Date: January 30 2021 1:25 AM Title: Chapter 17
Wouldn't it be more natural to compare Siren's Combative Prowess with a "skilled MMA Fighter" instead of going for a specific brand?
That may just be me as I had to google UFC first though.
Interesting that Siren acts like Lizzy's the focal point of some prophecy as that normally includes a savior against something you cannot handle. What could Siren be up against that she just isn't able to beat? The Q-Continuum perhaps?
Given her threat Lizzy needs to get way stronger and that fast.
Either that or unlock a some (fairly potent) kind of time stretching.
Author's Response:
Thx for the review!
Actually, I find a common term like 'mma fighter' a bit boring to write.
I do know what you mean, though. Using a term like that makes it more
Reader-friendly as most readers know what an mma fighter is.
I always try to find a good balance between readability and the terms I use to describe something or someone as good as possible. To compare Siren with a skilled mma fighter gave me the feeling I was selling her short. I wanted to compare her with the best of the best. And that's where ufc comes in.
As for the story; there is only one thing that Siren cannot beat, but that will be reveiled later on in the story.