Date: February 12 2017 12:48 PM Title: Chapter 18
Oh! With your reponse I think I see whats going on here. Is this binding thing part of a fetish for you? I never considred that, but it would explain why it keeps getting in the story for no particular reason. Me complaining about it must be like wondering why people keep getting eaten in a vore story...
If thats the case then carry on. I'll just show myself out.
Author's Response:
In Luna's Ascension, it's an integral part to the fetish aspects of the story. In Splinter's Edge, it's used (in the chapter that comes to mind) as a form of punishment. In YouTube, it's an aspect differentiating humans from premies. You'll notice in the story premies are often not referred to as humans. This is for a reason. So while the inclusion of binding may seem arbitrary and for 'no particular reason', it is indeed part of being a 'premie' and thus falls into the bucket of what I consider allowable to preserve realism. Clearly folks may disagree and consider it deus ex machina.
Regarding authors, you have your pantsers and your plotters. The former just write 'by seat of pants', whatever comes to mind. That describes my style. I'd never noticed the trend in my writing to include 'mental manipulation' aspects until you mentioned it. But it is what it is. Can't please everyone, as they say. Also can't psychoanalyze it too much; that's just quicksand and a drain on time that could be used for creating. It does mean I'll probably be more aware of it when writing future stories and may or may not include it (or if I do, give some hint in the summary). But I could never learn these things about my patterns and own style without feedback, so thanks for being honest in the chapters you managed to get through. :)
Date: February 12 2017 11:50 AM Title: Chapter 18
So, first I want to say that I am in awe of your output. A new chapter a week is already pretty good for this site, but with all of those wonderfully done pictures each week as well? Amazing, very good job.
As for the story... look I don't want to be that guy who just reviews to complain and demand the author change their story, but to be honest your story is losing me. And its all because of this binding thing.
I never liked the concept of binding. Whats the point of giving these super-powerful giants the additional ability to brainwash the main character (and it will never seem like its not brainwashing regardless of what the characters say)? I just don't see where this concept is leading to, which is a problem when it becomes increasingly prevelant in your chapters.
For instence, this whole chapter was building up to the big character develoment moment where Eli asked his sister to bind him voluntarily for the first time. But I don't know what I'm supposed to feel about that. Am I supposed to be happy for him? It's not like he triumphently conquered his fears, he just had them brainwashed out of him. What about his character was being developed? why is it important?
Since I don't know what to feel, I just feel nothing, and I'm left unsatisfied.
There were so many interesting things you could have explored in this chapter. It was his first time outside, his first time being treated like a pet in a cage by those children and his first time meeting anouther premie. You could have spent an entire chapter exploring any one of these themes. Instead you rushed past them to get to the binding scene that I don't understand.
I'm not sure where I'm going with this or what I want from you. It's just, unless I can get a clear sense of what you find so interesting about this binding thing that your making it the central piller of this story, I going to lose interest in this story entirely.
Which is a shame because everything else about it is fantastic. Its just all taking a backseat to the one part of the story I don't like or understand...
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm trying to learn 3D art. It's fun to create the pictures along with the story.
As for binding, thanks for expressing your concern/opinion. It's good for authors to know when they're losing folks. I can see your point of view. One thing I've found is that every author has a particular voice, identifiable and distinct if you read enough of that individual's stories. Most of mine, for example, include 'mental manipulation' in some form or another, whether it's age regression, the kiss as in Luna's Ascension, or Raine's abilities in Splinter's Edge. These all make it into my stories, almost invariably.
I can't explain why I'm drawn to the concept. I just am. But I'll keep you're commentary in mind.
Now, I will say that Eli did conquer his fear in this chapter. Sure, he asked for a binding at the end, but he went down the slide the first time without one. In some sense it was one step forward, two steps back as he deliberately requests a binding at the end, assuming you consider it a step backwards.
Ultimately I just write what comes to mind with little filtering and little concern for popularity. I expect my stories to fail, flop or become unfinished as I hop to some new idea...but that's why I make them free. My current goal is to write more and write faster (and more recently, create 3D content faster).
I don't know much about what will happen in next chapter, maybe more binding, maybe not. Regardless I do like hearing thoughts, including 'critical' ones, so thanks for taking the time to comment!
[Report This]Date: February 12 2017 10:28 AM Title: Chapter 18
Again very good. The way they have all kind of realistic protection and facilities for the premies makes the world feel real.
Realistic development and behaviour.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Barrowman! The screen was perhaps a little less secure than what I'd originally envisoned, but still believable...in a world where perfect premie facilities simply haven't been designed yet, folks improvise.
Date: February 07 2017 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
The story is good so far I have to say but I think at this point, regression then back together then binding and more stewing... it would almost be better for him to either just get with Parker or break up at this point it feels like.
