Date: November 24 2016 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
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[Report This]Date: November 24 2016 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
Another excellent chapter! Really enjoying the whole story so far. I loved the footsie chapter, the image of Jeanne rubbing tiny Sara between her feet with lotion was incredibly sexy! also love the flip flop scene with Sara being tired to the strap and subject to both girls sweaty toes!
I'd love to see Sara stripped of her clothes. they sound a bit worse for wear anyway. and it would be another way for Jeanne to humiliate her. Strip her naked then Jeanne compares their bodies, giving Sara an intimate view/tour of her body as she is slid/rubbed all over. then Jeanne takes Sara to bed to live out that sensual dream. Sara is rubbed over Jeanne's nipples, shoved into her hot pussy, stuck up her ass while Jeanne uses a vibrator. when Jeanne cums she drops Sara into the pool of cum and leaves her over night.
Maybe an unaware chapter too, Jeanne knows Krystal has a vibrator/dildo as well so ties or sticks Sara to it. then Krystal uses it at night. Sara gets stuck to the cum inside Krystal's dirty panties.
Also maybe we see how Jeanne shrank Sara as she decides to shrink some humiliating clothes for her. a cheerleader uniform, adult/kinky school girl uniform, bikini, pink onsie etc?
Author's Response:
Yes, her clothes are getting pretty ragged. I don't expect them to survive many more chapters.
I do plan to have Sara interact with both sisters sexually (more than just a car ride home this time), so we'll see. ;)
Cheerleader outfit is coming, once Jeanne gets back to school (still working on writing in that direction).
Date: November 23 2016 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
I doubt physically active sinters like them smoke so probably not. Me myself I believe this story is leading to 2 possible endings. Sara's death or captivity permanently until she dies.
Not a whole lot has been said about how she was shrunk yet so maybe have Jeanne enlighten her perhaps? It's apparent Jeanne is definitely the spiteful type since she is literally going to kill a girl over cheerleading so I don't see any happy endings unless Krystal intervenes somehow. The detail you use when you describe Sara and Joanne's aware interactions are top notchalf. It's why I keep checking back every day lol.
I'm not great with ideas and you have covered my favorites really so far so I can only wait and see what else you come up with man. I hope you don't run dry yet!
Author's Response: That's the dilemma I'm facing right now: death or eternal captivity. I'm leaning more towards captivity, as Jeanne keeping her alive as a pet/sex toy would be more humiliating than outright killing her (not that she won't try again). As for the origins of Sara's shrinking, I actually had an entire chapter written to answer that, but I decided to scrap it. Jeanne was going to be an intern at a lab, which would give her access to the equipment needed to shrink Sara. But I couldn't make it work and keep it realistic (besides shrinking tech of course). Working in the aerospace industry myself, I can't imagine someone at her skill level being able to successfully sneak off with such a dangerous prototype device to use it. The thing would be too heavily protected, which also ruled out being Sara to the lab (tricking her into a field trip or something). In the end, that chapter was gutted, and the remnants became chapter 12.
Date: November 23 2016 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
Great story. I love how cruel Jeanne is with Sara. Could I suggest that Jeanne smokes and ties her little bug to the tip as she smokes a cigarette?
Author's Response:
I honestly didn't plan to have either sister smoke (and MadHatter has a point woth tjem being physically active). I would probably have to introduce another character into the scene in order to bring this element into the story. I have toyed with the idea of a third character (Jeanne's lover perhaps, with an equally cruel personality), so it might work in that context.I might need more than 1-2 chapters to bring that to fruition though. O.O