[Report This]Date: June 10 2017 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 5
Phew now things are back on the right track. I'm glad Eclipse wasn't dumb enough to shoot her with the crossbow and he was actually protecting her. (Not that she really needed it but it was a nice gesture). I feel like as long as he behaves she will be doing more teasing him than torturing him which is more ideal for a budding romance lol. At least she realized how brurtal it was to make him lick her dirty feet. Your take on him vomiting up the dirt was one of the most realistic I've ever seen that portrayed by the way. Glad to see she instictivly protected him from the cold water and didn't force him to do something humilitaing to repay her. Both of them are akward around the opposite gender for their own reasons, but it seems like they can at least grow together now unlike when Eclipse was stonewalling her before. I love how she renamed him Clip btw.
The people who wronged Clip in his past are in for a world of hurt.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked his new name. I was actually uncertain with changing his name, but I feel better now that you like it. And she didn’t make Eclipse lick her dirty feet, she used him as a foot rug and made him eat her toe jam. (Which is a lot worse. ^^) Thanks for your continued support, I feel joy well up inside whenever I read your reviews. As for teasing, she’s going to tease him as much as my cliffhangers do. XD
[Report This]Date: June 09 2017 9:32 AM Title: Chapter 5
This story is unfolding nicely :)
Author's Response:
Thanks! I’m glad that you enjoyed it enough to let me know what you think! Have a good day :)
Date: June 09 2017 4:50 AM Title: Chapter 5
Pretty decent chapter! The pair's alternating bouts of gentleness and domination are a good match. You do a nice job of convincing us that Nicole truly does feel above the people, especially those who disobey, and doesn't feel guilt over getting rid of them. It makes for a fun back and forth. I didn't quite buy her emotional turn with the tears so soon after opening up to Clip, but that's more just story taste. Also, some of the dialogue occasionally sounds a bit too modern - the best lines and exchanges in this are definitely the ones where the pseudo-medieval/fantasy speak is in play. Overall though I'm enjoying your work here, keep on.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I don’t make much medieval lines with the two. But I will try it with the knights, if they encounter any :D You made my day with this review!
Date: June 09 2017 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 5
Great story, loving the chemistry between the protagonists. Clip is a savage though. "Don't discomfort yourself, just kill me" was pretty funny imo.
Author's Response:
If you’re hoping for funny comebacks, there’ll be more. Though not so much as to turn this into a comedy XD. Thanks for the review dude!