Reviewer: TarTar Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2016 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Lacy and Kiyoko's Passion

Ooh, three chapters!! Merry Christmas to you, too! Let's see...

Chapter 14: Nice to see Ana getting some unwanted attention, :).

Chapter 15: I'm really liking how civs continue to constantly keep popping up, and how this wasn't all a one time thing. Good job at keeping the story fresh. You're better than many at pumping out chapters relatively quickly. Thumbs up x 50 for not randomly abandoning the story when it gets good, as it has happened before (fingers crossed).

I'm curious to see what will happen to Coffee Table Land with it being in "neutral" territory and everything. I mean who knows what would happen if Jess found one of the super tiny lands... so far she's only had experience with "big" skyscraper type stuff

Chapter 16: lots of action here (good thing). I liked Jessica before, but I'm really liking Lacy now.. (as well as her friend). Awesome awesome chapter, hopefully there will be more like it.

Also, I like how there is already some tension between the Four: Lacy calling Jess a bitch, Miranda not trusting her and waiting until she leaves to reveal the newly arrived Coffee Table Land, etc. It could lead to someone getting mad at someone and getting revenge on them, things that otherwise wouldn't happen. For example, Jessica playing with Ashton City, a place that otherwise would be far less likely to be messed with by Miranda. 

Oh, and the part with the candle was very creative; love seeing things like that, and I really love how Lacy thinks.

Sorry for the long review.  I bet it's tough coming up with new ideas, but you're showing no signs of slowing down.

Keep 'em coming, PZ!!