[Report This]Date: August 17 2016 4:30 PM Title: Chapter 3
Great start to the story. I find myself WANTING bad things to happen to the tinier teen just due to him being kind of a cad! Usually I feel sorry for characters that bad things happen to, but with him, I hope he winds up their plaything for good. It serves him right! Kind of unusual that I find myself rooting more for the giants! ;) It's the eye for an eye punishment applied to this world, steal a toy, BECOME a toy! I love the world you are building here and can't wait for more! The illustrations are a nice touch/teaser as well. Kepp up the good work.
Author's Response:
I'm not sure if I'm going to continue this one as this might be as good a place as any to stop with it. I had a scenario in mind but have changed my mind on if I want to pursue it or now. So, it's where it is now.. Perhaps damned to the dustbins of history.
[Report This]Date: July 23 2016 7:18 AM Title: Chapter 3
He must hope the kid goes downstairs and not in his direction or walk passed him so that he can take the stairs.
You can feel the adrenaline.
It will be an interesting confrontation eventually with this family. He has taken gold and a panty. They maybe make a bigger deal with that panty, than the gold he is taking. ;)
Author's Response:
He's definately laid the groundwork for a compromising situation should he be caught I'd agree with you Barrow!
Thanks a lot for the great analysis on what you've read as it's spot on!!!!
Date: July 22 2016 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 3
Nice chapter. Realizing how noiseless the thicker floor was is cool. Never thought of what an advantage it would be.
Checking out the mothers slippers was awesome. Greatly enjoyed that. Love the picture. It helps paint the scene.
The other picture of the goose, harp and gold was a nice touch. Makes you smile.
Well done Croc,
Diesel
Author's Response:
I figured that adding images was not out of the quesiton so why not. I also thought that the scene that I had in mind definately required one rather than telling you a thousand words to desribe a very mundane visual for Jack.
Thanks again Diesel. :)
[Report This]Date: July 21 2016 8:13 PM Title: Chapter 3
Glad to see you're back. I love this story.
Author's Response:
Thanks Freeman.