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Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 17 2017 1:56 PM Title: 'Toys'

Will the Mother and her tan pumps step on something else? Maybe a random insect.
Hoping,
Diesel

Author's Response:

Ha, ha aaaaah, Ha - Well, ...I don't know!   But, I DO KNOW, that she IS, gonna put her foot down, and very firmly too! Lol! But, not in the way that you're thinking... heh heh he...h.

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 17 2017 3:31 AM Title: 'Toys'

You describe Maxine and her surroundings very well. It's easy to picture it. The two girls playing with their little man was great. Loved the Mother saying that she would take him away. Love, love, love her tan colored suede leather pumps. I hope she steps on the cat. Love her shoes.
I can hardly wait to see where you go with this and what is Dr. Harrison up to?
Her taping on the purse and saying hope your comfortable tiny one was also great. As if his comfort was a real concern of hers.
Great chapter, very descriptive and full of little things. Please let the Mother step on the cat.
Later,
Diesel

Author's Response:

  Thank's D!   I was hoping that image would come to mind! (Ha!) But, no, I don't think that she will actually step on the Cat, he's a very agile little feline.  And, I don't think he's going to get squashed that easily! Lol! The Cat has a special part in the story, that's yet to be revealed, so...

 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2017 11:52 PM Title: 'Toys'

What a clever chapter title. I like it. Each word representing soemthing important in this chapter.

I love the little intro with Maxine. Now I know what happened to Tom and I like it. She literally traps him in her sweaty used pantyhose and then stuffs that in her purse pocket. Now that's a sexy trap. Imagine him waking up. Tom better get used to that smell.

That first part with Angela "unsnapping" her jeans sounded hot. For a second, I thought she had a tiny with her. Also the phrase "waistband of her skin-tight blue jeans, ...snuggly hugging her wide, shapely hips." is super sexy. Just thinking about dropping a man into the "waistband of her skin-tight blue jeans, ...snuggly hugging her wide, shapely hips." Would be perfect.

Wait, so these girls got a toy man? A real one? If yes, I hope the mom eventually takes him. Little girls will use the man in inefficient ways. I bet the mother has more practical uses for this little man.

This cat is getting a lot more attention that I thought. Does this cat represent soemthing? I know this cat will somehow impact the story, but I don't know how. Also, poor cat. Getting shrunk like that feels cruel. But for a random guy, I totally approve the shrinking.

Why did that girl step on the cheeseburger if she wanted her sister to see bug on it? By stepping on it, the bug is gone and her sister won't freak out....so she ruined the prank she was planning?? This girl makes no sense.

Also, who's mother makes their girl eat a flattened sandwich that was on the floor? Usually it's the other way around. The kid wants to eat the burger but the mother says it's filled with germs and such. What a bad mother, now I don't think she should get the tiny man. In addition, if the food was stepped on, you could get another one served for free, or at least a discount. This is ridiculous. It's just a burger, the girls shouldn't eat them anyway and the mom should be glad her girl doesn't want to eat it.

Lol. Angela decides to leave when the mom forces her daughter to eat the sandwich. If that was me, I would have watched the whole thing and write an article of horrible parenting and why most family arguments are silly.

Ok, that burger scene really got to me and I know it was just some background context.

Well, I hope this Angela is important. I know she is important, but we still don't even know much about her and what is going to happen to her. Hopefully, we learn Angela's importance next chapter. Lots of speculation about Angela at the moment.

Speaking of tinies and how Angela feels horny all the time, I can't wait for the adventure of Thomas Speedman to continue! (I love saying his name!)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

This was more of a 'size fetish' thing, comparisons...  from Angela's perspective.  The Cat does however, represent something, you have a keen sense of persection Tom.  The next chapter will reveal a little bit more.

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