Reviewer: newb Signed [Report This]
Date: December 05 2017 9:18 PM Title: Date Night

I must say, this story is quite a gem on this site. As NRawk said, this is giving so much more detail to the mental state of Tanner, and how being that small can truly break someone even if those around them mean well. I never expected this behavior out of Blake, but reading back, I see how it makes sense. It feels like every action has real consequences as opposed to temporary ones. Well done! I can’t wait for next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the comment. At its core I don't want the story to be mean spirited, as many physical limitations he has to cope with the mental stress is something that I found as important as he has to adapt to the world and his peers. The same applies to his peers as they have to learn to adapt to him, something that Blake who despite being kind-hearted (and impulsive) just figured out when it dawned on her how a flare in her temper left him scared out of his mind. I didn't want her moment of temper to come too far out of left field, but understandable why it'd bother her that Tanner quit like that given her lifestyle, plus she's not used to dealing with Tanner solo for extended periods of time so it's as much of a learning process for her too. Stay tuned.

Reviewer: nightedly Signed [Report This]
Date: July 14 2017 4:11 PM Title: Date Night

I'm sure I'm not alone when I say that I need more! This story is fantastic and I'm dying to see where it's headed. Please keep up the great work.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, I'm glad you've liked what you read so far.  We're almost at our first major conflict of the story. Stay tuned. 

Reviewer: carlosgrape Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20 2017 2:52 PM Title: Date Night

Considering how she felt about Tanner being outside on a table with ingrid, I'd hate (enjoy) to see Ivory's reaction to the psychological/hinted physical abuse Marcelle is and has placed Tanner under. I'm sure Ingrid wouldn't be pleased as well, but it appears you've set up Tanner's tormentor as quite the manipulative mallicious character to be able to keep him quiet about it.

I'm curious though; will Ivory's date be meeting Marcelle as well? Also, the date aspect is interesting in that the possibilites of haven't really been explored through other stories on this website; if her date treats Tanner as anything less than Ivory's son, I'm sure she would be firm in defending Tanner and droping the guy considering how caring she is of her children. Additionally, if he is somewhat weirded out, but also somewhat accepting of the shrunken step-son, that would create for interesting relationship dynamics and how everyone would interact with each other.

I'm guessing from Tanner's vocabulary/dialect that he does a lot of reading in his likely spare time.

Also, props to you for not making this an overloadingly fetish based story that shoves feet/vore/other common fetish in every chapter. Read 'Homunculus' by Cayce as an example of this. But credit where due, you forshadowed it. Show not tell is well incorporated in this story.

 

Author's Response:

Oh yes, I'm sure Ivory would be none too happy. Unfortunately Marcelle is a bit too crafty to be caught carelessly abusing/tormenting Tanner.

Yes, Marcelle will be present as well. Since she'll be in the household for the time being she's along for the ride too. I'm glad you find the impending occurrence of Ivory's date to be a point of interest. I intend for that be quite a landmark for the story when it's revealed what sort of man he is.

Yeeah, not like he has much else to do in his spare time.

Thanks for the last compliment, I know it's pretty tempting to jump right into the thick of the eroticism, but I really want there to be a strong sense of characterization and knowing what makes everyone tick, and in doing that will bring more context to any fetish based things that may happen (which is what I aimed for in chapter 5). 

 

Appreciate the thouht you put into the review, stay tuned.

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02 2017 3:34 AM Title: Date Night

Well I must say that I enjoyed it. You have established the characters. Looking forward to seeing where you go. Please keep Ivory greatly involved. Will he ever get a babysitter so sis can do other things? Maybe a neighbor or another mom.
Later,
Diesel

Author's Response:

Glad you did. For certain everyone in the core family will have great significane in the story and there own character arcs so to speak. I have things coordinated up to a point and a babysitter isn't necessarily in the plans, or perhaps I should say there won't be a character whose specific/main function is to serve as a babysitter. I feel like that'd make things a bit too convenient for the family. At the moment, I'll just say could happen since I haven't decided if I'll expand the character roster; but unlikely.