Date: July 19 2017 12:16 AM Title: Dream Weaver
Such a great story. The mysterious and darkish tone it has is so appilin. I just can't wait for Abel to finally meet the so called Ms. Lily
Author's Response:
Thanks Sir Purple Wolf, glad I was able to establish a sense of atmosphere! Please continue to enjoy
Date: July 13 2017 8:27 PM Title: Dream Weaver
Good chapter, I liked it. To bad there wasn't a little buldge struggling in her tummy that she could have patted while moaning "Mmmmm". Hopefully I'll have such pleasant dreams.
There is one critisism and I hope you do not get upset that I state this. Especially in light of the fact I look forward to your postings of this story because I enjoy it so much.
My critisism, and I only speak for myself on this, is your word choice. I like reading a story that flows with simple verbage rather than a story where I have to stop to look up words such as "tenebrous", "verdant", "fuliginous", "corpulant" and "ebon".
My personal opinion is that your time would have been well spent on a quick proofread. Again, I really like your stories and hope you do not take my comments as insults; they are not meant to be. The story itself is fantastic.
I may not have the most expansive vocabluary of any of your readers; but isn't the main goal of writing that of successfully communicating?
I once asked a man a question using a bunch of fancy, $10 words I had learned. The man responded with one word, just that single word and I realized I was being such a pompus fool that in my arrogance I completely failed in even remotely asking a simple question and was left embarrassed for all to see. His responce: "What?"
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review DW, I appreciate the feedback as it help me understand how my words are being interpreted. No offense taken by any means. I once asked a man why he was trying to spend ten dollar words when he only had 2.50 in change in his pocket :)
[Report This]Date: July 12 2017 7:58 PM Title: Dream Weaver
Hopefully not a prophetic one.
Probably a gift from our killer. Gil said he saw her in dreams.
Hopefully the cocky murderess will let details slip in these little magical “teases” that slip a noose around her pretty neck.
So,shrinking people and dream walking...what other tricks does she have up her sleeve?
It’s pretty clear she wants to shred Abel’s mind. Her sadism is driving her to seek more “intimate” forms of cruelty. I’m really hoping she get’s very little from her attempts.
Nice interlude Duggernaut. Really getting into the supernatural feel of this.
Pix
Author's Response:
Great! I really wanted to break it up some and show off a little teaser.
[Report This]Date: July 12 2017 6:25 PM Title: Dream Weaver
Whoa, what a nice dream scene. I think that the mysterious Ms.Lily must've left a little somthun'-somthun' inside his apartment, with that fragrantly scented perfume,... some kind of little 'hint', as to what's going to be his future - if he continues to track her - the way that he is... Go for it, Joe! ;`)
Very nicely done, Dugger. So easy to picture her in that alley, I could almost feel the heat coming off of her tremendous body!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the props midnight, glad you approve!