Penname: NotSirk [Contact] Real name: Kris
Member Since: July 13 2017
Membership status: Member
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Definitely not that MrSirk guy......I think he's dead.


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Summary:

Based on NotSirk MAJOR/Minor universe; some characters may or may not appear in both stories :)

Old friends return to Old Creek and Alejandro his put in a burning dilemna. He'll have to decide how he stand sexually, mentally and what he see for his future, all while dealing with the most massive woman he's ever met....


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Breasts, Adult 30-39, BBW, Body Exploration, Butt, Gentle, Humiliation, Lesbians, Maternal, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 100306 Read Count: 166761
[Report This] Published: December 07 2017 Updated: January 22 2018
Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: December 16 2017 Title: Chapter 15: Minors' rights

"Would you bathe with me?"....Kinda pushing your luck huh, Shannon?

I might have to write the second part of that special....I'm getting a LOT of insight into Al &Shan's characters here. Alejandro might be too good a person. No way Shannon deserves any pity or second chances! He's better than Izzy! She wouldn't have that shit at all! Keep your crocodile tears!! I mean he found her sex messages! Where did he get this patience?! 

Also very sound reasoning on Mrs. 88 year old widow with four kids. Not sure how appealing that would be or if it would workout but I applaud the logic. 

One again....*deep breath* GET YOUR SHIT TOGETHER, SHANNON!



Author's Response:

Well, remember that he also saw how she helped others and cared about them and their families. Without it he would just have been disgusted. But he also was worried about her silence. Alejandro tends to imagine the worst really fast, so not hearing anything from Shannon during almost two hours, he begun to lose it. And Shannon truly was distraught, she's just quite unused to feeling this much for a minor (or even anyone). Next chapter should be fully from her point of view, but it may come later than usual, considering that tomorrow I'll go see the Last Jedi and then I'll spent the afternoon with my girlfriend :)

Thanks for applauding the reasoning. It felt rather logical to me that such a MAJOR would try it. Plus, she would have some serious arguments : experienced, still young enough MAJOR-wise to be beautiful and bear children and sexually adept with minors. Plus the added bonus of "you don't have to worry about me meeting someone else after you", it could attract some peoples ^^

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Date: December 14 2017 Title: Chapter 13: Burning passions

Shannon doesn't know Alejandro at all and it truly shows in this chapter. Yeah! She went too far! That's obvious. What's really terrifying though....well despite her terrifying display of sexual intensity and desire...is her casual indifference. She can try and justify it all she wants (riding high on the wave of impending orgasm makes any number of thoughts swarm your head) BUT!!!! She targeted his work bench from the beginning. Of course she doesn't it's true value, how he built it himself, but even worse than physically destroying it was her dismissal of it's relevance. "I'll buy him one later!" No you won't. Sorry Shannon. There's not enough money in the world. Not to mention you kind of wrecked his room and maybe flooded in "you". That's just icing. This relationship has a long way to go. If it goes anywhere after this. 

BAD SHANNON. GET YOUR SHIT TOGETHER!!! Alejandro deserves soo much better than an overgrown, spoiled, rich girl!



Author's Response:

Haha, yeah Shannon fucked big time... Pun not intended. The next chapter, due tomorrow morning (French time) will probably surprise you. I made use off how I felt after a huge depression, years ago, when sorting my feelings was hard. But you'll see how Alejandro will deal with his own 😆 

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Date: December 11 2017 Title: Chapter 9: Heart to heart

Geez! You have some of the fastest turnaround I've ever seen! A little refinement and you could get a job doing this professionally! I blink and there's two new chapters.

Okay: Shannon get your shit together! What the fuck are you doing?! You're a MAJOR not a bitch in heat! Show a least the illusion of composure!

I have to wonder what's going through Jandro's head here. One heartfelt conversation where she was constantly talking over him does not a lover make. Is he falling for her whiles? I know he only agreed to make out a little and honestly he's a healthy young man so it makes a little sense but still. It still feels a little too easy and too soon. It's been less than a day since they've reunited. Shannon's been pretty transparent in what she wants and that taints her words of changing MAJOR's perspective and the future a little too. She seems like a nice and caring young woman but she'a also a brutal negotiator! Don't forget that Alejandro!

