Reviews For Jewels Of The Sky
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Reviewer: lancealot501 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 06 2016 8:32 AM Title: Chapter Three

Finally glad that we are getting a sense of how big these ladies are. Some things seemed off about their entire situation but I'm sure the next bunch of chapters will sort everything out. I can already see that this is going to be a very vast and complex story and I'm liking every bit of it. Kinda reminds me of Nova Force.

Lastly I'd like to give some professional advice on'radio communication'.

Over-you have finished speaking and are waiting a response.
Out- you have finished a transmission and are not expecting a reply. Think of hanging up a phone.
Over and out- never used because it's redundant. Hollywood is to blame for this. Basically you are saying I want a response but I'm done talking to you.
And lastly every individual would have a unique call sign that wouldn't be their name(for security reasons) typically if your just talking with one person then you would only identify yourself and the other person for the first time. After that you would just say over at the end until you are done with the transmission.

Author's Response:

It's rare that I find reviews this helpful. Now I know I'll have to rewrite parts of the chapter. But that's a good thing. Maybe I'll do a render of one of your stories as a thanks over the weekend. I'm liking your reviews.

Reviewer: GiantessLover122 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 31 2015 6:28 PM Title: Chapter Three

I wasn't aware of the email receiving function if I fsvorite someone, but I check the site multiple times a day so I don't really think I need the emails.

Phoneomal chapter by the way.

Shall I beg some more for you? :P



Author's Response:

You can beg if you wish. I'm not sure that this chapter was phoneomal. There wasn't really any action.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: August 31 2015 9:17 AM Title: Chapter Three

Boobies, the ultimate in psychological warfare!



Author's Response:

Well, unless you're a strictly hetrosexual woman. This story has been fun to write so far. I hope it can inspire new writers. Feels like I'm just writing it for two or three people though. Ten people have me as a favourite author and I've heard nothing from them.

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