[Report This]Date: August 27 2017 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
Forgot my 10:10 rating! Lol.
Date: August 27 2017 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
Awesome! The way you write bro is so incredible! I just love it! The way Pey gets her friends involved is a breath of fresh air! You keep this up I'm gonna start paying you for stories!! Lol keep up the great work! Cheers!
Author's Response: I'm glad you are enjoying it. Definitely more chapters to come. Probably today or tomorrow
Date: August 27 2017 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 5
Love Sabrina. Great chapter. Loved how she found a candy bar and still couldn't eat it. Then Sabrina gives her a chance and then takes it away. Awesome.
The gum scene was great. She's so worthless.
I still think a great ending would be that she escapes, finds a teacher and bangs her fists on the side of her higheeled shoe. The teacher looks down and says what do we have here, before her hand reaches down and envelopes her. Just as she thinks that she has freedom it's taken away as the teacher takes her home and puts her in a hamster cage.
Just a thought,
Diesel
Author's Response: Sabrina is one of my favorite characters. The ending isn't written yet so that is a possibility. A story is always fluid till it's done.
[Report This]Date: August 26 2017 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 5
I love Peyton's Posse too.
Author's Response: The dream team