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Reviewer: kbDArt Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 30 2023 5:00 AM Title: Faye Rising

Very good erotic story for much of it. I really like the Cherry store concept. A bit too much scat play for my taste. Also, I don't mind a good vengeance story or a bit of humiliation, but at some point, if it goes on and on, the torture begins to drift from the tiny to the reader. I think it could have if the ending was tacked on to chapter 12, it would have been a more enjoyable story.

Reviewer: jbruce19 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 13 2018 2:48 AM Title: Faye Rising

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Reviewer: adamnight Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 01 2016 1:28 PM Title: Down Under

I am just fallen in love with your stories, hope youll write again in the future.

Reviewer: KimMadCock Signed [Report This]
Date: May 23 2015 4:54 PM Title: Faye Rising

That was a great Story. I liked it a lot.

Do you take requests? I got some ideas for some toys for cherrys



Author's Response:

I always take requests and love ideas.

Feel free to drop them in a review or by email.

Glad you enjoyed the story.

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 05 2015 1:58 AM Title: Lollipops

Youre back!! :') Really curious on how this will lead to.



Author's Response:

Aye sir, enjoy the finale when you read it.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 08 2015 7:20 PM Title: Lion's Den

It's not over?!!!

Sweet!

I love this story and I like where this is headed.

Reviewer: nexter Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2015 6:43 PM Title: Delicious 'till the End

Eli is a luckyman,this is a very happy end for him!maybe not for him but for me,yes;)

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 06 2015 6:02 PM Title: While Fate Sleeps

Totally loved the last chapters where Olivia stepped into the story and especially the ending :-)

Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2015 8:52 PM Title: Poached

That was awesome, I was worried you would give it a hollywood ending with Faye rushing in for the rescue, so glad you let Oliva go through with it, that was great!

The only thing I think that would have made it better, was Eli's point of view from the moment he entered the poacher (fantastic idea by the way, using a poacher) and then his point of view entering her mouth and being swallowed.

But I'm just nit picking, from Faye tricking him to Oliva stealing and eating him, awesome job!

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 05 2015 6:22 PM Title: Poached

Olivia sure is an inconsiderate friend. Faye spent a good amount of money on her new toy, and less than 36 hours later her so called "friend" intentionally broke it. On top of that, Faye might still have had some feelings for Eli.

Reviewer: Argos Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 04 2015 6:13 PM Title: Poached

i like it;)

Reviewer: Olo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 04 2015 1:17 PM Title: While Fate Sleeps

What I find particularly demeaning is that while Eli gets to go spelunking and the ladies certainly get their jollies,  Eli can't even take credit for bringing his hostesses off.  The dildo is doing all the work, and Eli is just along for the goopy ride.

I love it.

Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 03 2015 10:21 PM Title: While Fate Sleeps

Yes! Going to be messiier and smellier.

 

Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 03 2015 10:21 PM Title: While Fate Sleeps

Yes! Going to be messiier and smellier.

 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 03 2015 9:53 PM Title: While Fate Sleeps

Wow, you post chapters fast!

I'm not much of a fan of Olivia, but I like her aggressiveness.

Looking forward for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Aborigen Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 03 2015 1:58 PM Title: Exchange Play

This was a lot of fun. Looking forward to seeing Olivia get down to business with Eli.

Reviewer: Silent-One Signed [Report This]
Date: February 02 2015 11:37 PM Title: Faye Rising

 . . . Interesting, to say the least.

If you're still accepting requests, I was hoping you'd take a longer one. I just can't do sexual scenes right, and it's really killing me. 

Basically, I was thinking of a people-shrinking equivalent to the old standby, the psychotic stalker. Our main character has an extreme lesbian crush on someone at her apartment complex, but all the other tenants keep getting in the way. One by one at first, but slowly moving on to groups, she shrinks and murders everyone standing in her way, to the increasing discomfort of her crush. Once the two of them are alone, our main character finally makes her move, only to be spurned and pull the classic "if I can't have you . . .". Ending at your discretion. 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 02 2015 7:38 PM Title: Steamy

My goodness!

I think I found a new concept that makes me want to read more. If a woman starts imagining possibilities for her little man, I keep saying 'Yes!' to each idea anticipating it.

All you stories have fantastic dialogue and it always seems so realistic! Eli has many reasons to be into it at first, and I know many couples that want to spice things up. A contract also makes it legit, becuase now it's more like an official business that hundreds or thousands of women have participated in.

I wish he was drenched in her juices rather than his own cum, but it's still a great idea. Entrapment with liquid inside. Very creative.

I feel like Candy has her own toy. She seems way to cheerful, but that's kinda how most clerks are which makes it even more realistic.

Size change, color, temperature, vibrations!!? Wow, this business has gone far!

I wish more people write entrapment stories. Most won't top your ideas but I hope these ideas can spread.

I would love to hear about other women and their experiences with their toys. That little segment from chapter 2 can be a story on its own.

I would love to read about a woman who straps a tiny man to the inside of her panties, and this guy is gagged as well. I could go on and on, but wow, this story just gives me so many ideas!

Keep it up!

I also love your little description for you story. The part of a sex toy shop for adults. That definitely lured me in to read this.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: fated11 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 01 2015 10:30 PM Title: Red Haze

Great story. Love how she traps him in his own cum

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 01 2015 8:57 AM Title: Faye Rising

Why no rating then @other reviewer :3 Awesome story!! Great length too this time, and just loved the ending. I guess Faye's reaction will be a little bir more than "ooops", when she notices what she did ;) But it was just a toy anyway right, and she had the contract telling she could do anything wit "it" she wanted, even throw it into the waste bin after "use".

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