Soo ot seems a little bit convenient. At least the timing. It has me slighty suspicious Shannon is a tier 3. I'm interested in the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Next chapter will try to deal with Alejandro's side. All I can tell is hat he is in a strange state of mind, the last two days have been nothing but new experiences to him, he's a little lost right now... But he sax something in Shannon when they kissed. Also, he has not fallen yet ! XD

 

Thanks for the professional writer comparison. My dream iq to become one (but I'm not betting on it). Strangely enough, while I spend more time on M/m than my other project, it still motivate me to write on it everyday. I guess it's good then ! ^^

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Date: December 09 2017 Title: Chapter 5: The titan and the flea

I'll have to agree and disagree on Pix's perspective on Alejandro. His attraction to Shannon does feel jarring considering his past trauma with MAJORS but I viewed it as all introspection which justifies it more for me. He's only thinking these things and not acting on them. Frankly Alejandro comes off as kind of rude to Shannon. I don't blame him considering she groped him as soon as she saw him, but specifically informing Shannon he never once thought of reading up on her or not being in her business' "target demographic" comes off as a huge burn! How did he get away with that?!

I do find it odd he's never once seen a minor before. I know Old Creek is small time compared to the fictitious Winton Heights: A well off suburb in the outskirts of Golden Coast an equally fictitious region of California! (If people didn't know that because I rarely explain locations now you do!) but I figured with his family's amount of wealth they might've tried something? But then again considering the Mac Ferlan incident happened when he was eight I can understand why maybe he hasn't met at least one other minor. Izzy might have it better than I thought. It seems like he's the only minor in Old Creek and that's kind of sad.



Author's Response:

Well, Alejandro can be kind of insensitive at times, but most MAJORS will let it slide because of his past. I mean, does anyone would want to be called a Mac Ferlan or something by the little guy ? I don't think so. Plus, 'Rando is really conscious that in his world he has to do ten times more than the MAJORS around him to get even a modicum of respect. Therefore, he really doesn't hesitate to punch where it hurts. In his eyes, if the MAJOR can't get his or her ego bruised, he/she has no business bothering him.

Truthfully, I find it really hard to both depict Alejandro's physical interest in Shannon and her mental repulsion because of her behaviour. I'll try to improve on it, both in future cases, but also by showing where he comes from (next chapter is basically about why he had forgotten Shannon and so many other things. The next one will be about... oh, well, you'll see, I don't want to spoil the fun ^^).

Concerning Old Creek, yeah, Alejandro's situation is sad. It's a small town, and that's actually why his parents met and fell in love together. plus, their job is here, and they loved it too much to move at first. And after the Incident, they were afraid that their eldest boy wouldn't be able to endure the changes without going crazy. So they stayed.

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Date: December 09 2017 Title: Chapter 4: Back and forth

Okay......after reading this, then re-reading this, then reading it again. First thoughts?....I kinda hate Shannon, but more on that later.

First I love the worldbuilding. Mentioning locations like New Orleans help flesh out the world. Establishing Old Creek as a small town by saying they only had one car rental place.

I'm loving Alejandro's family! The father's strong but caring, the mother sets up potential suitors, Lindsay's just a cutie! Good on her for getting Alejandro out of his shell....and not letting him get crushed. You really sell the strength of the MAJORS when a little girl casually out lifts her older brother. Or the inescapable grip of a young child who still had baby fat and.....did Mac Ferlan punch a kid?! It's implied Shannon is closer to Alejandro's age and he was 8 when Josh was alive and 14 so did a teenager deck a 8 year old girl?! MAJORS are aggressive but Mac Ferlan is insane!

Okay Shannon. Damn she's huge. I imagine she's even taller than Ignacio who would be the minor equivalent of 6'5. Third talest in the country! Or was it the world? Huge! Also you really nail her casual arrogance. I love the line."As naturally above him as he was above ants!" She's great, but...........You don't just get to pick up Alejandro BITCH!! YEAH you fucked up! Go eat at the non existent kids table. Alejandro shouldn't have to move for you!

So yeah I'm enjoying this!



Author's Response:

Haha, thanks ! I think you'll like Chapter 5, out in some second from now. Honestly, the story is so easy to tell thanks to your awesome wolrd-building. Your last chapter blew my mind, I'll have to deal with the bond deeper than intended at first, because of it ^^. In any case, Alejandro and Shannon's growth as character will gappen (relatively soon). The night has to pass, before that however. :)

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: December 08 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Preparation

Okay so, clearly someone was busy writing FOUR CHAPTERS!!!! in the time it took me to write one! I don't feel upstaged....Anyway I gots reading to do.

