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Reviewer: JT07 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05 2015 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 6

YAY! Finally! This was good I liked it. Plus, Frankie is with someone else. I wonder how Jordan is going to treat her, couldn't be worse than Sam right? You would think Sam would be worried that Frankie is missing, people are so cruel these days lol. Great addition to the story, can't wait for the next update.



Author's Response:

Thanks JT, Jordan will be a bit nicer just more playful i think :)  you will find out why sam is so cruel in one of the future chapters.  thanks for reading :) 

 

 

Reviewer: christiawi9 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 18 2015 3:22 AM Title: Bio/Chapter one

Really good story. One suggestion I'd have is to make events count and don't repeat something too often. I've seen this in other vore stories where the protagonist is eaten then regurgiated multiple times but nothing ever progresses. I really like this story and would hate to see that happen.

What would be cool is if you took the events from these chapters and fully progressed them, making them matter. For example, in the story frankie mentioned how calm Tara was about what happened. You could show how people are caring less about her as a human and more as something that can be easily eaten.

That way if you have another few chapters with vore in them you could use each chapter to build on the idea that people are seeing her less as a person. After all, how can someone be clasified as a person if they end up as a morsal so easily. Just a suggestion. 



Author's Response: Hey christiawi9 thank you for the review I appreciate the advice :). I will defiantly be adding more ideas and more development of characters as it goes on. My first few chapters were more to see if people liked my writing style and to refine it a bit before getting in to the gritty more complicated parts, my next chapter will be compleatly different ideas. Well hopefully lol - frankstergirl

Reviewer: io1908 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 14 2015 3:17 AM Title: Chapter 4

Hi Francesca, I'm Vicky. I'm so glad to see other girls in this kind of fantasy too :-)
I especially like F/f vore and mouth play and I appreciate your story, though I'm not fan of unnaware but it's ok. I hope you didn't run out of inspiration and keep up!

Author's Response: Hey Vicky thanks for the review :) I'm glad you are enjoying it! There will be less and less unaware stuff as the story goes on as the family get used to having the tiny girl around the house with them all. - frankstergirl

Reviewer: julieshrink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 21 2015 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 3

Chloe could nap.

And Frankie be digested slowly, counting every detail digestion until Frankie turn into fat and feces, and their bones expelled following day.Chloe only find out after seeing a small skeleton in the stool.

Then continue with another person shrunken. 



Author's Response:

im pretty sure she will end up fully digested at some point :) for no id like to try and get her in a few differant situations just to make it a bit of a longer story, i like your idea though, i may work out a way to add another tiny!

Reviewer: The Lurkmeister Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 21 2015 8:38 AM Title: Chapter 3

Poor Frankie. Who would have thought Chloe could have been so careless! Pretty hot chapter, loved the descriptions. Might have been nice to have more details from Frankie's point of view after she was knocked off into Chloe's fingers, but that's only a suggestion. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Author's Response: Thank you for the reveiw :) yeah I wanted to make it a really long chapter with a PoV of frankie to but didnt have the time. IT will be made up for in the next chapter hopefully :)

Reviewer: Lt_Shadow Signed [Report This]
Date: January 08 2015 5:12 PM Title: Bio/Chapter one

I would love to see a unaware buttcrush, clothed or bare



Author's Response: Thanks for your comment :) not sure when but I will defiantly be including some but crush. Chances are it will be deeper in to the story when all the current characters are aware of her.

Reviewer: The Lurkmeister Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 08 2015 2:46 PM Title: Chapter 2

Fun start. Can't wait to see where you take it.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It will be taken to as many places as I can think off, the possibilitys are almost endless!

Reviewer: julieshrink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 07 2015 3:13 PM Title: Bio/Chapter one

Very good, i love tales vore, I am looking forward to continued ...

Do not delay to continue.



Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) I will be trying to keep regular updates as best I can, but you can't rush perfection ;p

Reviewer: JT07 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2015 9:03 AM Title: Bio/Chapter one

Nice start off!!! I like it personalty ill keep reading if you keep posting.



Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) I will defiantly be keeping it going for as long as I can. Or until the ideals run out haha

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