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Reviewer: kbDArt Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 14 2023 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great erotic story. The image of the stoned girl rubbing herself as she swallowed her date unaware is pretty hot. Add to that the date being tricked and set up by the jealous sister who wasn’t exactly sure what would happen, but knew it wouldn’t be good - that’s good storytelling. 

A couple of weak points - I think there could have been more and better dialogue. Than, in regards to Jake living almost a full day within her digestive track, I think some explanation was warranted - such as the green liquid had a side effect of increasing his toughness, though that still doesn’t make up for the lack of air. I think the story might be better if he had simply lost consciousness after 15-20 minutes and the events went on as described, with him later making his exit from her bowels as expected.

Anyway, well done.

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