[Report This]Date: January 02 2018 5:23 PM Title: Embarrassment
Really enjoyed the chapter, great job on it! Really lobe Alejandro's wit and overall character so far.
Author's Response:
Thanks. Usually, he doesnt have to deal with his siblings arguing like that, because they both have equal access to him at home, but once he's in the outside world, a lot of MAJORS could get their hands on their elder brother... So Alejandro has to put those upstart youngster back in their place !
[Report This]Date: January 02 2018 3:56 PM Title: Embarrassment
You've fouled it up! You didn't even mention how minors were often hunted like foxes by motorbike riding MAJORS tailed by packs of artificially bred velociraptors like that one scene from Jurassic World. If you'd paid attention to the subtext of my last chapter you'd know that!
Seriously though great chapter. You added more detail than I did. I guess Alejandro's fortunate one of his parents is a geneticist. I really like the ebb and flow of tension in this dinner conversation. I could read a whole story of these characters just talking.
P.S. Feel free to add as many details as you want right now. The details of the Dark Age won't be revealed for a bit. Not until Izzellah sees that film. So anythings up for grabs! I'll be working on that chapter soon.
Author's Response:
Thank for the review. I'll probably add more informations as I feel it, if it doesn't contradict your work :). My secret evil goal is to push your universe into the need of a wiki like Titan Empire, Mouhahahahaha ! Herm...
Anyway, I'm rather glade that I've introduced more tension at the table, even if things will get a little less intense in two to three chapters (discounting the one I posted earlier today, :) !)