[Report This]Date: April 11 2021 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 3
" “everyone’s used to me talking to myself like that without caring about what I say, you know, uh… Amanda?” he tried, finally remembering the brown haired, plain looking, girl’s name. " - Even if Jake misremembered Amanda's name it would always have been her name the moment he called her so anyway, or do I misinterpret his powers?
" “I better see you back in my room in ten minutes Jake,[...]"
"It wasn’t one of those paper thin walls from the South of the US, not it was really a sturdy one,[...]"
"[...], since he quickly realized that she was actually very careful not to hurt him,[...]"
Looking at the Results of the Strawpoll I seem to be impeccable in choosing the least popular choice. I don't know how to feel about that.
I am surprised that they went to bed/sex so fast I expected Jake to screw around with some guests for another chapter or two, but I am not complaining. Even if he's maybe a little to concentrated on his crush given he can change the whole world if he feels like it. But given "Giants exist" is so unpopular...
Come on Jake, "share" your luck.
Btw:
is missing
should be removed
Author's Response:
Again, thanks for the correction, I'll implement them soon !