In real life, I am an Alumnus Member of Beta Beta Beta (an honor society and academic fraternity for Biology Majors) in the 410th, or Rho Beta Chapter. My pen name here derives from this fact.
A story about a world where giantesses are an accepted part of society. Giantesses may legally swallow people. The story follows two friends; a normal sized man and a giantess.
First of all, this is by far your best story. Some of the others are good, even great, but this one is the best of all. Even as great as this story is, however, I have some suggestions.
The story would make a little more sense if you made it clear that Carla also eats regular food in addition to normal-sized humans. (In larger amounts based on her size, obviously.) For one thing, you already established that with a different giantess in another story (Hayley from "Dinner Offering"), but even more importantly if you want to make what is admittedly a giantess vore story at least remotely realistic it just plain makes more sense. Even a giant being (such that she is) shaped like a human would presumably be pretty similar chemically to us. So, she would require an ecclectic diet (not only omnivorous but in fact can't survive on just 1 plant and just 1 animal as only 2 foods) just as we do.
My next suggestion is that you had some potential with the relationship between Carla and Thaddeus in the few days after he volunteered but before she ate him. It's best not to waste potential like that. (Lee not so much; from the tone of the writing Lee was a VERY minor character, but Thaddeus had the potential to be a temporarily important character.) I might suggest sticking a new chapter in between "The Afterparty" and "The Gunslinger," or else developing that relationship more elaborately in flashbacks.
Last but not least while I realize the site GiantESS World, it still couldn't hurt to explain why there are no male giants. For example, there could be some rare magic potion that is fatal if consumed by a man but turns women into giantesses. There could be, I just thought we could brainstorm a little bit.
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Nice suggestions 222_410. They were actually quite helpful. I like the idea about Thaddeus and Carla. Perhaps I can come up with some flashbacks or something.
Yes, I definately should establish that giantesses eat fruits and veggies just like normal humans.
THank you for both of your reviews. It was remarkably valuable for you to take the time to put so much detail into the response.
I don't have anything solid for another chapter yet because I have been working on another project. I'm sure I will get back to this sooner or later. If you have any more ideas then don't be shy! Thanks again.
Of course, at something like 100 to 500 meters tall, it makes perfect sense that she eats ordinary-sized people (probably of both sexes, although most bandits are male, and I guess most volunteers would be), but it makes the most sense if she eats us in addition to other foods. ;-)
