Reviewer: misterwerder1234 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2020 10:29 PM Title: Chapter 8

That was really a great chapter. But as proposed in other reviews, in my mind you should not make the world too complex. The characters should be introduced one by one and in my opinion a thing like growing and shrinking back and a new "religion" would take away the good realtionships from your characters of your great story Idea. It would not fit in my opinion.

- I hope to see another family member soon (grandmother, aunt, cousin). Perhaps the grandmother had a rough day and forces our protagonist to massage her feet, stay in her nylons or stay in her bra to massage/kiss her breasts/nipples.

With that, every family memeber would be different to him. The mean/selfish grandmother, the overprotective mother and the changeable sister, who is sometimes mean and sometimes nice.

(But please no shrunken grandfather :D)

(the grandmother could be a tall woman in her middle 50s or early 60s, who dont look this old and is not chubby.)

Perhaps the grandmother could move in the house, after the grandfather passed away and now she is lonely and needs help and time with the family.

And Perhaps Sarah can come back and show allisson how many new slaves/pets she have and how she treats them.

- I hope the sister, mother and the other people are not only nice to him. They could force him to stay in their bra or shoe for the day after he misses some tasks or they could give him humilating tasks?

 

Anyway, sorry for my bad english and keep the great work up!!
I send you a coffee :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for the coffee. Im writing a chapter that introduces the grandma right now. Hopefully I can get it done soon. When I do, let me know if you like her attitude, and wanna see more of her.