Author's Response:
He doesn't seem too happy with Parker. And he does do a lot of stewing. Then again, it's only been a few days since he talked to Parker and she did kinda drop a bombshell on him. :)
[Report This]Date: February 07 2017 10:48 AM Title: Chapter 17
Positive chapter. He is recovering and adjusting. I wonder if he has to go to his school again.
What a difference with internet and online gaming compared to a time before all that. Can you imagine being shrunken without these things? That is a whole different world. Being shrunken has no meaning in the online world.
Good detailed report of the life of a shrunken boy and his environment. Good progress of the story. :)
Author's Response:
Yup, if I got shrunk and didn't like the situation, online world would be a great escape mechanism. For a while at least.
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: February 07 2017 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 1
This story is getting good. The idea of "binding" is quite good. Keep it up.
Author's Response:
Will do!
Date: February 04 2017 8:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
OOPS! Sorry, SpookyTaco! My bad! Why didn't I see it???
Author's Response:
It's all good. :)
[Report This]Date: February 04 2017 7:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
As I write this, I just finished Chapter 7. This story is good so far, but this story Desprately needs...No, is CRYING out for a "Slow Size Change" tag. Please add the tag!
Author's Response:
Hmm, I'm not sure how to add a tag. It does have 'slow size change' category already. Regardless, thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: February 04 2017 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 16
Very strong stuff again. If I address all the good details, interaction and development, this review would be super long.
Eli and the family seem to be on a path filled with errors and mistakes but is lucky that many people know about him and he is somewhat famous even. So he has to learn how to best handle the subtle government brainwashing of his younger sister and mother and try to keep his sense of self. For them it is also a learning experience and they will find out eventually what is best.
I think Ally suffers the most because she can imagine best of what it must be like. Seeing this all happen. With her I get the feeling she already imagined what it would be like and that the same lines she says to Eli would make her just as mad and frustrated as she was in his place.
This is very interesting. There are many different roads to choose from, whatever you as writer decide it can be very interesting development to read.
Author's Response:
Insightful. Ally does seem the most level headed in some respects. As far as the path the story will take, I'm hoping it surprises me too.
Date: February 03 2017 8:20 PM Title: Chapter 16
Based on how he reacted before, Eli is gonna be so pissed when it finally wears off completely at home.
Author's Response:
Haha, we'll see soon enough.
Date: February 02 2017 5:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
@White Wolf. I do find the concept of shrinking/size difference interesting. For the rest I agree with you an everything. I could not have explained it better. Alas, many people post to much nonsense that stories like these can be overlooked easy here.
Here the link of another story with subtle feelings.
http://www.giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=5452
Author's Response:
I read that story. Good stuff. Too bad the author stopped writing it.
Then again, I abandon stories all the time. :)
[Report This]Date: February 01 2017 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great stuff! Haven't read the whole thing yet, but I can already tell this one is going to be one to remember. I'm not even into shrinking material, either. Just love the way the character personalities contrast one another, and the very real depiction of depression and terror that would be associated with the size change.
This is something I rarely ever see done in GTS writing, and it shocks me - you don't need domination/abuse in order to feel terror from this kind of material. Instead, it's the subtle, just-under-your-skin chills you get when you can realistically put yourself in this character's shoes and feel the fear they must experience, even with love and support from the other characters around them.
I'm rambling, but this is seriously good stuff. I want to set aside a good 45 mins or so and read through the whole things soon. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Thanks, White Wolf! You can skip to chapter 13 or so if you want to avoid the shrinking material. :)
I agree with your thoughts regarding the subtleties of shrinking. There are so many, keeping things 'realistic' still makes for an interesting story.
Date: February 01 2017 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 15
I predict that we'll see examples of binding in other stories on this site over the next few months, and it will settle into a regularly used trope. Great addition to the genre.
Author's Response:
Haha, I'm sure something similar has been used before. Nothing new under the sun. :) Thanks!
[Report This]Date: January 31 2017 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 15
@pkong. Those hypnoses only seem to work in the previous stages. Now that his mind is back, he is now in the adjusting period.
Again a very good chapter. This relationship of 3 seems interesting. I hope Eli find the happiness with her/them he wants, but that seems to be difficult. Wonder how you will let that develop. I sense a fear in Parker.
Have a couple of possible outcomes in my head.
I can say the same for every chapter. Wonderfull characters that all feel realistic and relatable. Winter, Ally, Eli, Parker very well written. He has very kind sisters. Very understanding and protecting has well being.
Good subtle hints you give of the sadness of his sisters and Parker about the situation.
I will read your Fyth stories too. I don't mind soft vore. The story is what I find important and the characters. It must progress too and not get stuck too long in fetish mode and/or turn in unrealistic characters/behaviour.