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Date: December 21 2017 Title: Chapter 18: Giving in to temptation

First reaction was that this happened kind of fast considering that it's been maybe a day since they've reunited, but you've described both Alejandro and Shannon's motivations in great detail so I understand it. I do have to wonder if Shannon's influenced Alejandro's emotions a bit? Anything can happen with bonding and she's been very emotional with him and I have to believe some of that has spilled over accidentally or otherwise. I'm surprised Al's willing to be that vulnerable with her considering his past. Very interesting development and a steamy chapter to boot. I'm interested in how this continues. They do have a clear connection and attraction to each other but it would be easy for Alejandro to come down from the pleasure and emotions and feel taken advantage of afterward. This could still be dangerous.........Also I have to call her out on reading his mind!!!!! What are you doing?!?!? I don't care if your having fun sexy times in the bath! That's a huge invasion of his privacy! (not that I have any experience writing a character who did that) *innocent whistle* WAKE UP, SHANNON!!

Anyway that aside I like the insight into both MAJOR and minor psychology here with this near bonding experience. You have gotten farther than I have in that regard. Shannon actually seems to have a lot of control of her emotions considering her more violent and dominant history of relationships and I think Alejandro coped with her wild emotions rather well. I still have to wonder if Shannon's a tier 3? I know I haven't fully established what they're capable of but her influence on Alejandro's mind is impressive considering his mental barriers from his trauma. Although maybe I'm reading to much into it. It's been a tiring day for him.



Author's Response:

Thanks !

In my mind, Shannon's a Tier 2 : extremely powerful mind abilities, great compatibility with minor but not the ability to actually crack open a minor's mind as long as a part of it doesn't want to surrender (while Tier 3 can, from what I got). She can't induce a "loving" reaction simply by unwittingly wishing so like Brenda, for instance. Here, she can peer into Alejandro's mind and -obviously- influence it because our titular minor is opening, because of his desire and how tiring and new all those experiences are. In the long run, he'll learn how to control himself better and won't be bonded all time like most minors probably end. In this case however, Shannon's emotion fed ALejandro's, and he is discovering that despite being extremely independant minded in everyday life, he is attracted to dominant female in a relationship, he'll have to figure out how it makes him feel, how to deal with it, and where does he draw the line.

That's something which will be explored in the future.

Happy Holidays by the way :) !

Summary:

So, it's a place for me to write short fetish stories (usually one-shot) about a lot of potential interactions. I already know what I want to write for the second chapter, but if you've particuliar ideas, don't hesitate to tell them :) !


Categories: Crush, Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Adult 30-39, BBW, Mature (40-49), Butt, Couples, Entrapment, Gentle, Giant, Humiliation, Incest, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Muscle, New World Order, Slave, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 48632 Read Count: 298398
[Report This] Published: January 06 2018 Updated: December 25 2019
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Date: January 09 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

I actually really liked Fortune Reversal. a33;a33;a33;a33;a33; for that one.



Author's Response:

Glade you liked it. I may do more stories in this universe done the lane, who knows ;) 

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Date: January 19 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

Responding here so that you see it,

I've said it before and I'll say it again. Go ahead and write what you want MAJOR/minors a free story online I have no attachment to. It's just a story. I don't care what you decide to write in it's universe and that goes for anybody! I don't know if there's really enough interest for a wiki though. MAJORS were generally two to three feet taller than minors for most of their evolution if that helps.

That being said I'm continually impressed by your drive to write! I could never sustain the format for this type of random reader created storytelling!



Author's Response:

Thanks ! Then, in the next few weeks/months, you can expect Fall of Mu (probably my darkest take on MAJOR/Minors, by far) :)

Truth been told, writing here has in fact allowed me to work on my draft novel a lot more, as strange as it may appears to be ^^. Don't know why, I guess it's a lot like going o the gym (which I don't haha) : The more you write the easiest it becomes o write more ! Also, I can't wait to see your next work, whatzver it may be !

