Date: June 30 2017 10:36 AM Title: Contact
Tom Speedy
I like this story. I like it alot. But I have to agree with Tom. I really like and very much apprecaite your stories Duggernaut; but was extremely disappointed when "Bang Your Head... (Mo's Story)" and “Shoebox” got dropped to the way side. I would joy in reading the rest of "Cold Case"; yet am affraid it may take you away from your other fine works.
Hey I'm guilty of the exact same thing, even more so. I start things and never finish them, that's just who I am.
You also don't owe any of us anything, though we owe you our gratitude. It's just, rather than being left hanging of what could be, we all like a Happy Ending! {Ha Haaa}
Author's Response:
Thanks for the insight and all I can say is I haven't entirely abandoned most of my unfinished stories - currently revising Bang Your Head and stepped away from Shoebox trying to decide if I want to change the early dynamic of that story. I sometimes get ahead of myself. Please enjoy this one for what it is. :)
Date: June 30 2017 8:22 AM Title: Contact
Really interesting X-Files type story line. The fact that Lily is probably actually answering Abel's questions without him realizing it is a nice twist.
My only critical comment would be that neither Abel nor Tom admired what I hope is a Beautiful "smooth hairless vagina".
Lily? As in Lilith, Adam's first wife? You have put other religuous references in your story, so just curious.
Yet another excellent story by you. Thank you for writing these.
Author's Response:
Another clever catch, Lily, Lilith, Lilitu hmm one never knows.
[Report This]Date: June 29 2017 6:01 PM Title: Contact
Someone likes to play games.
Taunting the authorities is a bad sign. Especially if you commit your crimes while doing so. This type tends to think they're pretty smart and sometimes escalates when they get into a "challenge phase."
The problem is that when you're assigned to deal with one of these, you feel responsible for everyone they take while it's "your problem." And the perp gets a sadistic thrill from the pain they're causing you. No wonder Gil was a burnout.
The fact she's visiting Gil's house could be a sign she wants to know about the FBI's case. I could also be a distraction. Is she getting the info she seeks while they're looking for Gil?
I'm intrigued Duggernaut. Thanks for sharing this.
pix
Author's Response:
As always, thanks for the read and review Pix. It's all downhill from here