Reviewer: sizeaddled Signed
Date: March 22 2024
Title: Chapter 2: Callie vs the Persuasive Professor
Wow, what a fantastic start! I especially enjoyed the depth of these characters.
I appreciate Duncan's resourcefulness and caution. I imagine if I were
in his situation I'd react similarly--however I doubt I'd survive the
fight with Bigsby! I feel he has a longing for human connection, but has
difficulties trusting--I sincerely hope that Callie turns out to be
someone he can trust.
Speaking of Callie, I especially love her character. She's a great gentle giantess. Well-meaning, but sometimes says or does the wrong things.
Meanwhile, Kristie is just as I imagined her based on your foreshadowing. I'm sure
this was just the tip of the iceberg for the trauma she inflicted on
Duncan.
I love the diverse set of characters so far, looking forward to the next
chapter!
Author's Response: Hey sizeaddled!
I think you should give yourself some more credit. I'm sure you would have found a way to take on Bigsby!
You're dead on about Duncan. He had some trust issues even before shrinking, so those have obviously gotten worse since falling below three inches tall. It's really hard to not trust Callie, though, as much as he tries not to. We'll see next chapter (whenever I get around to finishing it) whether or not a some people from his old life are trustworthy (and if his previous judgment of those relationships was accurate or not).
I'm really glad Callie has been so well received so far! I like your description of her.
I tried to put a lot of thought into foreshadowing various things in the first couple of chapters, so it's great to hear that you already had an idea of who Kristie is based on the brief mention of her in chapter one. He was able to escape from Kristie not too long after the events of that dream sequence, but her impact on his psyche is pretty significant.
And hopefully I can keep up that diverse set of characters next chapter (which I'm hoping to get out relatively soon). I really don't want my characters to overlap and cover the same ground.
Thanks for taking the time to review my little story! Maybe you'll beat me and get the next chapter of Delta Phun out first!