Reviewer: 0neGenericWord Signed
Date: December 02 2020
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Gray Skies
Honestly you're probably one of if not the best COSMIC OMNIPOTENT NIGHTMARES writers I've seen on this site. I really like how you characterize Delta's antisocialness and megalomania especially in the rare points when she doesn't have actual godhood. There's something really fun about the way you write people exploit breaking their universes, and I think that bleeds into how you invent all these horrible fates to subject humanity to. More than any of your other stories your raging horny for I Have No Mouth And I Must Scream shines through loud and clear as day.
If there's one thing I didn't like it was probably that the time dilation thing kinda falls by the wayside? We never see very huge jumps of time, or if we do they're sort of brushed over. There's no one in the real world (who isn't Delta) to really compare the sheer infinities she's subjecting everyone else to, which makes the final chapter's punch hit a little bit weaker than it should tbh. Which is a shame bc time dilation is a suuuuper cool concept and you seem to think it too.
By the way, I hate to shill other sites on here, but I think you might wanna check out Omnipotentgirls dot net, it's a GW type story hosting site but specifically for omnipotence stories, and a lot of the writers there would be riiiiiight up your alley.
Author's Response: Oh my, thank you so very much! That's all so kind of you to say. Given the nature of the setting, there were definitely many horrible fates to explore!
I think you have a good point with the time-dilation stuff. It's difficult to balance the real-world disparity when there's not many active people in that real-world world: very true. For Delta, it was perhaps more a means of trying to preserve what she has going on, although she did use its tormenting aspects at parts. Still, there was perhaps more potential I could've explored. I do like it as a concept though, and it was explored a little in "Planet Flattening" for instance. I can imagine myself using it in the future though, so we'll see what the future holds!
As to that website, I have actually heard of that site once before, and I think I might check it out.
Anyways, thanks so much for sharing your thoughts! I appreciate the feedback.