[Report This]Date: September 14 2018 1:13 PM Title: Chapter 5: Princess for a day
I'm really lazy, so I procastinated writing a review.
This story looks like it went kinda the wrong way, Delilah kinda ended up on the bottom end of this deal. But that was kinda the intention, going by the title I think. But I deep down, I really hoped it would be Delilah that took over some kind of city or country.
I wonder how much of this was purposefully planned by Elixasana.
Also, thanks for writing!
Date: September 10 2018 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 5: Princess for a day
Holy...amazing. Simply amazing. Loved every word. Truly not your typical vore story.
A+ :)
If you want better criticism, like writing criticism, let me know! ;)
Great story, I'll have to read some of your others.
Author's Response:
I'm open to any and all criticism anyone wants to give me. You can even insult me if you want, but don't expect me to respond to it.
Thanks for the comment(s) as in plural. Glad you liked the story. I'm a bit iffy on it myself (there are some typos and grammatical errors) I think some story elements could have been fleshed out, and for a vore story the vore was all at the beginning and fairly brief so I imagine I disappointed those fans. but I don't think it's bad for a shorter one.
Date: September 10 2018 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 5: Princess for a day
Holy...amazing. Simply amazing. Loved every word. Truly not your typical vore story.
A+ :)
If you want better criticism, like writing criticism, let me know! ;)
Great story, I'll have to read some of your others.
[Report This]Date: September 07 2018 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 5: Princess for a day
Love the ending, and it's great to see Elixsana did not disappoint. :) I love 'benevolent predators'.
Author's Response:
Well thank you.