints to outright give the plot and spoil things. Make us think, make us create theories, this is good to keep the reader waiting for more. For me, I... don't know; why Claire is special in their plan, other than being one of the few adults that truly cares about them and not see them as monsters. Maybe they want to prove there is a chance for few adults in the future they want to make, like their Mother, to give them this chance to change their beliefs and morals that may cause such suffering for the children. Which makes me remember about their past, what could had happened with them, their birth and their Dad which they seem to hate. Who knows. The plot thickens...

And Claire - Usually I'm 99% of the time in her character when I read, then most of the feelings I feel are caused because of her reactions. I really identify myself with her, so maybe this is why I'm so fascinated with the story maybe. Anyway, what got me more curious is about her past, I can't help but to keep wondering, since that even the twins are so curious to know more and more about her, and even Alexis struggled a bit to delve deeper into some trauma apparently. Even more curious was to see that Claire seemed to not be able to remember certain things about her past, is this because of her own mind locking things she don't want to remember or maybe something the twins did... I have this uneasy feeling Claire may be the one with the most tragic past. Hope this is just a guess! And if if this is true, and the story delves into this, hope for her to have the help of all the girl as much as she loved and helped them.

Again, thank you for replying and writing, as you can see, I kinda really liked the reading. Hah~ Can't wait for the next ride, hope my heart can take it.

Yay! I'm so happy to see this updated!
I love the development, it was great! The details were very descriptive, and the emotions were very relatable.
Keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much Dante123113!