 

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Brotherly love

Initial thoughts: Wow.....Tim's a jerk! He completely tookcontrol of his brothers life in place of his own ideas for what was good for Alex (I hope I got the names right. Alex is the one that got gender bent right?) Not only that but for all his declarations of "love" for his "bro" Alex is just a concubine, a side dish, a sex slave because he actually loves someone else. Jerk! Alex should leave!


More well though chapter reactions: Tim is a JERK!! That can't be said enough! But there seem to be a lot of rather tragic factors for poor Alex. Like apparently being the only normal human in a family of  god? What with the "Perfect" irresistible brother with magic powers, a mother who eat planets, a cursed father, and mysterious sisters. So living his own life would be difficult and inherently unfair, unable to compete or even find love at all as a human male because his brother seems born for the sole purpose of forcefully evolving the species by siring the next generation!*deep breath* GEEZ! That's high concept! Makes me wonder why the mother even bothered having Alex at all when he seemed doomed to be criminally overshadowed by his "Perfect" godly brother. 

So anyway I feel like there's potential for that story mostly because I like that subject matter. "Normal struggling to live with abnormal, superior, magical, ect) It's almost like I wrote a story or three about that. That being said it feels like this is the last chapter of said story. Which might be an interesting twist. How will Alex cope as a woman with a selfish perpetually horny irresistible older brother? Can he still find happiness? Will he reject and escape his situation or embrace life as Tim's concubine? One of many probably. I hope it's not that second one, but I could read it!

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Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

So instead of deleting and reposting again I'll just do a second post. I'm writing this from a phone which makes posting long replies difficult. I may fix this when I get to a proper computer.

Finally writing thoughts.: You seem to excel at writing sexy high concept sci-fi stuff. My favorite being Fortune Reversal. So I say write what you like and don't feel bad about dropping a story for something else. That's what I did! Not that I don't have passion for MAJOR/minor, quite the opposite in fact. I already have way more stuff to write and written for that but sometimes you just have to do something different. Refresh the brain. That's why I like the story factory. Just throw ideas out and see what sticks. Done with Aunt Suzie. Then be done with Aunt Suzie. I've read it. I feel you could end a story like that anywhere with a decent and satisfying conclusion. Just do what you want! While I can say I personally want certain things I feel it's best you decide where to continue! I don't really have any story ideas on me know though.

Actually I could think of a story from Mayday where a microscopic father tries to reconnect with his non micro family. It would be kind of funny sad! Good luck!



Author's Response:

Whoa, thanks for the long reviews. I hadn't expected such well though out reaction to this chapter, haha ! Without spiling too much about Alex... his mother really love his father and was afraid he would feel lonely without a normal son... well, turned out it will be a girl now, but, even a Goddess can only do so much, i guess ^^

Also, as a special thanks, a tease for the next story about Shannon and Alejandro : there will be a scene of Shannon doing a very special strip-tease for Alejandro, with dark light and painting reacting to it. I won't say more, however ;) !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

Just wanted to say that I had an idea for a one chapter sequel to "Brotherly Love" I don't know why but a bunch of ideas popped in my head from the little bits of world you teased. Know idea if I'll actually write it but I'm asking just in case. 



Author's Response:

Go wild with it !

Elite Sister by Link Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 43]
Summary:

A cure for cancer. A cure for aging. Peaceful societies governed by the Elite — teens and preteens gifted with size, strength, and eternal youth.

Perfect, right?

Kyleigh certainly thought so. Outgoing and overconfident, she began training her shy and awkward sister for servitude at the age of nine. Two years later, as predicted, one of them did indeed become an Elite...


Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Gentle, New World Order, Slave, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.), Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.), Giant (31 ft. to 50 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 27543 Read Count: 86696
[Report This] Published: January 16 2018 Updated: March 03 2019
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Date: January 20 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I'm going to go the other way with this and say Ky isn't trying to make Les her vassal. At least not intentionally, and I only say this because of chapter 3 where Ky insulted Les to provoke her into accepting the induced ascension. Now I can't read Ky's mind and I'm sure there are purely selfish aspects to this. She has to feed her own ego and grasp the relevence and recognition she hungers for afterall, but....and this is a big BUT, everything I've read so far leads me to believe Ky cares about her sister. Even when she thought she was going to become an elite she wanted Les as a vessel to boost her self confidence. (Because being a vassal is a good thing for some reason)...So hear me out.

