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Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 14 2011 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 10: Dead on Arrival

Great chapter and worth the wait. I was wondering if you might have Carly somehow torturing or humiliating Jack while she with their parents. Obviously I don't think the parents would see or know about it, But I think it would really hurt Jack emotionally to be tortured or humiliated in some way with his parents close by. But with Jack unable to ask for help or even get their attention.

Dave

 

Reviewer: deviant Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 12 2011 1:03 AM Title: Chapter 10: Dead on Arrival

been waiting for this!  Here's to hoping she gets caught, so everyone can know she's how truly demented she is and Jack gets to confront her high and mighty monstrousness.  haha.  can't wait to see where you'll take it.  This is one killer fucking story!

Reviewer: randysavage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 11 2011 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 10: Dead on Arrival

Interesting cliffhanger, in just leaving him alone in her purse.  I'm curious as to what happens next, but you havent failed to disappoint yet. 

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