Reviewer: tinykev49 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 08 2018 6:01 AM Title: Chapter 15

Yes it's going well hoping the chapters come faster! He he..............

Reviewer: gtstory Signed [Report This]
Date: June 05 2018 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 15

Wow, I don't know what else to say, except what a chapter! I couldn't even wait until I read it a 2nd time, I just had to post here right away. It was perfect, all the way around. I'm not sure what you wanted to re-do, but one couldn't have asked for a better chapter. As I'm sure you know, every creative work evolves as part of the process. No symphony, song or story is ever what its creator's first scribbles were. And the fact that you're writing it chapter-by-chapter (instead of being able to do it as a block, and go back and change things if needed) makes it even more impressive. (And yes, I definitely caught some hints and foreshadowing that you left throughout the story here and there, in case you chose to expand on them). While most authors don't have to work chapter-by-chapter, some really good books have actually been written that way, including the original "101 Dalmations" (the wonderful original novel by Dodie Smith, not the Disney movie adaptations). It was originally written in serial form in a British magazine, one chapter a month.

You asked if people reading this story felt as if they were reading a book. I ABSOLUTELY do feel that way with this. A really good story will stay with the reader long after one has finished reading it, as this has definitely done with me. It's a testament to how well you've written it, as well as the characters you've created, that I can't help myself but want to read it again, and think about this story even after setting it down.

This brings up another point (you mentioned you didn't mind long posts) :) Normally with something this good, I'd very much be posting my thoughts on things such as what might happen next, comment on any foreshadowing I've noticed, offer some possible outcomes I've thought of, etc. It's a story very much worthy of that. But I haven't done so for one very important reason: the creator of the work (who is still creating it) is reading this forum. I don't know how you work as a writer, but I know if it were myself writing the story, as much as one part of me might want to see others actively participate and take an interest with posts like that, I would (if I was honest to myself) in the end not really want to see such thoughts and suggestions from others while still writing the story. If someone out there were to think of something I hadn't thought of that I liked, I'd feel weird about using it, and bad if I didn't. And even if all they did was guess exactly what I had already planned to do anyway, having someone else mention it publically first would make it like a spoiler to others, and I'd almost feel pressured to go another route, instead.

I'm writing all this to let you know that, if you were, say, a TV writer who I knew would never see these comments (at least while the work was still being created), I'd be commenting much more on this story, with thoughts, ideas, possible outcomes, etc  -- because it is very much that good of a story. But the reason why I won't do so, is precisely because I want to let you write the story your way. If you are actually curious and feel sure that hearing such things won't affect you (I don't know if I could ever feel that way) I'd be happy to send you my thoughts in private email, even to a disposable email address somewhere, but will not post those kind of comments publically -- not because I don't want to, but because I like this story too much, and don't want to influence it or spoil it for others.

I guess what I'm saying is, it can seem strange seeing comments every chapter that say only "great chapter!" but I'm limiting my comments to reviews only, exactly because I love this story too much. Please remember that, if all you see in a future review from me is simply "another great chapter!" :)

This was indeed a really good chapter, with way too many good parts to mention, as the entire chapter was amazing. With Annallya's mom showing up at the end, the next chapter(s) are going to be very crucial. As much as I enjoyed this whole chapter from start to finish, for some reason, one line that stood out was when Annallya said: "When Titans are little girls, we are taught of our unique ability to change our size, though we understand almost nothing about it. Despite our gift, we rarely use it." That line tells a lot more than at just first glance -- that being able to grow small can indeed be a gift, even if others of her kind don't see it that way.

Anyway, keep up the great work!

Author's Response:

Wow. I told you I don't mind long comments, even enjoy how well informative they are, and you delivered. Where do I begin? *cracks knuckles*

For starters thank you for saying how much you enjoyed the chapter, I enjoyed writing it and seeing how it evolved as the direction of it changed. And thank you for appreciating how I'm doing this chapter by chapter. Although I have a solid idea of how the plot's going to develop, it is a bitch to keep things consistant when they've pretty much already been set in stone. But that isn't a big issue. And you've noticed the foreshadowing? Nice! All I can say is that some things hinted at before are going to have some relavence in these next few chapters. The only hint I'll give you is in chapter 10. And I'm only giving hints because it's a bit of a break between chapters so I don't expect you to remember everything all the time.

I am so relieved that my story has come out feeling like a book. All I've wanted is to write a legit fantasy story with the whole nine yards. Swords, bows, heroes, fun characters, adventures, danger, and of course giant women. So this has been a big accomplishment for me, and the fact that readers like you are enjoying it so much is just a ton of icing on the cake.

Now you bring up an interesting topic that I have experienced before in my other stories, when readers discuss what they think will happen next. Most of the time I enjoy hearing their thoughts, especially when I've already got my mind set on what is yet to come. My favorite part is when everyone is convinced that a chapter will go one direction and then suddenly they get hit with a twist (kind of like the last few lines of this chapter). Some times I've received some good ideas from comments that I sort of worked off of. I didn't exactly use the entire idea, but took it, changed it a little, and then adapted it into what I had already had in mind so that it almost becomes a separate idea, just not an entirely original idea, which does sometimes feel weird, like I'm plagerizing or something. On some occasions someone has guessed something correctly and I was concerned that it would no longer feel as surprising or suspensful. That hasn't happened yet with this story, but know that I greatly GREATLY appreciate your consideration for this issue. Forfeiting all of your guesses just so that you don't accidentally spoil the story is an incredibly gracious thing to do.

If you want to share your ideas with me though, I would love to hear them. Just go to my profile page and hit Contact next to my Penname.

I agree with you. These next few chapters are going to be crucial, and I can't wait to get started on them. So until the next chapter comes out gtstory, thank you for everything you've said.