Date: May 11 2016 10:17 PM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
Best chapter yet. SO worth the anticipation. I almost cheered for Jack when he said no.
Author's Response:
Glad to hear!
Date: May 10 2016 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
Really nice chapter! Good for Jack, finally breaking free. I can only hope it lasts....
Author's Response:
So can Jack...
[Report This]Date: May 10 2016 3:49 AM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
Miss Carly Arton should be just shy of six feet tall soon or we riot. Why don't you tell us about what happened with Jack during those five years with Carly? If Oliver Queen can become The Arrow after staying for 5 years in hell, I'm sure Jack Arton must've done something worth sharing during those five years. Why doesn't anyone want them Flashbacks? What happened after Sisterly Subjugation?
Author's Response:
Ha. There will be some size changing in the next chapter, though I won't say for who or in what direction. I actually did write about those 5 years. That's what the fourth story in this series is about.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2016 1:04 AM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
Amazing chapter, absolutely loved it, and I'm grateful for the quick update. You wrote Carly perfectly for this chapter. You captured her somewhat psychotic and twisted love and passion for Jack, one of my favorite characteristics about her, extremely well. When the chapter was building up to Carly talking about getting her life back together with Jack, part of me was hoping for Jack to reciprocate Carly's twisted love for him, but I'm also glad Jack stood up for himself and threw down the ultimatum at Carly that he will never be her property again. The emotions Carly displayed of sadness, longing and desire before Jack's ultimatum, as well as her break down and anguish afterwards were also really well done, some of the best writing to date. Although as you said, Carly is not out of this yet, and it'll be interesting to see what will happen with her next. Also wonder what will happen with Jack now, as well as Sophie. Before the whole kidnapping, I was predicting/hoping Jack would develop a relationship with Sophie where Jack finds resolution for, and satisfies, his lust and desire for feet, but still retaining his humanity since its with someone who actually loves and cares for him in an honest and positive way. But after the reintroduction of Carly, I dunno what to expect/ what I want to happen, but I trust where you will take this story. Amazing work so far, always glad to read your work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the in depth review! The hint of a lustful relationship with Sophie's feet at the end of that other chapter was more to symbolize Jack's residual need to resolve things with Carly, but I can understand the expectation there. I like to keep people guessing.
Date: May 09 2016 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
silly Jack. Sororicide was the correct judgement.
masterfully written though, good sir!
Author's Response:
Thanks very much!
[Report This]Date: May 09 2016 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
I never do, though part of me thinks she'll end up with Claire underfoot somehow...maybe Michelle too.
Author's Response:
I won't ruin it for now, but Carly will be slightly happier in the next chapter than she was in this one.
Date: May 09 2016 8:03 AM Title: Chapter 19: Sister vs. Brother
Jesus Christ she's some kind of crazy. Do all your antagonists have untreated mental illness?
Author's Response:
Just the most popular ones. ;)