Les has self confidence issues, becoming an elite won't change her personality (I think. I'm sure some jackass Lesser Titan has done studies in between making up these bullshit vassal laws, but I haven't read them.) so I think Ky realizes how dependent Les is some of which Ky is to blame for. Maybe this is Ky's way of easing Les into the leadership role she destined to have....while conveniently helping Ky save face and distract her from the crippling depression of not becoming what you wished you could be. That's my not at all factually substantiated, blind assumtion!

I don't think this is a tragedy. I think it's a blessing in diguise. Over time of course Les will literally and figuratively grown into her own, but  right now? I think she still needs Ky to be in charge because she doesn't know how yet. If I'm wrong then this story's a lot darker than I thought it was. *Girl psychologically manipulates her sister into having extreme self esteem issues and becoming her slave* That's a rough story.

Good chapter!



Author's Response:

I too think Ky cares for her sister, perhaps more than she herself knows. However she's certainly far from perfect. Same with Les.

The Elite cancer will almost inevitably change their relationship, but that's the interesting part. I.e., how it changes and does it strengthen or tear down what really matters.

We'll see.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: March 01 2019 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Ah! Another chapter of "The Adventures of Ky and her Dumb Tree-Sister!" I'm actually rather interested in hearing more about the interpersonal relationships of humans and tree-people. This whole vassal scam that hasn't been fully explained. 

Also Les......get it together! You're a tree god now! You're not only bringing in the main source of income now, but I'm pretty sure you could uppercut your mom into the stratosphere and in a week you'll literally be looking down on her. Use your plant biology to grow a set. If Ky were elite your mom would've already quit smoking by now. Which isn't good for Ky, if you need motivation!

Nice chapter! Thank you for writing it. 



Author's Response:

Les does indeed need to get her stuff together, if only to deliver that metaphorical uppercut to her Mom! :)

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 23 2018 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Good for Les! She still needs to work on her self confidence, but...Yes! Good for Jakob too! That had to be even harder to do after Les ascended! Really liked the end of this one. Y'know what I didn't like. You can guess I'll wait......

PAISLEY!! *bleeping* Paisley! Like say whatever you want about Ky! (I guess that's the accepted social structure of this bullshit society) she's a "human" you have such an extreme distaste for. Sure talk about claiming her if you want. I mean Ky would turn you down and lose her rights or her life (because that's fair), but it would be worth in my book! Les on the otherhand? I'm pretty sure she hard countered your mental influence before she was even induced! Step back a little! You have no idea if she'll be a titan or mega or....I don't know (intern?) class elite or not. And masturbating in the bathroom between classes?! I had more respect for you when I thought it was drugs. 

Also Ky's totally sick! I hope she gets better soon, because I know she'd never lie about that!



Author's Response:

Lol, I figured you'd find Paisley's character less than appealing. Let's hope she doesn't brainwash Les too much...

Thanks, NotSirk!

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 21 2018 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I really love the relationship of these two and don't want them to be apart, but I'm getting scared!!

Good for Les. She deserves to have confidence and YES even feel superior! She is, if not already than soon enough. It may cause some friction but I think as she matures she'll learn control....although...I feel like there are seeds here that will lead Les to some...troublesome potentialities in the future. I'm actually more worried for Kyliegh in that regard. 

And speaking of Ky. She has my vote for prime! Until further notice I've decided to hate Lesser Titan class elites! You're not busting drug rings you're making humans your slaves! For what reason?! They live a fraction of your lifetime and you outclass them in almost every conceivable way! I've had pets but I never wanted them to die when I did! There are some unanswered questions about vassalship that need inspecting with a fine tooth comb! What was I talking about?....Oh yeah! Kyliegh Watts for Earth Prime! It may be a child's naive dream but I think she can do it!

All that being said I just love the characterization in these little conversations. There's just the right amount of tension and affection. Normally someone like Ky would seem like a jerk but I just root for her determination. And Les' insecurity and passivity would seem annoying but it's not. I'm also just really jealous at how fast you people can write. That's not just you. There are quite a few excellent stories that seem to keep updating. I'm being left behind!!



Author's Response:

Elites and the 'superior' races definitely set themselves up to receive hate from humans of their world, and of course from readers. However we haven't seen much hate from the humans in story, presumably they've become indoctrinated to status quo. Perhaps all except Ky. We'll see.

