After suffering an accident in his scientist father's home lab, Jason finds himself at 4 inches in height. Now he must use his brain along with his brawn to get rescued. The only thing in his way. . . His sisters.
I actually just sat down and read all the available chapters today and found this one to be rather enjoyable to read. I'm not the largest fan of the feet aspect really, but just about anything else is fair game lol.
I do have to ask, do the sisters just hate the brother because he's smarter then them or they consider him a nerd only? I mentioned this before in another authors story, that it just feels odd for family to be so hateful to one another that they take stuff as far as this in even a fiction sometimes. I know families don't always see eye to eye, and some are far worse then others, but just being hateful to a brother because he doesn't share the same interests as them and they consider him a pain? That seems harsh.
At least the little sister seems to have a SMALL concience.. wonder if it will grow at all.
That's a decent question. I'd say Kylie ( the younger sister) is just more in the moment. Her first thought was to get help but the conversation broke down. She is mean to him, but only usually after provocation or peer pressure. She still views him as her brother though and that is why she feels bad. She is sort of torn between siblings.
Emily and her brother have a rougher relationship even when it was full size. She had resent for the fact that their dad gives him the most attention. It's more of a power play because she was always bigger than him anyway. There is still love maybe deep down, but the chance to mess with him, added to his durability and attitude give you what you have I guess.
Mix that with the realm of fiction. Makes for ok re-readability I think.
There is no need to get so heated on a fiction story on a fetish website guys, so don't go off the rails here with passion. We all have our kinks and opinions, you just gotta respect them here, it's why we come here to begin with. Understanding.
As for my opinion, I can agree where he is coming from when it comes to.. overly agressive family members not feeling great to me. It just feels unlikely that family has THAT much to hate about another family member. Especially at their age. Just seems crazy really, but that's the world of fiction I suppose. And as I said before in a previous story by Mrsirk, I couldn't agree much with the way the family handled eachother at all. It always felt too extreme..
As for the actual story review, this is an odd little bit of fun in this last chapter lol, I need to actually watch Pacific Rim I think though to understand what is going on maybe XD
As for the main story, the level if anger the sister is putting out is still pretty crazy even for a super enhanced kid to endure. it's definitely pretty nuts to expect him to fully recover from that... but that's once again up to the author right? I find the story interesting and I won't stop reading it as I have actually started to enjoy offering constructive critism on things. I've found quite a few gems on this site of authors who have a lot of talent for writing and I really appreciate those ones who put it out there for others to read on a site like this.
All I ask of any author really is to take any criticism with a grain of salt and not lose motivation. I already did that with a story I tried cause I was too much of a wuss to put it up. I may change my mind though so who knows!
Good luck with the story!
Lol I would definitely recommend seeing Pacific rim. It isn't exactly like this but it's still entertaining. I'm pumped for the sequel so I made this.
Also I don't really want to battle people in the review section. I'm done defending it now. The way I see it, people probably wouldn't say anything at all if the character wasn't interesting enough to care about so that is a good thing in my book.
This is my first attempt at a story anywhere, so people don't have a style reference on me, but I assure you that you are in good story telling hands here. . . . I think anyway.
Mira is a young woman with a curse to bear unlike any other. Faced with a dark craving that she's long since lost the battle against resisting, Mira preys upon her fellow college classmates in an effort to satiate her specific desires. That is until, she targets an acquaintance named Anthony, a good-hearted and genuine man who she knows from her psychology class. When powers that be determine that Mira can no longer control herself, they step in and place both the woman and her new friend into an impossible situation. One is at risk of losing their life on a day to day basis, while the other is constantly reminded of a relentlessly approaching deadline that if not met, promises a fate worse than a trip to Hell.
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Well this was a rather well done beginning. Established characters, a breif look at both personalities and a great start to a potentially amazing story I think. You attention to detail is great, and the interactions done well too.
If you were looking for some approval, you can have mine man! I look forward to where this goes, especially if every chapter is this large lol
Not gonna even lie. This story just became one of my "check every day for an update" kind of story
Your attention to detail and the character development over just 2 chapters is so good. I really do want to see where this goes man!! Good luck with the next chapters!
Thank you so much friend for all of your positive feedback! I really want to establish a narrative and delve into more than just the obvious, I always feel a little self-conscious about having a sword in two camps when it comes to this story's specific purpose. I want to write a something that can be engaging and meaningful, while simultaneously delivering on my preferred type of mature subject matter. Thanks so much for taking the time to review and respond! Hope you like the rest as it comes!
Another win man. If there is one thing I have to say about the story you are giving us, or to me at least, it's that you aren't throwing in mindless amounts of smut and such, but I STILL want to read all the details of whats going on, because with the way it's going, I imagine things will get a lot more interesting after this chapter really.
Like I said before though, definitely one of my "check every day for updates story" so I really hope the creative flow keeps going for you man!
Also, really think your strong suit right now is definitely slow character developement and that isn't a bad thing. Kinda reminds me of another authors stories I really liked, I think his name is sonicfan something, but he wrote some really good ones I liked to read cause they were more about the characters and a bit less about the fetish based stuff. It was great
Definitely going strong with your narrative and character development and I love it lol.
