Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2020 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 19: Guilt

Honestly the kind of shit most people have going on in there brains isn't worth going blind for, I imagine. Or would you just temporarily go blind every time you tapped into the power?

Damn that was fucking cold, the guy turned into a barbarian trying to save his daughter and not only in the end was it all for naught, she died arguably more excruciatingly than just beinng bled out. I do have to wonder, what's the logic in thinking eating live tomkins is gonna fuck up your intestines but  eating them raw anyway? I'm guilty of it too, but like imagine the bacteria and the parasites, man.

Oh boy, Teagan's slowly coming to that painful revelation that despite humanity as a whole being all but genocided, most of the time there are true innocents who get caught up in shit on either side. I hope Hassan and Aaliyah actually live to the end and don't DIE IN THE NEXT CHAPTER, GEORGE RR MARTIN. And don't try to get away with it on a technicality like "they died two chapters in, not one like you said".

And then I get why people (or in this case, humanoids in general) will like, emigrate to new lands, but in the case of the tomkins... why? They've got medieval tech at best but are somehow able to cope with a landscape that has such large animals (LIKE LIONS AND BEARS) You expect me to believe a bunch of 3 inch twerps with little swords are going to be able to throw down with something that can effortlessly tear open a human if so inclined?

oh yeah and then I noticed some younger-ish tomkins talk about the "Old Lands" like they know them, but certainly they couldn't have ever been there?

One last thing. I am having whiplash from my hatred of both tomkins and humans and the attempts to justify who's right and who's wrong and YOU ARE TEARING ME APART, LISA

Author's Response:

ok so i was thinking permanent blindness but temporary blindness when you use it is probably a bit more fair tbh, id probably go with the telepathy in that case

 

Hannah would probably think that eating a live tomkin is liable to kill you due to their vicious struggling and tearing at your important inside bits moreso than bacteria, which given the technology of the time, people only have a vague awareness of. Aaliyah and Hassan, as nice as they are, don't have a lot going for them, Aaliyah especially so given her paralysis from the waist down... I can't make any promises as to their plight, I'm afraid. Lions and bears are something I've thought of myself, and that may or may not be part of the reason I threw magic into the story halfway in. Even so, enough crossbows (sized like siege engines to the tomkins) and anything'll go down, especially when it can barely even see you. I can also confirm that none of the tomkins we've seen so far have ever been to the Old Lands, but stories and legends have a way of persisting like they're alive themselves, especially when stories are all you have to distract yourself from the fact that you live in a nightmare world where everything is huge and wants you dead.

 

I honestly can't decide myself if the tomkins or the humans are right here... I guess I'm sorta shooting for that 'both sides are bad guys' kinda feel, given that both sides seek the wholesale slaughter of the other, even those who are just innocents caught in the crossfire.