Date: February 19 2017 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 13
Dude LOVE your work, the vore was spot on. Loving the story build and progress, would like to see more body exploration and some explicit scenes. But overall I'm really enjoying it, been a long time since I've read a good story :D
Author's Response:
Thank you! As for BE and explicit scenes, we'll get there. ;) I've got a few things in mind. I appreciate the review!
[Report This]Date: February 13 2017 5:21 AM Title: Chapter 13
I loved the amount of vore in this chapter!
But I'm at work and I didn't need an erection. So, screw you. Thank you, but screw you ;)
Author's Response: Hahaha!!! Next time, don't read a chapter where Tor will be pissed at a human other than Eric while you're at work. Problem solved. ;) Thanks for the review and a chuckle to start my day.
[Report This]Date: February 13 2017 1:46 AM Title: Chapter 13
Thanks for the quick update! Nice chapter indeed. I feel kind of sorry for the watch captain. It seems odd that they had no real backup plan, because they should have definitely expected Tor to give chase. Or maybe the watch captain was just that desperate to get Eric back after what he endured.
I love the vore part and was looking forward to it, though I was expecting to hear the kidnappers beg for their lives before being mercilessly eaten alive. They didn't even get to say a single word. I would've liked that part to be a little longer truthfully.
I'm looking forward to what happens next!
Author's Response: I admit, I rushed that sequence a bit. It was right before supper and I was trying to get it finished so I could eat. I may go back and tweak that later. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the review. It's always appreciated.
[Report This]Date: February 12 2017 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 13
"My people are peaceful." Proceeds to brutally execute several people, who in their defense had no choice in the matter as they would have been killed either way by Fletcher. Not that Tor cared to actually ask before committing another mass murder.
People are okay with becoming pets? Stockholm syndrome is confusing.
I wonder why eating peope seems to be Elders preferred method of execution. I mean, humans developed many methods of execution designed to bring about death quickly and painlessly. The guillotine, the shortened hangmans noose, the curved headman's ax. Mostly because it isn't in human nature to want to torture someone to death. If someone has to die, let it be quick. Elders seem to have a penchant for both mass slaughter and mass pain. A rather brutal race.
But I cannot wait to see how Tor deals with her brothers.
Author's Response:
Well, eating people is Tor's preferred method of execution. Not necessarily all Elders. And if you do some research on being put to death by boats, Fletcher makes Tor look saintly. Frankly, he makes her look like a saint period. His character will be explored in upcoming chapters. He's not a nice guy. At all.
As for Tor dealing with her brothers, that's coming soon! Thanks for reviewing! I always look forward to your thoughts on a chapter. :)
Date: February 12 2017 6:04 PM Title: Chapter 13
I'd be on the fence regarding romance as well. Their relationship seems more maternal than outright loving.
At the same time, romance doesn't have to be... um... romantic. It can just be two friends helping each other out with a purely practical need - seeing as Eric is already a Casanova, and Tor is so pragmatic, that dynamic might work with these characters' personalities.
Of course, whether you have it or not, I'll still love this story!
Date: February 12 2017 5:39 PM Title: Chapter 13
MFW Tor and Eric are reunited: https://imgur.com/kQyhwAc
MFW Tor bites off a guy's arm: https://media.giphy.com/media/QSMBLRAHZTLkQ/giphy.gif
I don't like gore myself, but it's interesting how you dealt with it - a lot of gore fans tend to treat blood as if it were juice, so it's interesting to read about how disgusting and hard-to-remove it is for once
Again, I'm surprised by how young a character is... when I said I thought she was either late 20's or early 30's, I was leaning toward the 29-33 age-range. Then again, I have a thing for much older women and much younger gys, so that's probably just my bias showing.
Also can I ask, how the hell do you write so fast??? I've been trying to write smut myself and I always spend weeks or even months on a single chapter!
Finally, just because it bears repeating; Tor + Eric = hella cute this chapter!
Author's Response:
I have an outline I'm working off of. :) I have certain points I plan to hit and have them lined out. I even have the last two chapters written already. Now it's a matter of working my way there. As for the smut...hehe I may be a little messed up in the head so letting it out on paper is a release. I've been working on this chapter since around 11 this morning. I'm not a huge hard-vore/gore fan so that's why I chose to have Tor deal with bodily fluids in that way. Plus, like you said, it's different. I try not to be like every other writer and have the same formula for stories. I try to be unique and creative.
I'm glad you think that Tor and Eric are super cute. I think they are, too! I'm on the fence about romance between them. I'm currently leaning towards no romance. If they do develop such a relationship, it will be slower in coming. That's not to say there won't be tension. There would be tension galore. Just nothing acted on. I'm thankful for you taking the time to read and review my work. It always makes me smile when I see a review from one of my regular readers.