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Great story! Shame it was never continued... will there ever be a Liz 3?
Great story! I like the mob theme, but I think it could something more to it than vore; I like vore, but it would be nice if the women killed executed the shrunken men in other creative ways too.
Author's Response: Glad you like it. Yeah, I thought so too. That's why I added the "crush" scene in chapter 8. Its not much of a switch but its a start. Thanks for the review.
I'm very interested in seeing where things go from here. The concept of shriinking down an entire continent is extremely absurd, but at the same time very appealing. Since there aren't too many stories in this vain, I really hope you'll continue! Keep up the good work....
This chapter was very unique... don't think I've ever read a story about an entire city being wiped out by by a hair before... LOL. Keep up the good work!
[ON INDEFINITE HIATUS; MAY BE DISCONTINUED] (Title adjusted to prevent confusion with the unrelated giantess series of stories.)
Leon gains the ability to shrink matter, and uses it to go after the thing he despises most: the opposite sex.
Cool chapter! I think it would have been better if you had Leon shrink his stepmother's corpse and then do something degrading to it, like reduce her to the size of a flea and then shitting on her or make her into a piece of jewelry for his toes or something, lol...
I would just like to interject for a minute to say that I recently posted a male giant story where the male in question was black. It is possible Canaan is confusing my story with the character here...
Now as for the recent chapter, I haven't actually read it yet so I will withold rating/review for the time being. I just wanted to point that out as a possible source of the confusion.
But yes, description is good. Do not spare details on the sights, smells, sounds, etc. These help to draw readers in and make a story more interesting and deep.
Okay, now having read this chapter I will say that I liked it a lot which means I will give it a high score, but it won't be a perfect score because I feel there is room for improvement in the detail of the descriptions. I also feel it was too heavily feet-oriented, and while feet isn't a bad thing by any means, it is way overdone in size stories, and it would be nice to see other related content like ass and vore and whatnot as well.
Don't get me wrong -- the chapter was great and I do like foot stuff, but I like some variety too. So some foot stuff is good, but you know...
I was also a tiny bit disappointed when Leon regrew Kayla. As a leader I was led to assume he was going to do something special with her, but then that was reversed which just feels like you were backpedaling. Not a huge gripe, though.
Well, vore is a given, and Leon's whole "which kind of death is your favorite" banter kinda foreshadowed what I plan to do in the future. ;) As for the feet, I know that it was a bit much, especially for a M/f story, but that stems from the fact that I like the exact same stuff for M/f as I do in F/m, and foot-related M/f content is not all too common.
As for Kayla being regrown, I said on GiantessCity that both Kayla and Charlotte are main characters, so they're going to be around for a while. I COULD have done more with micro Kayla in Chapter 4, but the chapter was getting a bit too long already, so I had to cut it short and save it for another time.
But thanks for reading and reviewing. :)
Did the Pheromones really need to mutate in order to have that effect? Wouldn't they have become that much more powerful simply by virtue of being much larger? :)
But now I'm wondering what exactly a pheromone actually is. On such an incredibly massive scale, would it be something visible to the naked eye? Hmm....
Ah yes, Pheromones. Can't say I know much about them. I do love the concept though, and how it can tie in with a giantess. It's one thing for a girl like Cherry to trash a city and its population, but throwing in the ability to automatically enslave the people she's tormenting really appeals to me.
I kind of went with the mutated angle, so that they would spread throughout the world...kind of like a disease of sorts.
I love how deliciously disgusting Melissa is. You should have had the mother and daughter customers at the end shrink down and become her slaves, and carried on the story from their perspective as her micro slaves. :)
I concur with Zephilia. You must finish this!
"High cheeks bones and large dimples were the size of a hummer."
Just want to mention that high cheek bones are a trait of Caucasians and Asians, so since Shawntae is black that would be inaccurate.
Great story though. Sorry to nitpick.
Sorry I had not reviewed this earlier, because I didn't see it until now. I know its been awhile since you updated this so I hope you have not abandoned it, because it really shouldn't end like this without things being brought to a resolution either one way or the other.
