Reviewer: Jurdzi Signed
Date: December 29 2022
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter X: To the airport
Couple of thoughts:
- There is someone by name Jennifer (I think) mentioned thorought this story as she had been treating him horribly, until he ended up with Tracy. Are you planning to further introduce this character later on, or is it just a small hint of Marks past that you are not planning to exlore anymore?
- I am surprised none of these college girls has any pantyhose on. It could make his intimate experience with their feets even more challeging.
- I wish Amoe used some broom instead of a vacuum cleaner. Given her limited sight, she could have beaten a hell out of him without even noticing, while leaving him in some pile of dust. An honorable mention to a famous scene from Honey I Shrunk the Kids movie.
- I would love to see Mark turned into an object with these college girls, just like he is presented as a shoe insert with Diane and Sarah. He could be a simple clothes or hair decoration, or perhaps a jewerly (ear ring, toe rigs, etc.) He was already tied up once by Crystal, so I hope there will be some more bondage. By other words, to continue dehuminizing him in the clutches of these wannaby friends.
- Like I said in my previous comment, I would love to see more of Linh, and perhaps Kelly as well, given her size and indication that she would love to wear him as a good luck charm.
Great story, one of my all time favorites right away. I am sad I need to wait for every single chapter now that I finished what you have already posted. I hope you will find a peace and balance in your life that would allow you to not only finish this story, but also posting the remaining chapters on a regular basis.
CYA!
Author's Response: Hey Jurdzi,
Glad you are liking the story! Here are some notes of mind in regards to your thoughts, in case you want some insight to what I'm thinking with this story. So spoilers? i guess
*Jeniffer is not in scope for this story, and is just color and context for the story for now.
*Now that you metnion it, I wish i had thought of panthouse, but alas.
*Again, broom is a great idea.
*Objectification is something i have thought about in the college girls story but as of now i dont have anything that meets that particular criteria specifically in this scope of the story. It might end up being part of a bonus chapter, or another story at some point as i do have some storylines already outlines. No promises on if and when that will ever happen though.
*I will consider Linh your "Vote" then for the bonus chapter!
Again, happy you are enjoying the story, and thanks for the kind words.
Kenny