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Reviewer: blackairow Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 05 2017 6:12 PM Title: Part Two: Nightmares and Memories

Question. When Maudie says “Now you’re not!” , do you mean "No you're not!" ? 

As others have said, if you had not stated that english was not your first lanuage, I never would have known. Still really enjoying your story so far and I'm eagerly awaiting your next chapter. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for pointing that out, I fixed it.

Reviewer: GhostWriter44 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05 2017 7:31 AM Title: Part Two: Nightmares and Memories

For English not being your native language, you could've fooled me!
It'd be awesome if before Noel is found by Maudie, he sees her bring home a group of tinies (men and women) and crushes/disposes them in various ways and that makes him even more frightened to be found. And maybe whenever he does get found, Maudie could crush tinies in front of him to toy with him. I don't know, just a couple of ideas. Either way, it's been a great start!

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05 2017 12:36 AM Title: Part Two: Nightmares and Memories

Excellent. Down he goes.

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