Having read through the comments, I see that some people think that the grandmother should get the upper hand and shrink them down again. I guess that would be okay, but considering you already did that I'm afraid I would have to disagree with that approach. While it's nice to see the bad guys win sometimes, you've already done that, so why not have the tables turned and let good prevail now? Just because these are the "good guys" doesn't mean they would have to go easy on the grandmother once they've shrunk her down, in fact they should be as cruel and dominating towards her as she was to them.
You wrote before that Kathy was the domineering type, so being shrunk and forced to be this old woman's slave for all these years should have been very challenging for her. More so than it should have been to a normal person... I would think. Unless she has been completely broken by her ordeal, it should be possible for her to return to the domineering role yet again. This would be more natural for her.
Greetings, Mr. Comic! :) You seem to be a very prolific writer, and you do so with proper grammar, no less. I just want to say well done!
Katelyn Brooks gets the power of the Que, from Star Trek. There are several versions.
I really liked your ideas, especially the one about 50 million galaxies trapped in the balloons. That was an awesome idea. Unfortunately, I have to say the quality of the writing could have improved greatly however. The story was too short and there wasn't enough detail or substance to it. I hope you will try this again but put more effort into it.
This story is based on the world created by the author minuss between Brobdingnagans & Lilliputians, specifically between a Lilliputian female and two different Brobdingnagan females (so far).
Great to see a story with micro/mega or giga action. Stuff like that is extremely rare, yet it is probably my most favorite.
Now as for criticism, you say the Lilliputians are dust motes in comparsion to the Brobdignagians? If that's the case I found it odd that Jessie could pick up Stacy's clothing even with tweezers and then blow them dry. That was a total jumping the shark moment right there. Especially when you've wrote how Jessie and Skye blew entire cities into oblivion. Just seems weird.
I would have liked to see more horror and shock from Stacy over the wanton genocide committed against her people when Jessie spontaneously destroyed the city of Eagle Lake. I know it is Stacy's fetish and all, but this city was her home and these were people she knew. Plus you'd think something like that would make her feel less safe now that she is being held captive basically by someone who had just murdered so many. I also found it strange the Lilliputians on her breasts would start fucking each other while they and their species were being exterminated. I know there are tons of GTS stories that are like that, but I don't think its very realistic and my enjoyment is effected as a result because it makes it harder for me to believe it.
But really all in all its a great story, and I'd say better than 90% of what I read on here so I hope you will continue and would like to see what happens next.
Interesting developments. If that size supremacist party ever manages to come to power they would find a great Quisling in Stacy. She could be propped up as a puppet ruler over the Liliputians and order them to do the bidding of the Brobdingnagans. Of course, she would be a slave herself, but she would have it cushier than the rest.
What could Liliputians do as slaves? I guess they could be useful in the semiconducter industry for obvious reasons. But you know what would be really cool? Imagine if Jessie or Skye ordered them to build an entire city inside of her bra or panties. Then she could literally wear an entire city against her most delicate parts. You wrote in a previous chapter that the Liliputians are notorious breeders, so imagine all it might take is a sample of a few hundred and then within a few months they could multiple into a few million. The way that could work is if they reached maturity within a very short period of time. They could have the same lifespan as humans or Brobs, but let's say they go from infants to adults in like a day or something like that, so that way within a day they could breed and create a new batch or something.
I dunno... I'm just brainstorming. Keep up the good work. I'm sorry that your recent chapters didn't get any feedback. Being that it is/was the holidays that probably had a lot to do with it. Hope it doesn't discourage you from writing more.
A life is completely ruined in the span of about 10 minutes.
For the sake of realism I feel the need to point out that in the part where the giant picks up Isley by her head, one of two things should have happened: either her head pops off, or her neck gets broken. Either way, she should have ended up dead right then and there. The human neck simply is not capable of supporting the weight of the body. That's why hanging makes for such an effective form of execution.