By the way, love the renders too. Look forward too the next chapter what Eli will encounter in this very interesting new alien world.
Author's Response:
Well his regression stages are over. As Parker explained, the 'hypnosis' really isn't hypnosis. But it's difficult to describe until you've experienced it.
As for my Fyth stories, I plan on creating pictures for Fyth Farmhand eventually.
As for YouTube, I try to keep the unrealistic parts to the one thing that's allowed to be unrealistic -- the state of becoming and being a premie. The binding/regression parts got a pass because they're both related to the premie phenomenon. While a teenager talking about polyamory seems unrealistic, it's debatable. For example, it seems like the most radical concepts (e.g., gender exlporation) originate from teens these days. Sometimes they're not sure what they want. Sometimes they're sure. So it's conceivable...Parker's feelings. There's really still a lot we don't know about her in general.
Date: January 31 2017 8:55 PM Title: Chapter 15
Man, your guy just can't catch a break! I thought he actually had some very good points to argue. I can see why they wouldn't want him running around on the floor when they don't know where he is, but locking him in his house is too far. If you lose too much freedom whats the point of living?
Of course then he had to screw it up by proving how irresponsible he is...
Also, did you really have to give them the power of hypnosis? As if they didn't have enough power over the poor guy. heh.
Author's Response:
He did kind of screw it up, didn't he? I suppose he does act a bit childish still at times.
We'll learn more about binding in the next chapter. It was Eli's first experience with it, and Parker's quite talented at dealing with premies, so he was at a disadvantage. Also, it was his first time being grabbed by a giant person.
Thanks for the review!
Date: January 31 2017 4:26 PM Title: Chapter 15
awesome story. i love the pictures as well
Author's Response:
Excellent. The pictures are fun to create.
Date: January 31 2017 2:00 PM Title: Chapter 15
woah. A threesome between Parker, Zoey, and Eli? Can one premie handle two full-sized girlfriends? This'll be interesting. So are they bound whenever they are picked up in a fist like that. It'l be hard to carry him without binding him if that's the case. I'm really interested for when/if Eli gets to meet Parker's dad. I'm sure it would be healthy for Eli to interact with another person his size. There at the end, I feel so bad for Eli. It's gonna be so emberassing for him to be caught like that. Also, Ally's gonna want to know how he got out. Eli will be pissed if they tape the window shut or something.
PS I love that picture of Ally holding Eli. You can see the contemplativeness in her eyes.
Author's Response:
Should learn more about binding in the next chapter. The meeting with Parker's dad occurred in the chapter I tossed out. However that's not to say he won't be making an appearance.
Date: January 27 2017 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 14
I know I already reveiwed this chapter, but I just wanted to add how much I LOVE the conversation between Ally and Eli. I keep coming back to read it over and over. Just how each of them has something they're not to happy about having said, both of them almost hanging up on the other at one point, and having to start over. And when Eli tells her about his fear, she seems really understanding. She knows she scares him and she's trying to make him feel more comfortable. But after everything they still love eachother. It's such a cool relationship you've built between them.
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoyed the convo! Ally does love her brother, but she's no-nonsense. She's the opposite of Winter in some ways.
Date: January 27 2017 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 14
Love the way the dollhouse and TV allow Eli to have semi-normal interactions with people. Fantastic chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks again for the commentary! I'm surprised a couple of reviewers noted the TV. Premie technology still isn't as 'advanced', due to the lower demand (far fewer premies than humans), and less time the premie phenomenon has existed in general. So what might make a small phone or smart watch for a human, makes a fine TV for a premie. The converting between the technologies is relatively simple due to similar scale...compared with creating something much smaller like a premie smartphone (components and engineering required to produce something viable at that scale would be significantly more challenging).
Date: January 27 2017 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Yeh, I'm trying to keep it realistic. There's plenty of crush/vore/sexualize/enslave content out there, and sure, some of that stuff MAY happen if real life if someone shrunk, but it's just as conceivable (if not moreso) that folks would behave like rational people. That being said, there's still plenty of fertile ground for conflict, drama and character evolution.
Totally agree with you. I don't touch these crush and vore stories with those one dimensional characters.
Author's Response:
Crush and vore have their place. I actually found a recent interest in vore and wrote my second Fyth story using the trope. However, I agree with you on character dimensionality. Give me a character who black/white evil/good, a character who is real, and I'll enjoy the story 10x more. With soft vore, that's possible. With hard vore and crush, it's also possible but far more difficult to pull off. I'd still have trouble reading the latter two simply because it's not my preference, but I'd venture to say the readers who do enjoy such darker stories would enjoy them more when the character falls more into the 'gray' area.