Date: March 19 2018 6:08 PM Title: The Second Name
love it, cant wait for abbey to eat people <3
Author's Response:
Then you are going to like the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: March 19 2018 4:39 PM Title: The Second Name
Very cool concept.
Author's Response:
Thanks :) I pretty much wrote this as akind of a joke piece so I am glad people like it and I will keep trying to improve it.
Date: March 19 2018 3:50 PM Title: The Second Name
Happy to see this updated. I love how extreme you went with the shrinking as it is one of my favorite ranges and doesn't get a lot of content. I do prefer your works in third person though. I also think if you want to continue this story it needs more motivation from the main character beyond getting out of a bad situation. It doesn't kill the story for me but it makes the shrink scenes feel less built up and more random. All in all I do hope to see more of your stuff (the Elite 50 was straight up everything I could want from a story).
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comment. It has been a while since I went with shinking of that scale in a story so I decided to just go for it. As for the prespective I find it more fun to write first person. It flows alot better for me and I like getting a feeling of the situation fully from a characters eyes. As for shrinking motivation I would take what you wrote to thought, but this was intentional on my part. There is no prior build up to the shrinking because it is not what she wants to do. Unlike in lets say a story like the elite 50, where the protagonist is a sadisitc murderer on a vengence spree. This protagonist would prefer not to kill and is shoved into situations that force her into doing something she would consider horrible and test her as a person, especially at the end of this chapter since she is seeing an appeal from her two killing experiences. I persoanlly feel she is the most human character I have written since she can be somewhat relatable unlike my past characters who are boarderline psychopaths(which I love).