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Date: March 23 2021 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 2

The first scene helps me a little to get over the "loss" of a Samantha. As this thwarted bully scene, though quite typically, has been written expertly. Especially Sam's super-weak excuse was great.


[...]", I truth you." That's a weird statement of Jake. I hope the universe doesn't do anything strange with that one...

[...]pixie bob, and half of it was dyed blue.

It didn’t take long for him to decide that he wanted to use his powers again anyway – they were addicting. - Of course they were.

 I went for "Someone in the Crowd" to get more important characters. But I guess I won't be able to cajole enough people to my point. I just learned the vocable cajole by the way.

Author's Response:

Thanks for all your grammatical corrections ! I need to implement them, but I'll try my best !

And yeah, so far, no luck for your choices, hopefully you'll get to be among the majority someday XD

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