I haven't updated this in like 5 years god damn. I write stuff, and I hope you like it. If you do leave a comment. And that's about it, really.
Really well written stuff here. Nothing like reading something from someone like you to keep an idiot like me from getting an ego.
Loved the setting, I'm sure most of us have had to deal with characters like the ones you portrayed, making it easier to connect with, and enjoy their misery.
As a more personal question, what's so bad about GTS City? I've been trying to get some more critique on my garbage and it was one of the places I considered posting it.
Being well-written isn't the final word in fiction, particularly in erotic fiction. It's a bonus, true, but there are people writing totally awesome fetish pr0n whose literary skills are, to say the least, challenged. Gator, for example, will certainly never challenge Hemingway, but he is so creative and has such a great grasp of the material that we'll forgive him almost anything (like repeatedly spelling gargantuan as garganuine).
As for the characters, I admit to doing the same thing you do (like in your magical shrinking hammer-chair story), namely, use real people as a basis for realism. I don't, as a rule, lift people whole and stick them in a story, it being a rather rude intrusion into their privacy (although I've done it a few times), but rather pick elements from their personality and combine them with elements from other people's personalities (or my own). Feels a bit like playing God, doesn't it?
Regarding GTS City, I don't want to get into too much of the squalid background, but suffice it that on the subject of censorship, I am with Abbie Hoffman. (During one interview, Hoffman was asked by a reporter if it was true that he supported total freedom of expression. Abbie agreed that was the case, to which the reporter posed the question of the classic problem of someone shouting 'fire' in a crowded theatre. Abbie's response was: "FIRE! FIRE!") The City is also part of a much larger problem in which the SW/GTS enterprises which turn a profit from the fetish quietly silence anyone who questions their hegemony of the online community. I don't care to get involved in the ugly drama, but I also don't wish to tactitly condone their behaviour, so I boycott them. Authoritarians of all stripes enjoy the phrase, "If you don't like it, leave." So I did. And as a result, this is the first story I've contributed to the general weal of the fetish community in years.
The best way to get critiques of your work is to get to know other fetish writers personally. In the old days, a bunch of us (a lot whose names are associated with what has come to be known as "the classics" of the genre, like Grildrig, Chimp Howdy, Zotster, Sally Reynolds, myself, et al.) sort of hung out together online, mostly on IRC, and read each other's work with a critical eye, improving each other's skills and basking in each other's praise. Even if you get criticism here, it likely is not going to be in a form which is useful to you as a writer: "ZOMG, MORE FEET!" or "VIOLENT GIANTESSES SUCK!" is a lot more likely than criticisms around writing style. If you ever drop by IRC, I can almost always be found in #Shrinkingwomen on DALnet.
I decided to let loose a fetish to my girlfriend, Alex. She agreed to try it, but now I owe her...
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Not exactly my cup of tea, but from what you have here it seems like someone who IS into this sort of thing would enjoy it. The characters are decently fleshed out, though I'd say using different language when describing things would make it a much more pleasant read. For example, having a female character who's a tomboy is A-Ok, lots of people like that sort of thing, but it gets a bit iffy when she gets described as having a male-ness to her looks. That tends to conjure up images of women with a 5 o' clock shadow, which I'm assuming was not your intent. Other than that, one thing that helps me a lot is to keep a thesaurus on hand to vary up your word choice, and keep things more interesting. While still not my thing, you do seem to know your way with writing a lot better than a lot of things I've read, and should keep working on it.
I was trying to hit on a sort of androgyny that bordered on masculinity, but yeah. I can get that. And I do plan to keep working, just reading around right now to see what works in certain scenes and what doesn't.
A young man meets a mysterious and exotic girl in a new houseshare. But one act of curiousity leads to him discovering an ancient secret about her.
First off let me start by saying that, while short, this was very well written. The only problems I had were with the intro. While I can appreciate wanting to get to the action part quickly, spending just a bit more time establishing setting, and your main characters would be good to lead into the rest of the story. It's normally tough to make a character seem mysterious, and not make it seem like the author was just lazy about their characterization, but you did that very well. I liked that the girl was never named as well, adding to her mystery.
Still, much better written than I had expected. Expanding just a tiny bit more on what's going on at all times, as well as the intro when establishing setting can usually help though. Once the actual action scene did start things progressed a bit faster than expected, but overall it's a good piece. Hope you do some more sometime.
Inspired by message board posts. Various shorts about big girls.
Man I was gonna comment on this a hundred years ago but I totally forgot until i saw it re-mentioned a couple of hours ago.
So, yeah. I'm really liking this. I know they're meant to be short stories, but just being a slight touch longer would be nice :>. The language and such is all gr8 though and I hope you keep it up and do something Christmas related since everyone seems to enjoy Christmas and these are all tiny and easy.
SO YEAH GO DO THAT.
NOTE: Character views expressed in this story involve serious racism and derogatory attitudes toward minorities. This is simply a plot device and IN NO WAY REPRESENTS MY PERSONAL BELIEFS AS THE AUTHOR. If you find this distasteful, read at your own risk.
A racist widow and her three daughters find a new way to express their beliefs.
Hey there, haven't read this yet, and I read your description, but I think for your own safety it'd be better if you could change this story's title and maybe the description too. At least so people are forced to read your disclaimer before fully realizing what the story is about. Not trying to censor you in any way of course, but I can guarantee a lot of people are more reactionary than me and could take offense and harass you over it.
Up to you in the end, just offering my input.
The story of an unsuspecting little wolf turned into a little fox’s teddy bear, and the nighttime adventure the two embark on ;)
If it was not readily apparent that this is a furry story, this is your warning. Continue on at your own peril.
Please make sure to use the correct categories for this and all your stories. This was missing the Furry category, but I added it. If any of your other stories needs this or any of the other new categories, please do so as well.
Be sure you know exactly who it is you're talking to before you make assumptions, or things can and will go wrong . . .
I don't know how to feel about this.
I just don't like being called by the wrong name. I'm familiar with your work, so naturally I was able to put two and two together, but I'm very territorial over my identity. It's one of the few things I have control over.
No disrespect intended.
One of my works under another account, Archanasinfinitus.devitanrt.com, no longer active.
It's about a woman entering a new world where beings known as Infinitus have enhanced height, power and abilities. It descends into wonderful foot worship, power trips, and many tawdry affairs.
Always love when the already huge character keeps getting upstaged! Foot worship and femdom is just a nice bonus on top