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Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2016 8:43 PM Title: Chapter 3

Hey Bogus, 

Still with ya' here.  This is getting progressively better.  S L O W L Y.

  I do hope that Emma lasts.  Maybe, Alice could pretend that she lost her, and try to hide her somewhere from Lou, Or, talk Lou into allowing her to keep tiny Emma for a while longer, somehow maybe, just, ....I don't know?  I like Emma!  I don't want to see anything happen to her...

  Please, don't squash her!  She'll be a very obedient little pet, you just wait and see, just don't do anything rash, Okay?

   Well, Emma, I tried...?  

:/

 

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2016 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 3

The spoiled rich girl is seemingly nicer than the nerdy one, stereotypes they are a shatterin'!

Reviewer: KushKing Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12 2016 5:08 PM Title: Prologue

Another superb entry my friend. I especially enjoyed the flash back of lou making the boy who bullied her her tiny pet and definitely would like to see more of those flashbacks. I love that lou is also intelligent and not mindlessly evil but still cruel. Cant wait to see what games she and Alice have in store for Emma. This is story is definitely one of the best ive seen on here in awhile and were only 3 chapters deep!

Reviewer: thewiseman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12 2016 2:19 AM Title: Prologue

Very well written, you've definitely got talent. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

However, that joke about Louise's cooch was weird.

Reviewer: KushKing Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11 2016 3:16 PM Title: Prologue

Good stuff man. Cant wait to see what they have in store for the tiny guy lou brings home

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 11 2016 10:14 AM Title: Chapter 1

I'm enjoying this the more I see of it.

Reviewer: KushKing Signed [Report This]
Date: September 09 2016 2:07 PM Title: Prologue

Really want to see where this story goes man it's awesome so far. One thing I would suggest adding is maybe a physical description of what each of the main characters looks like just so we as a reader have a better picture.i too hope to see Alice have a tiny as a pet in this story!

Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 08 2016 8:28 PM Title: Prologue

Nice!  So casually written;you make it 'feel 'so simple.

  I like the way, that - they didn't even catch his name, and simply just, 'Gave him a random one', so powerful...

  I hope that Lou allows her roommate to eventually have a little pet, can't wait to see what she expects to do with one, ...whether it be male or female, doesn't matter, I don't expect they'll last very long!  Ha!  ;)

  Nice short, I want to see more! 

* midnightwriter85

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