I've seen this scenario done in other stories, but nothing with this level of detail at all. I just really do love that about your story so far is how much detail you provide about what's going on at all times.
Seeing how Mira is combating her own inner demons.. (lul, pun?) it's interesting to see the next meeting for the two before school or whatever comes next at normal size.
Anthony's strange attraction to dominant woman is something I can relate too.. I kind of have the same preference I think. A woman who asserts her will is.. a turn on I guess? Or maybe i'm as weird as him, and why this story is so appealing to me.
THE ONLY critique I can offer in an even remotely negative aspect, is Mira's and anthony's feelings are... progressing pretty fast it seems. I dunno if that's just a surface thing or if they are like rapidly falling in love I suppose? I just enjoy the story so much that I don't wanna see the relationship blossom TOO fast I guess lol.. You are doing such a good job so far, I just want more XD
Good luck with the next one!
Hey there MadHatter! Thanks so much for reading, I really appreciate how much you enjoy the story thus far, it really gives me the confidence to write, and not just this piece either. Personally, from me to you, thank you, friend, for supporting me since the beginning. I totally get your concern too, when writing the earliest parts I thought maybe the outline didn't convey the interaction at the same pace as I had envisioned my transition to the story, but trust me, they feel attraction to each other, but there's a lot to overcome before something...Major... Happens. Keep reading, and I'm sure you won't be disappointed. Its also got a fairly long way to go, my last story was about 120,000 words, and I have only taken a break from that to write this as my main project.
Sorry for the late post, but I like this one a lot too. I like detailed stuff so you know i'm gonna enjoy it. I STILL do feel like the relationship is a bit fast, but it's not a bad thing really... it expidites the plot forward so that isn't a negative aspect.
Seeing the interactions and differences at both sizes is also fun really. I look forward to Mira's next "game" she uses him for next chapter probably lol, so good luck on the next one man!
I'm really glad you are still going this strong with this story. The introduction of a character who knows about Anthony and his situation is honestly very interesting as I mostly thought the story would be JUST mira and him. Now the mystery begins anew with Allison and as stated by the previous review, if this was a first attempt at lewd material then you get a strong A+ for effort man. Good luck for the next chapter!
I actually thought this story died! I'm so glad to see the fasionably grand return!
:D
This was made before reading. I was excited.
LOL! well be sure to read it and get back to me, friend! I'm always looking to hear what everyone thinks of my efforts.
Thanks so much for sticking around through my and the story's haitus!
Izzellah Ivory struggles to cope as a minority in a world of superior beings.
I waited to toss a review after reading the first couple of chapters since I saw you reusing the sisters and freinds for an alternate style story. at first I thought it was.. kinda lazy? but I have to admit, it has turned out more interesting then I initially thought. I enjoy your writing style so I couldn't put it down either way, so I had to read it lol
As for my thoughts, I find the dynamic between characters to be good really. They all have different opinions and circumstances and the relationship between sabrina and izzy doesn't feel super strange to me in this one like before. The bonding has me curious as well, but i'm getting a gist from the latest chapter of what to expect perhaps, so i'll wait and see!
So far, it's been a good dang read. Izzy isn't as hopeless in this story, still a strong character and such while the other characers all feel unique as well so far.
I do have ONE question though.. Noticed a lack of description in the last chapter and was really curious. When she put izzy on her shoulders... was she facing forward or backwards... I MUST KNOW!!
Well if it isn't MadHatter...-_- ......Calling me to court once again I see! Is that a saying? I don't actually know but is should be!
Already figured out this story is just a lazy cash grab! Just like a Disney sequel. A straight to video Disney sequel! Well as previously mentioned in some comment or end note somewhere I'll show you!....How happy I am you decided to comment! Thanks!
And geez! I thought she was facing forward...but if she was facing backward?! ö_ö It would literally change the context of everything! I-I need to think on this.
I'll get an arbitrary five star rating out of you...or DIE trying! But probably not trying that hard.
Vera has recently been fired from her position as a university teacher, and what is a wealthy middle-aged woman with experience in the pharmaceuticals industry and a vendetta against college aged-students to do?
I know it's a resubmit but I didn't review it before and felt the need to say good job on these quick reads lol.
What I mean is, even though it's a single chapter, it feels overall complete as it stands and still has openings for a possible second chapter should you feel interested. I'm not super good at reviewing a short story though so forgive me for the bland review really.
Cassandra always hated that her birthday was October 31st, and it didn't help that her younger brother would tease her for it too. However, on her 20th birthday, her mother revealed to her a secret that would change her perspective forever.
Definitely a strange family dynamic overall. mom who hasn't a care in the world that her daughter is basically god for a day or what happens to her son much. Lots of fetish scenarios and fun for most audiences! I like!
Yay for halloween stories!
