[Report This]Date: September 08 2016 6:49 PM Title: What I am...
Holy crap.
Every chapter just keeps getting better and better! The wait was worth it, again! I actually started to tear up a little when I was reading Claire's realizations, and making the realization myself!
Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much Dante123113 :D
Your review really made my night. I'm glad the feels were great for you to ^,^
[Report This]Date: September 06 2016 7:25 AM Title: What I am...
Oh, of course I'll stay around, I loved the chapter.
Author's Response:
:)
[Report This]Date: September 06 2016 12:52 AM Title: What I am...
Oh good thing. I finally find the chapter way before I'm about to sleep, contrary to usual.
What to say, throughout the whole chapter Lily's train of thoughts as well as her actions, they felt really stressing. Since her first doubts at the beginning of the chapter, her practice in the limited time and her final struggle, it all made me feel a bit of the pain she should be feeling everyday. Having to do all those kind of things everyday while not being at a clompletely mental balance, the frustration of not being able to have a time with her father which she seems to have long for for quite some time now, and not really being able to let out her emotions since it might be worse than what happened to the butler here. I can only describe that as painful and stressful.
For Claire's side it seems that the fear didn't contain her and she was able to speak her mind, faithful to her personality. Whatever this leads to, I'll have to wait to know. Also, I found the comparison with Kat interesting, being that Lily is the one closest to her in the percentage that the twins gave them. I also have to say that I was surprised with Claire's statement , specifically her calling Lily a monster, not that I don't undertand where that's coming from, just I didn't expect her to say it like that.
Oh, and calling Claire a pervert is going to be some kinf of trend at this rate.
As for mistakes, I could spot some typos here and there, like 'your' instead of 'you're' and the like. Other than that I think this chapter is great and as always I'm eager for the next one.
By the way, I was really tempted to just write "..." after reading the end notes.
Author's Response: Yeah... I rushed myself a bit with this chapter since I already knew how it was going to end and the fact I'd have to stop come Tuesday. I've found since school started back up my time has become limited worse then I thought. I had to lock myself in my room all weekend just to finish, but maybe waiting another day would have helped the grammar so my bad... As for Claire calling Lily out I had to show just how angry she truly was, and doing something quite out of character as that I think drove my point home. I hope you'll stick around for what's to come... Or, what might not come...
[Report This]Date: September 05 2016 10:49 PM Title: What I am...
Damn that was deep...
That might be one of the best things ever writen on this site.
Author's Response:
Thanks AdamX, I appreciate your words.
[Report This]Date: September 05 2016 7:43 PM Title: What I am...
Damn.....
(That's really all I have to say here, but I think it says a lot......)
Author's Response:
Yeah... thats what i felt as well when i finished...