What would you do if you were stranded in a boarding house with not one, but THREE giantesses?
Looks like he's in quite the predicament.
Great job on this story, love the series you've made and this new entry is interesting so far.
Keep up the great work!
Erwan, living at the outskirt of the fabled Gigantopia all his childhood, moved there at eighteen. Then, his life took a bad turn, and just as he believed he had finally started to find his groove, he discover that bigger surprised await in the biggest city on Earth !
Interesting start, I'd only suggest to not deviate the story too much when needing to provide exposition. Needs to come up more organically in the story. Feels more like you thought of the info and needed to explain it first before continuing the story again.
It's the difficulty of the NWO settings for me. I tried to limit the info dumps to a minimal and they shouldn't be needed too much if at all in future chapters. Hopefully :p
But did you have a specific segment in mind ? Knowing it would definitively help me in the future ; )
I'd say the biggest issue is the multiple times of describing the size differences when it should've been all contained in one place to explain the size mechanics of this world.
I'm still a bit confused on the size classifications for this world because that context is mentioned in and out of the story. There's nothing wrong with exposition, it's the execution of it.
Maybe the best example of this is the Titan man when Erwin is on the train (the silent S business is also very strange since it's a strong consonant, not a vowel). You describe his size in the distance and his classification only just recently describing the 'smalls' size class. The purpose of that segment was Erwin to describe his first time seeing a gigantic being but is bogged down in details.
Oh, here are the classifications :
Normals (they are, well, normal peoples!); Smalls (around 20 meters, give or take a few; the tallest would be around 28 max, however) ; Giants (around 50 meters, max 55); Titans (around 200 meters, the smaller are 190, the taller 210); Gigantics (basically, they are all exactly 500 meters tall)
I'm glad you give me this info on the first Gigantic, because I actually believed it was clever, so it's good to know it isn't XD ! Concerning Erwan's name, its from Brittany in France with a very peculiar pronunciation, and I don't know the universal pronunciation sings (or whatever they are called). Perhaps a better description would have been to say that his name is pronounced like the "wan" in swan, without the s, basically. I tried to be clever again, and it was too clever by half, serves me right !
Thank you for the clarification on the sizes. I do really like the idea of the new multisized society with a story about a gentle giantess having a caring relationship with a tiny. Making her a MILF is also quite exciting, with some interesting possibilities with the kids interacting with Erwin.
Didn't mean to rag on you too much, I really am eager to see where you go with this story.
Don't worry, it's perfectly fine ^^
The kids will have at least one chapter with just them and Erwan, and the poor guy won't catch a break !
Another great chapter, better implementation of the world building and really like the gentle aspects of this story.
Also really liking Celia's personality so far.
Keep up the great work and excited to see where this goes.
Thanks a lot !
I'm also really happy with Celia's personality and I'll try to develop her while staying true to it.
Another great chapter, really love the relationship of the main characters growing and being more intimate.
Really interested in seeing what the 'building' is like for Erwan.
We'll see more of the cabinet building in the next chapter and the kids also !
Expect a lot of crazy tech in there, courtesy of Celia ;)
Great chapter, liking how Erwan is interacting with the daughters, getting ignored and largely being in danger with such powerful beings.
Just a small piece of criticism, there should've been a paragraph that made the ages of the girls clear. Also a lot of grammar or spelling mistakes, more so than usual. (Not a big deal, just an observation)
Keep up the great writing, excited to see where it leads too next.
It's no excuse, but I was quite ill this week-end, so it may have impacted the writing.
I'm happy that you still enjoyed it and will try to correct the mistakes.
As for the age of the girls, it'll be brought up next chapter, here it was deliberately kept vague to show how overwhelmed Erwan was.
Lucky had been a family pet for as long as he remembered. He had grown up in the same house. But was that all there was?
Very good story, nice twist at the end leaving Lucky with the big decision. Bold of you to leave no decision to the ultimatium.
Thanks! I thought it was important to keep the ending open to multiple interpretations. I'm glad you liked it.
Todd, a college freshman runs into Jade. She's a freshman just like him. Unlike him, she's a giantess. Hijinks ensue.
If you've read my previous stories, The Escape Redux & Uptown Girl, read the chapter named "An Explanation" . If you have never read it, you can still read that chapter but its not essential for you to do so. Also, I'll add new tags to the story if the chapter requires it.
Nice to see you writing again. Great start, liking the character dynamic. Excited for more!
Thanks!
Hey everyone !
It's a new story but interactive, set in the Gigantopia Universe and with short chapters, which can be written in a day or two max. The rules of the interactive bits are in the story proper, I hope you'll enjoy it !
It'll be very mixed in size and gender of protagonists, so I hope it'll be good enough folks :)
Cool idea, I only wish you listed what the interests of each character would be to get an idea of their personalities for voting.
Wish you luck in the endevour! Excited to see how it goes.
Well, to be honest, not describing their personnalities at first is part of the main reason I wrote this xD !
It'll allow for shorter, kinkier chapters - and it'll be fun to discover those on the fly :) !