[Report This]Date: March 23 2021 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 2
The first scene helps me a little to get over the "loss" of a Samantha. As this thwarted bully scene, though quite typically, has been written expertly. Especially Sam's super-weak excuse was great.
[...]", I truth you." That's a weird statement of Jake. I hope the universe doesn't do anything strange with that one...
[...]pixie bob, and half of it was dyed blue.
It didn’t take long for him to decide that he wanted to use his powers again anyway – they were addicting. - Of course they were.
I went for "Someone in the Crowd" to get more important characters. But I guess I won't be able to cajole enough people to my point. I just learned the vocable cajole by the way.
Author's Response:
Thanks for all your grammatical corrections ! I need to implement them, but I'll try my best !
And yeah, so far, no luck for your choices, hopefully you'll get to be among the majority someday XD