Morgan was in a very unique position in the story. She's obligated to go meet up with her 'sisters' to perform their yearly rituals, even though she really wanted to be by Cassandra's side. She would treat Cassandra like a Goddess if said Goddess didn't tell her not to, so she respects the wishes of her Goddess and will continue to be Cassandra's mother (even though she still does think of Cassandra as a Goddess). As for the fate of her son, well her God said she wanted to use her son as a plaything, there was nothing further to discuss. That and the fact that in their family men do not aquire magical powers ever so... William is... Well, she loved him as her son, but she doesn't have the power to change him back, so he might as well make for a pleasant toy?
Thank you very much! I'm happy to please my audience!
Halloween is awesome!!
Nearly six years after being shrunk, Fulda's ex-boyfriend is somehow holding on, Gina fancies herself a goddess through dark magic her sister taught her, and a tribe of shrunken people lives in fear in her room. As memories of the time before he shrank grow more distant, he struggles to manage being an unwilling leader for the tiny people and Gina's favorite toy - and, to her, her boyfriend.
Sequel to The Prom Incident.
Oh I thought this one had died o.O Actually kinda hyped to see it return!
Hi it's me again Vin!
It's not dead, just resting :) I have a really hectic first few months every year, and updates should be a bit more regular now.
This is a story about magical people with magical abilities, and the government who wants to put an end to them. Other tags: mind control, telekinesis, other superhero type powers to include size change. Contains a mix of gentle and violent scenes.
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To be fair these are really well done little shorts for different characters and scenarios. I wouldn't mind seeing more if them actually and maybe seeing the return of the title character as well lol
They won't be shorts. Right now, I'm introducing all the characters with their own points of view. Like a web, this story is kinda all over the place, but all the characters will converge on each other into a single point. Luna will be back.
Young girls in a school playground invent a game to dispose of tinies. (This story is many years old. I once thought I'd write a whole school novel, but, you know, life, and work...)
Oh whoa I actually remember your old story from a long time ago "three things about my sister". Very solid writing and story for a single chapter. I always wondered if it would see a new chapter someday. Good to see you back regardless!
A cure for cancer. A cure for aging. Peaceful societies governed by the Elite — teens and preteens gifted with size, strength, and eternal youth.
Perfect, right?
Kyleigh certainly thought so. Outgoing and overconfident, she began training her shy and awkward sister for servitude at the age of nine. Two years later, as predicted, one of them did indeed become an Elite...
This seemed a bit predictable at the start, but so far it's been diverting from what I expected and I wanna see what happens next really. I thought Ky would just be completely bitter and hateful once she found out the truth but things have gone differently so far. Good luck for future updates!
I too thought Ky would be bitter and perhaps she still is to some extent. But she seems to have recovered fast, admirably so. Then again, Les hasn't finished growing. She's only begun.
Thanks for the comment, madhatter.
Thomas Waldo's life changes forever as he is thrown into circumstances he can't control, but is forced to overcome.
Well this got far more interesting very fast lol. The first chapter was definitely slow paced, but it did leave me wondering what was to come. Chapter 2 was DEFINITELY full of mystery that just makes me want to read more. Guess i'll have to wait on the next part to see where it goes. So far it's very intriguing.
Thank you! I hope to maintain your interest level throughout the story! Let me know if it falls off. I'd also like to hear what your thinking so far. That's always fun for me.
You really do have a way with story telling man. Regardless of my feeling on the ending of Small, Your stories really HOOK me with the character diversity and settings really. So far I just wanna keep reading to see what happens next right now. It's like I said before long ago on another review on another story... Fetish material isn't always necessary for a REALLY GOOD story. Right now I just wanna know what is gonna happen next!
Thank you for the kind words. It makes me happy to know my story is interesting even without more explicit material at the forefront. Honestly if it weren't for Vivian's proclivity for swearing this would probably be rated PG-13. I do wonder how I'd do at a story with more prominent fetish material though? I might tackle that if I ever finish that "Brotherly Love" Fanfic, but that's for another time. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Valerie and Crystal are two good friends who just want to enjoy a movie together. However, during the movie a shrinking epidemic hits the world, and the dynamic between these two friends changes as one's darker desires get brought to light.
Several months after the world was hit with the shrinking epidemic, private investigators Joey and Robyn are hired by an unknown source to investigate Infinity University, where Valerie and Crystal go to school. Apparently, a lot of the shrunken students have gone missing, causing campus-wide concern.
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Whoa! It's creepy, I JUST looked this old gem up yesterday to re read what had happened and I had thought this one had died! seeing an update is awesome!
So long as I live this story shan't die! ..it just might be a while in between updates. :D Though Ill try to get better at it.
Three girls (and a transformed fourth) engage in a multi-caste, free-for-all shower romp involving both full size play and shrunken fun.
A year ago, Silent-One, my good friend and a writer on this site, died unexpectedly. This is the continuation and finishing of her last story, posted today on the anniversary of her death as tribute to her. RIP, you are loved and missed.
That ... actually sucks. Among authors here I generally always looked forward to anything written by Silent one. I had no idea she had died, but that's unfortunately how the internet goes I suppose.. You can only assume the worst for people who dissappear and hope for the best. Do you know anything else about what happened? You don't have to answer, but I wanted to ask is all. I'll read the actual story now since I haven't yet...