[Report This]Date: February 04 2019 10:28 PM Title: Dungeon Master, now the Dungeon Dweller
Oh shit... This just keeps getting more and more interesting... ;) lol
[Report This]Date: July 13 2016 6:07 PM Title: Dungeon Master, now the Dungeon Dweller
I just read all 7 chapters right now, and I'm impressed. You have a great balance of story and sexy and I'm very interested to the point that I will continue following this story.
Kaylee and Kaitlyn have very similar names and I get them mixed up a few times. (Was that intentional? lol.)
I think you have read my mind on a few of these chapters becuase being tied to a pair of panties or a thing is on of my favorite things to read on this site. I read a girl tying a man to her mom's panties, a girlfriend tying a man to his ex's panties and this is the first time I see it happen between sister.
Also, I kinda wished that Kayleee didn't notice him becuase then that would've been a fun chapter.
Kaitlyn doesn't even seem to be a sister. She feels more like Kaylee's friend and the shock of seeing Drake in that drawer made her feel mad.
Another thing I enjoy is being unawarely carried in a purse. I know it's not exactly sexy, but the thrill that anything can happen always is a great cliffhanger.
Did I mentioned that I'm a fan of middle aged women? Nothing is sexier than a horny milf and I think Ricky will end up in an interesting situation that I hope turns sexual. (Fingers crossed.)
I got so many crazy ideas for Ricky's situation, but I fear that he won't be staying with her long so I'm probably shouldn't bother mentioning them. However, if this woman becomes a main character giantess, then I have lots of suggestions that I would love to see happen to Ricky.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your detailed review and opinion. I appreciate all of the input you have put into that. In fact, I want to throw you a bone. You tell me a few of those ideas you have, and I will certainly try and add them to this story. I will even give you a shoutout at the beginning chapter notes. And don't worry. I think when you find out who this middle aged woman is, it will be both a surprise and a delight because it will allow more interaction. Oh and to what you said about Kaylee being unaware. You're right. It would have been a fun chapter. But after JUST getting done with so much sexual things with Kaitlyn in the previous chapter, I wanted to purposfully add sexual tension for my readers. I basically cock blocked you all lol. But I JUST added a new chapter that I think you will find the release you need. The tension I built up about what could have been with Kaylee, I ended up relasing a little bit in this chapter.
And on one last note. I did NOT intentionally make their names similar to throw off my readers. Coming up with names for a story can be challenging. So I made two generic names that would be suitable for sister characters. For now, just associate Kaitlyn with age. Since she is the oldest teen character I have introduced into the story. Kaylee you can associate with her age too because she is only 15. I use the two E's at the end of her name to distinguish to make sure I don't get mixed up either.
Kaitlyn did seem like more of a friend. But agian, she is 18 and Kaylee is only 15. She is aware of how vunerable her little sister is so she is going to look out for her. She clearly didn't like Drake even before the incident so she is making it more prominant with her actions. I hope this helps explain some of my character development to you. And please do send in your ideas. I will gladly try and add them to this story for you.