I guess you could explain around that if the shrinking made them more durable somehow.
Shrinking also makes you weigh significantly less, moreso than you'd think! Just like a gts couldn't really support her own weight, a tiny could do incredible feats involving being beaten around with their own weight (falling from relatively immense distances, for example) and walk away with hardly a scratch!
Also, if you were really tiny you wouldn't be able to communicate with giants, much less see them crisply. I guess we're all sticking our heads in the sand to one degree or another!
A mother's attempt to cut her rebellious daughter down-to-size backfires
I'm going to give this a rating of 10, even though it really hasn't gotten to any significant sort of action. I love the setup, and where it seems to be going. As you may know, I am a HUGE fan of the whole "reversal of fortune" aspect of size changing. It doesn't really matter too much how it happened, but I have to say I am curious why the pink energy ball backfired on here? You don't have to explain what the problem was, but it would be kinda nice to know.
I also love how the conditions of the spell are that the target must "obey the rules of the house". I think I get where you are going with that... The bra is the house, right? ;) I'd love to see what sort of strict rules the daughter will impose on her mother while she is living in that "house". And of course the mother will be forced to abide by those rules if she ever hopes to be freed of the spell.
Thanks Chozo, I do have a reason for the spell backfiring. If/when I ever write again, then it'll be explained :)
As for the conditions of the spell...I planned on the mother determining when the "rules of the house" are obeyed sufficiently. Unfortunately for her, now that things have backfired, Andrea likely has the power to determine when the spell is finished. Sorry, I should have explained that in the story.
An 18 year old sister finds herself shrinking and must live through the embarressing trauma of shrinking smaller then her 15 year old, 12 year old, 8 year old and finally two year old sisters. suddenly she isn't the dominate one in the house and her mother just doesn't care. Can she survive her sisters as they realize the upper hand they have?
Sorry for writing so many "reviews" but there's no simple messaging system on this site so I have no other way to give you any suggestions/ideas I have... but that's not really what this reviews section is for and I'm sorry that its getting cluttered up like this. You do have the ability to delete them though if you want...
But there is one thing I thought of about that breastfeeding idea that I didn't think of until after I had sent that last "review" and that was if the agent that comes from the government program is a woman then she could not only bring up the breastfeeding idea and discuss it with Jane and Emma, but also give a demonstration of it by suckling Kate to her breasts, much to the dismay of Kate who might not like the idea but wouldn't really have a choice...
But if you were intending the government agent be a man that's fine, but it would rule out that possibility... but if you go with a woman agent and go this route you could have describe her as being a very well endowed woman with very large breasts and you could say she's a professional shrinker suckler and that she knows she has large breasts and she decided to put them to good use by helping shrinkers with them and she explains to Jane and Emma how its a pleasurable experience and that once they get into it they will love doing it too and look forward to it... even though Kate on the other hand might be humiliated by it and be a fussy "baby" and not cooperate... but if Jane and Emma grow to like the feeding thing then you could have it so that this becomes one of Kate's chores like the foot rubbing and Jane in particular expects it whether Kate wants it or not, but maybe Emma is more lenient about it and more respectful of her sister's wishes so she doesn't force it, but still enjoys it nonetheless.
Don't apologize for writing so man reviews. I enjoy getting reviews as it gives me something to do in my boring life. If you really find it a bother but still want to give me suggestions we could easily find a way to do that =) But anyway, about you suggestion. I hadn't really thought about the agents gender and had given tehm the default of being male. But I would most likely change it to female. So, a big breasted, well rounded person, huh? I could do big breasted but might decide to do normal sized breasts as I have trouble writing about the stereotypical "big breasted woman", if that makes sense. I could write about how She not only gives the family the idea of breast feeding but also (under teh government plan) supply them with lactation hormones. These special hormones produce milk which is specialy designed to help stop the shrinking process. That might work.
