Reviewer: blackairow Signed
Date: August 13 2014
Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17
Gotta say I liked this chapter a lot more than the last one. I'm totally on board with magic as the root cause. The reason I would rank the last chapter lower is because it seemed out of place in relation to your other chapters. It almost felt like it answered too many questions to quickly. One of the reasons I've enjoyed this story so much is how every time we learn something minor we also are faced with more questions. It's the constant curriousity and the charaters who feel like real people that sucks you in.
The other reason why I'd rank this chapter higher is because it's dealing with some really major issues and you do a great job of giving a glimps of what it's like to deal with major depression. Both for the patient and those around them.
And what do you mean cheesy story lol? This has been my favorit story on this site since you started posting it. One chapter is too soon to be saying goodbye to these charaters lol. If there is only one more chapter though, i can't wait to read your next story.
Author's Response: I guess I tried to emulate Robert Jordan. If you've ever read The Wheel of Time series Jordan amassed a dozen new questions for every one answer. But towards the end of the fourteen book series, maybe the tenth or eleventh book Brandon Sanderson (the author who took over after Jordan's death) did the exact opposite. And he did that because that's what Jordan wanted to happen. He created an entire room of maps and notes for how he wanted the series to be finished. So yeah, that's what I tried to do myself.
And thank you for taking notice of the way I addressed depression. I do not suffer from it but a very close friend of mine does. I wanted to really show what it's like, invisible. People go out of their way to hide depression so I tried my best to be subtle yet honest.
My next story might not be up for a while though. It's going to be the sequel to Who's Really The Bigger Person Here. And I'm going to take time to create a much bigger plot (no pun intended)