As for writing fast, not so much. Most of these chapters were written and simply needed editing before posting. However, having reached the end of my pool of chapters, future updates will likely not be as frequent.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 19 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Elites just have it all don't they. Strength, speed, brains,size, they probably crap gold too! And what's this bullshit about not being able to refuse vassalship? (thanks for the suffix) Shut up, Lotus of the fifth Council! You really are a (lesser) titan. "Torment Breaker" more like NERD! 

I am really curious about how Les feels about all this. Her greatest moment comes with the crushing of her sister's dreams. Will she even try to make Ky her vassal considering the whole no rights thing if Ky refuses! Even death! But if she doesn't it's been made clear that Ky's a catch apparently and at least one other elite wants her. That's a powder keg situation.

For now I hope she cuts Ky some slack. It's still raw and I'm genuinely surprised Ky hasn't lashed out more, but I think a confrontation is bound to happen. Especially as time passes and it becomes harder for Ky to maintain hope of becoming an elite. I hope this tension doesn't become a wedge between the sisters. 



Author's Response:

HOW did you know they crap gold! It's almost as if you read ahead to the next chapter. :)

As for Ky, perhaps she hasn't lashed out as much because Les is...Les. Imagine lashing out at a kitten who randomly gains magical powers. Ok, perhaps not the best metaphor. ;)

Thanks for the insights, NotSirk.

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Date: January 19 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Wow.....Kyliegh Watts is a legend! She handled that situation way better than a heartbroken child should. I tend to read too much into things, but that felt like she was doing the right thing for her sister and family even though it hurt Les in the short term. Maybe when Les ascends she'll figure out what actually happened here. 

That being said. Being an elite's not everything is this world. It's overhyped! Bunch of hyper intelligent, probably attractive, tall, vaguely godlike (except when they're actually godlike) beings, with the ability to make you a "vassal" (whatever that is....probably just a glorified secretary), or manipulate your mind, and have a virtually unlimited amount of authority and autonomy even over their own parents......eh *apathetic shrug* Sound like a bunch of chumps if you ask me. Humans are way more interesting. I mean it sounds like elites are basically plant people. You really wanna be part plant, Ky? Like a weird broccoli-girl? That's dumb...elites are dumb. "Elites are dumb"- NotSirk 2018  you can quote that at the beginning of the next chapter. So stay strong Ky! You are already an elite! Les still has a long way to go before she can even dream of catching up! Even if she grows to 200ft tall and can shoot lightning from her eyes (which I heard from a very credible source that elites can do) that won't mean a damn thing to Kyliegh Watts! Haha!

...Oh and great chapter. 



Author's Response:

You'd be a great therapist for Ky...just the words she needs to hear right now.

Now that I think about it, she does remind me of some of your protags.

Thanks for the interesting remarks.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 17 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

These first two chapters have had great characterization for the girls. Moments like Ky assuming her future Elite status had protected her from Paisley or Les overthinking a trip to the bathroom really cement thier personalities more than just saying "Ky's charismatic and overconfident" or "Les is shy and neurotic" I like them both for different reasons. I kind of want them both to be elites even though that won't happen.

That being said: I'm guessing Les like everyone else, just because that's the most interesting outcome. It'll be fun to see if her personality changes considering her natural submissiveness and the fact she's been groomed for vassal(ship).....(hood)...(dom)?...Guessing suffixes aside, will she even be able to handle elite status? Does she even know how? And watching Ky struggle with the heartbreak of her crushed dream, she sassed her mom in the first chapter! Oh that would be the right kind of painful. Will she start to resent Les or help coach her in how an elite should act? So many possibilities! I can even imagine Les trying to be Ky's vassal anyway. That would be hilarious! So yeah that's my guess. I'd even wager Les has already shown some elite ability. How was Ky protected from Paisley's mind whatever? Why did Paisley seem more intimidated when Les interfered? What was Paisley doing in the bathroom?! Was it..............DRUGS?!?!

Enough bad jokes, and nonsense speculation. Good chapter.



Author's Response:

Lol, you made me laugh, NotSirk. I've written a few chapters ahead, and I must say...

Well, I can't give anything away. :)

Thank you for your insights!

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Date: January 16 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm liking this one. I'll be keeping my eye on it.



Author's Response:

Thanks, NotSirk.