Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: April 26 2021 1:07 AM Title: Human Necklace

You have a great story, but you need proofreading to clear up some confusing lines.

 

You have had a previous offer to proofread your story, I suggest you allow somebody {and I also offer my services} to go through and edit your story line to make it more grammatically correct.

 

Beyond that, you have a great story going on here.  Please continue.

Author's Response:

ahhh yeah im bad at proofreading, im usually tired after writing for hours i wanna just post so i can take a break and do something else but yeah i should proofread more you're right