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Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 1:14 PM Title: The Morning After

One can't help but wonder if Lily's secret to being stealthy isn't her ability to change her own size, walk under doors and stand right there in a room with you completely unnoticed.

Will we find out if Lily really did eat Gil and poop him out today?  Where will she poop him, on Abel's pillow still all tied up?  Is Albert Kinney next to be all tied up in a text message picture from Lily to Abel's cell phone?

All I can say is Lily needs more victims.  Ha Ha, perhaps send Abel a picture of a bunch of tied up men and as he tries to figure out who and where they are he notices it looks a lot like their inside of a lunch pail or a stove pot.

Glad by last critique was not offencive {at least I didn't have to look up Oedipus complex this time, ha haaa}.  Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 12:59 PM Title: The Morning After

Alright. I admit it was immature of me to rant on this story without even reading it. I was too quick to judge and seeing another story made me worried that you would abandon Tom's story.

Seeing as you have managed to update all 3 of these stories quite often made me really curious to finally give this story a read. And boy was I surprised.

This story is reminds me why I fell in love with your stories in the first place. The "contract" and "botched" both had good suspense, drama filled scenes that made me feel locked in to every chapter.

While your sexy scenes in my opinion have felt a bit similar in your stories, your drama-filled scenes are outstanding, no doubt the best on this website.

You bring up the same brilliant principle that you used in the contract. In that story, the group of women were laughed at before they began using their powers. Cade, I think that was his name. He was the detective and he really underestimated the woman whom I forgot her name.

In this story, Abel and his coworkers underestimated that a woman could do this much damage and being a woman as the suspect was laughed at when Gli mentioned it.

Also, these hints that are thrown at Abel are amazing! The dreams, the phone calls, the missing people, the perfume, Gil's clothes! It's truly a game of cat and mouse and this feline is definately toying with her food.

I love that description of the file in the beginning of the story. Six inches tall bound with bindings. Your foreshadowing game is on point!

Oh my! Those text messages were amazing! Only true giantess fans would get the references. We know that the uppercase "little" meant that Gil shrank. Also, when Abel asked where is he and Lily showed her vagina was so funny but sexy at the same time. He was confused, but my eyes lit up and my heart beat was racing.

For the big words that DW mentioned, I agree, I have to look them up so I know what it means, but I instead find it a learning experience. I enjoy learning new words and using them. Also, I think a decent number of big words makes this case sound official. However, if it gets carried away and there are big words in every paragraph, then it would seem forced and maybe annoying.

I noticed that pixl8d seems to dislike this woman. I on the other hand love this woman. I want to be captured by her too! She showed a picture of Gil all tied up. That means she shrank and tied him and also shoved him up inside her! This is basically a new form of Stockholm syndrome for me. Man, I wish I was Gil.

Basically, ignore my "protest" rant review before. This story is marvelous and intriguing. Instead of protesting this story, I approve of it, and encourage it to continue.

I absolutely love this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 19 2017 9:03 PM Title: The Morning After

Okay, fine.  I'll give review 13 to a supernatural story.  No worries.  I'm not superst.....ACK!

Heh...just kidding.

Actually Abel has it right: FU Lily! 

I've had neighbors like Albert and I wouldn't wish them on anybody, except Lily.

Hopefully he's snoopy and detail oriented.

Great portrait of DC and great set up.  I'm really enjoying how Able is trying to get things done his way.  This should be a great constest of wits.

Thanks Duggernaut

 

pix

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