Anyway, don't think that getting too many reviews are annoying as it honestly isn't. If I did find it annoying I would just stop reading reviews, there prolem solved =) but i do enjoy reviews as I love to hear the opinions of others.
Yeah, I know what you mean about the "stereotypically large breasted women". I would not suggest that every woman in a story be described that way, but I don't see anything wrong with using them sparingly because large breasted women do exist in real life, so to have just one such woman in an entire story shouldn't be a problem, but I would agree it shouldn't be over done. I just think having the agent have big breasts would work well with the whole breastfeeding thing because it would really underscore that, and maybe its another thing that could add to Kate's humiliation.
Personality wise, it would be cool if the agent was kinda like Jessica in that she loves to help people and that's why she choose this occupation, and if she has huge breasts that could be another reason why she got into this because they would be an asset to help with the shrinkers...
Maybe since this agent has met with and helped other shrinkers maybe she's met Jessica before and maybe suckled her? You said Jessica doesn't have sisters, so maybe Jessica can't get the breastfeeding she needs from her own family so maybe this agent visits with Jessica regularly and suckles her?
This brings up possibilities because then the agent becomes another link with Jessica and there's alot of potential you can do with that... but to start off with maybe have the agent ask Kate about school and stuff, and then Kate would mention she has a friend there and describes her and then the agent's eyes might light up and she says "I know her too! she's that cool shrinker girl I breastfeed" and that could get an intersting conversation going and maybe you could have Stacy eavedropping behind the corner and hearing the whole thing and plotting and scheming with whatever she's hearing.
Have the agent anyway you like though... even if you want to go with your original idea of using a man that's fine too. Doesn't really matter too much because he/she is just a minor character anyway so its no big deal either way... I just think that a woman would be better personally because of the breastfeeding potential and then you could have that link with Jessica because Jessica could be a regular client so they know each other very intimately.
But no matter what you do I think one thing you need to think about is the agent is probably going to look at Kate and how small she is and then look at how long she has had the disease and make the connection that something isn't right, and this will have to be explained.
Also, Jane still knows something isn't right about how fast Kate had shrunk and that was never fully explained to her either. The way you described her is that she seems like an uncaring mother, but really she does care though, so if that's the case she needs to get to the bottom of this one way or the other.
Whether Kate and Emma tell the truth to Jane and the agent or come up with some sort of lie to explain it is up to you, but I think for realism sake they have to say something, because realistically a mother and a welfare agent isn't just going to ignore something serious like that.
1- I didn't mean "big dreasted women" as in women with normal big breasts. I was referring to the fetish in which women have unrealistically big breasts. Just normally big breasts are fine by me, I guess I thought you meant the fetishy big breast. My bad =)
2- I was thinking of Making the agent be nice and kind but for some reason she is coming out as strict, professional and uncaring. A person of business. A guess i wrote her like that because I have been writing a lot of characters who are nice so my mind wanted a change. also, I didn't want a character people would like as she isn't really a minor character. I could make her have a nice side, like a warm caring personality under her hard exterior.
3- I wouldn't be able to connect the agent (Erika jones, BTW) with jessica because of a very important reason. As jessica is part of a rich family they have enclosed themselves off from the world officially. Therefore no-one comes to their house unless they have to specifically be there. Jessica would have been diagnosed by the family doctor and any treatments she recieved would be from a trusted doctor. They wouldn't use a random government agent. That's at least how I see it.
4- I never had the Agent originally as a male, that was just my default character. I knew I needed an agent character but I hadn't thought about them at all so I just made them male. I was most likely always going to go with a female character as I wouldn't know what to do with a male character in that circumstance.
5-The truth to the agent and the mother are my biggest concern. I knew that the agent was going to notice the sudden shrinkage and ask about it but I had actually forgotten about the mother (Thankyou for reminding me=)) They'll probably be fed some BS story about kate being overstressed but The agent will most likely not buy it all.
thankyou once again for your helpful input. I've written half of the next chapter and might be able to get it out in a few hours (My brain is fried right now). =) Hope you continue and enjoy reading.
